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Durrani Abid · #**171** Thursday, April 11, 2013

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Originally Posted by Manzar baloch

i am a beginner. please guide me that how i can make a good essay. infact the problem that i am facing is lack of information. now look at you essay outline, you have incaptured almost all information that is needed for a good essay. my quary is that how one can be efficent in making impressive outlines on a unconventional topic. if i am asked to write a essay on energy crises, role of agriculture in economy, foreign policy of pakistan, it seems easy to me to write on it but if i am asked to write a essay on gender equality, women in the eye of islam or such type of essays, it seems imposible for me to gather data within minutes. please help me out to tackle this sitution.

Dear
what I understand you suffer from the dearth of reading,specially on social issues.
Healthy Writing depends upon Healthy Reading.
Read good books,articles,essays as much as possible and this will increase the dimensions of you mind and the hurdles you face right now will be remove.InshAllah(Shifa hogi)

Stay blessed

Manzar baloch · #**172** Thursday, April 11, 2013

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Originally Posted by Durrani Abid

Dear
what I understand you suffer from the dearth of reading,specially on social issues.
Healthy Writing depends upon Healthy Reading.
Read good books,articles,essays as much as possible and this will increase the dimensions of you mind and the hurdles you face right now will be remove.InshAllah(Shifa hogi)

Stay blessed

Thx.
infact i am not reading urdu since long. Due to lack of reading on litrature makes one poor in understanding. although i read english columns on daily basis along with exploration of wikipedia on various topics but it is hard to grasp every point written in english contrary to written in urdu.

shakeel ghori · #**173** Thursday, April 11, 2013

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Originally Posted by Manzar baloch

i am a beginner. please guide me that how i can make a good essay. infact the problem that i am facing is lack of information. now look at you essay outline, you have incaptured almost all information that is needed for a good essay. my quary is that how one can be efficent in making impressive outlines on a unconventional topic. if i am asked to write a essay on energy crises, role of agriculture in economy, foreign policy of pakistan, it seems easy to me to write on it but if i am asked to write a essay on gender equality, women in the eye of islam or such type of essays, it seems imposible for me to gather data within minutes. please help me out to tackle this sitution.

For writing good essay on any topic, you need to have knowledge about that topic. First read the title of essay carefully then search it on internet or any other source. Try to learn as much as you can about your essay topic. Then you will find it easy to make outline of that topic. Above all, you have to keep up making outline of same essays in different ways. It will enable you to understand how the information about a topic can be gethered, recalled and organised in a suitable, eloquent and comprehensible manner.

Regards.

mehjabeen karim · #**174** Thursday, April 11, 2013

Plz checkout my essay outline then i do further.
DEMOCRACY
OUTLINE
1.Introduction.
2.Origin of democracy.
3.Democracy concept by different philosopher.
4. Pre-requisite of successful democracy.
5.Successful democratic countries.
6.Significance of democracy in developed and under developing countries.
7.Advantages of democracy.
8.Discripancies/ Disadvantages of democracy.
9.Purpose of democracy.
10.Conclusion.

shakeel ghori · #**175** Thursday, April 11, 2013

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Originally Posted by mehjabeen karim

Plz checkout my essay outline then i do further.
DEMOCRACY
OUTLINE
1.Introduction.
2.Origin of democracy.
3.Democracy concept by different philosophers.
4. Pre-requisite of successful democracy.
5.Successful democratic countries.
6.Significance of democracy in developed and under (You cannot use the word 'under' with developing.) developing countries.
7.Advantages of democracy.
8.Discripancies/ Disadvantages of democracy.
9.Purpose of democracy.
10.Conclusion.

Nice attempt. Your outline is quite precise.

Aimen khakwani · #**176** Thursday, April 11, 2013

Gender Equality is a Myth.
1- Introduction.
• What is Gender Equality?

2- Facts: - Yes, Gender equality is a myth. This is evident from following facts.
• No woman is appointed as head of state until now In United State of America or India. These are called biggest democratic states.
• The Global Gender Gap Report 2012 provides a comprehensive overview of current performance and progress over the last six years. No country in the world has achieved gender equality. The four highest ranked countries—Iceland, Finland, Norway and Sweden—have closed between 80 and 86% of their gender gaps, while the lowest ranked country—Yemen—has closed a little over half of its gender gap.
• A published global survey that lists Pakistan as the third worst country in the world for women.
Thus, it may be inferred that from acid attacks in Asia to the economic inequity between genders in the U.S., women face a vast array of discriminatory practices and human right violations worldwide.

3- Causes of gender inequality :-
Economic Causes:-
• Women Economic dependence on man.
• Limited access to Cash and credit.

Political Causes;-
• Lack of implementation of laws.
• Inadequate representation of women in Politics.
• Insensitive treatment by Police and Judiciary.

Socio Cultural Factors:-
• Patriarchal mind setup.
• Illiteracy.
• Poverty.
• Misrepresentation of Islamic teachings. (belief in the inherent superiority of males.)
• Heinous Cultural practices.

Effects of Gender inequality:-

• Poor economic development of the country.
• Lack of trust on Government.
• Social unrest.
• Feeling of deprivation among women.

Strategies to bring the change in the condition of women ;-

• Education.
• Role of government.
• Media.
• Role of religious leaders.
• International community.

Conclusion.

Pakistan is in state of gender inequality. Women’s inferior status to men exists in all strata of Pakistani society. The reasons and manifestations of the inequality differ quite considerably as we move from one socio-economic class and region to another. The global gender gap report 2012 states that no country has attained gender equality completely. Moreover, this report ranked Pakistan as the third worst country in the world for women. The issue of gender inequality has frequently been raised internationally on the evidence that a nation cannot progress when a vast segment of society is deprived of its due share and not allowed to play its role properly. The causes of gender inequality are multifarious. Most importantly, the main cause of gender equality is economic dependence of woman on man and limited access to cash and credit. Besides these economic factors, there are some political causes that increased the magnitude of gender inequality in the country. In adequate representation of woman in politics is the chief cause of gender inequality. No woman is appointed as head of the state, even in USA or India which are democratic countries, is an ample fact to proof that gender equality is a myth. Socially, Gender inequality is directly proportional to patriarchal mindset up and poverty. Heinous culture practices are also restricting the woman to attain the heights of glory. Misrepresentation of Islamic teachings by narrow minded mullahs in Islamic countries is a religious factor that contributed towards gender inequality. Consequently, gender inequality limits productivity and ultimately slows economic growth. It sows the seeds of hatred towards government and deprivation among women. Therefore, It is the need of the hour that government should devise strategies that promotes gender equality in the society. Lastly, education should be the government’s top priority to combat the effects of gender inequality. Only dedicated and serious efforts are needed to overcome the dragon of gender disparity.

Please evaluate my attempt sidra , shakeel bhai and ahmad bhai.

I read all members's attempt. Well. i must say shakeel bhai and ahmad bhai you both are doing great job. keep it Up. An advice to sidra :- Some csps told me either to favor topic or totally negate it. One should not adopt mid way So this is a kind advice for you otherwise your attempt is praiseworthy.

sidra naveed · #**177** Thursday, April 11, 2013

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Originally Posted by Aimen khakwani

Gender Equality is a Myth.
1- Introduction.
• What is Gender Equality?

2- Facts: - Yes, Gender equality is a myth. This is evident from following facts.
• No woman is appointed as head of state until now In United State of America or India. These are called biggest democratic states.
• The Global Gender Gap Report 2012 provides a comprehensive overview of current performance and progress over the last six years. No country in the world has achieved gender equality. The four highest ranked countries—Iceland, Finland, Norway and Sweden—have closed between 80 and 86% of their gender gaps, while the lowest ranked country—Yemen—has closed a little over half of its gender gap.
• A published global survey that lists Pakistan as the third worst country in the world for women.
Thus, it may be inferred that from acid attacks in Asia to the economic inequity between genders in the U.S., women face a vast array of discriminatory practices and human right violations worldwide ( Didn't get these points)

3- Causes of gender inequality :-
Economic Causes:-
• Women's Economic dependence on man.
• Limited access to Cash and credit.

Political Causes;-
• Lack of implementation of laws.
• Inadequate representation of women in Politics.
• Insensitive treatment by Police and Judiciary.

Socio Cultural Factors:-
• Patriarchal mind setup.
• Illiteracy.
• Poverty.
• Misrepresentation of Islamic teachings. (belief in the inherent superiority of males.)
• Heinous Cultural practices.

Effects of Gender inequality:-

• Poor economic development of the country.
• Lack of trust on Government.
• Social unrest.
• Feeling of deprivation among women.

Strategies to bring the change in the condition of women ;-

• Education.
• Role of government.
• Media.
• Role of religious leaders.
• International community.

Conclusion.

Pakistan is in state of gender inequality. Women’s inferior status to men exists in all strata of Pakistani society. The reasons and manifestations of the inequality differ quite considerably as we move from one socio-economic class and region to another. The global gender gap report 2012 states that no country has attained gender equality completely. Moreover, this report ranked Pakistan as the third worst country in the world for women. The issue of gender inequality has frequently been raised internationally on the evidence that a nation cannot progress when a vast segment of society is deprived of its due share and not allowed to play its role properly. The causes of gender inequality are multifarious. Most importantly, the main cause of gender equality is economic dependence of woman on man and limited access to cash and credit. Besides these economic factors, there are some political causes that increased the magnitude of gender inequality in the country. In adequate (Inadequate)representation of woman in politics is the chief cause of gender inequality. No woman is appointed as head of the state, even in USA or India which are democratic countries, is an ample fact to proof that gender equality is a myth. Socially, Gender inequality is directly proportional to patriarchal mindset up and poverty. Heinous culture practices are also restricting the woman to attain the heights of glory. Misrepresentation of Islamic teachings by narrow minded mullahs in Islamic countries is a religious factor that contributed towards gender inequality. Consequently, gender inequality limits productivity and ultimately slows economic growth. It sows the seeds of hatred towards government and deprivation among women. Therefore, It is the need of the hour that government should devise strategies that promotes gender equality in the society. Lastly, education should be the government’s top priority to combat the effects of gender inequality. Only dedicated and serious efforts are needed to overcome the dragon of gender disparity.

Please evaluate my attempt sidra , shakeel bhai and ahmad bhai.

overall it is very good attempt as you have proved your stance factualy.. great job.

Ahmed Faisal · #**178** Friday, April 12, 2013

[QUOTE=Aimen khakwani;585575]Gender Equality is a Myth.
1- Introduction.
• What is Gender Equality?

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2- Facts: - Yes, Gender equality is a myth. This is evident from following facts.
• No woman is appointed as head of state until now In United State of America or India. These are called biggest democratic states.
• The Global Gender Gap Report 2012 provides a comprehensive overview of current performance and progress over the last six years. No country in the world has achieved gender equality. The four highest ranked countries—Iceland, Finland, Norway and Sweden—have closed between 80 and 86% of their gender gaps, while the lowest ranked country—Yemen—has closed a little over half of its gender gap.
• A published global survey that lists Pakistan as the third worst country in the world for women.
Thus, it may be inferred that from acid attacks in Asia to the economic inequity between genders in the U.S., women face a vast array of discriminatory practices and human right violations worldwide.

You need not give details in your outline. It must be a part of your introduction or later paragraphs...

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3- Causes of gender inequality :-
Economic Causes:-
• Women Economic dependence on man.
• Limited access to Cash and credit. (I think you first point has served the purpose so you may exclude it or put some better heading)

Political Causes;-
• Lack of implementation of laws.
• Inadequate representation of women in Politics.
• Insensitive treatment by Police and Judiciary.

Socio Cultural Factors:-
• Patriarchal mind setup.
• Illiteracy.
• Poverty.
• Misrepresentation of Islamic teachings. (belief in the inherent superiority of males.)
• Heinous( this word is little harsh) Cultural practices.

Effects of Gender inequality:-

• Poor economic development of the country.
• Lack of trust on Government.
• Social unrest.
• Feeling of deprivation among women.

Strategies to bring the change in the condition of women ;-

• Education.
• Role of government.
• Media.
• Role of religious leaders.
• International community.

Conclusion.

Impressive and really good points...

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Pakistan is in state of gender inequality.( examiner is not asking you to write on gender inequality in Pakistan, your this sentence must be changed i.e. the most obvious problem confronting the world is gender inequality ) Women’s inferior status to men exists in all strata of Pakistani society.(again the same mistake) The reasons and manifestations of the inequality differ quite considerably as we move from one socio-economic class and region to another. The global gender gap report 2012 states that no country has attained gender equality completely.( According to Global Gender Gap Report 2012, there is still no country who has attained gender equality in real terms) Moreover, this report ranked Pakistan as the third worst country in the world for women. The issue of gender inequality has frequently been raised internationally on the evidence that a nation cannot progress when a vast segment of society is deprived of its due share and are not allowed to play its role properly. The causes of gender inequality are multifarious. Most importantly, the main cause of gender equality is economic dependence of woman on man and limited access to cash and credit(elaborate it). Besides these economic factors, there are some political causes that increased the magnitude of gender inequality in the country.(you should broaden your circle, and don,t focus only on Pakistan) In adequate(Inadequate) representation of woman in politics is the chief cause of gender inequality. No woman is appointed as head of the state, even in USA or(and) India which are democratic countries, is an ample fact to proof that gender equality is a myth.( restructure this sentence) Socially, Gender inequality is directly proportional to patriarchal mindset up and poverty. Heinous culture practices are also restricting the woman to attain the heights of glory. Misrepresentation of Islamic teachings by some of the narrow minded mullahs in Islamic countries is a religious factor that contributed towards gender inequality. Consequently, gender inequality limits productivity and ultimately slows economic growth. It sows the seeds of hatred towards government and deprivation among women. Therefore, It is the need of the hour(need of the hour is) that government(which government, it is a problem of the world) should devise strategies that promotes gender equality in the society. Lastly, education should be the government’s top priority to combat the effects of gender inequality. Only dedicated and serious efforts are needed to overcome the dragon of gender disparity.

Nice attempt, many points are just outstanding. But you are lacking the organization, and time and again you are getting off the topic. foucs on you sentence structure and clarity. Overall a well-done work.

shakeel ghori · #**179** Friday, April 12, 2013

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Originally Posted by Aimen khakwani

Gender Equality is a Myth.
1- Introduction.
• What is Gender Equality?

2- Facts: - Yes, Gender equality is a myth. This is evident from following facts.
• No woman is appointed as head of state until now In United State of America or India. These are called biggest democratic states.
• The Global Gender Gap Report 2012 provides a comprehensive overview of current performance and progress over the last six years. No country in the world has achieved gender equality. The four highest ranked countries—Iceland, Finland, Norway and Sweden—have closed between 80 and 86% of their gender gaps, while the lowest ranked country—Yemen—has closed a little over half of its gender gap.
• A published global survey that lists Pakistan as the third worst country in the world for women.
Thus, it may be inferred that from acid attacks in Asia to the economic inequity between genders in the U.S., women face a vast array of discriminatory practices and human right violations worldwide.
You cannot write in detail in outline.
3- Causes of gender inequality :-
Economic Causes:-
• Women Economic dependence on man.
• Limited access to Cash and credit.

Political Causes;-
• Lack of implementation of laws.
• Inadequate representation of women in Politics.
• Insensitive treatment by Police and Judiciary.

Socio Cultural Factors:-
• Patriarchal mind setup(Mindset).
• Illiteracy.
• Poverty.
• Misrepresentation of Islamic teachings. (belief in the inherent superiority of males.)
• Heinous Cultural practices.

Effects of Gender inequality:-

• Poor economic development of the country.
• Lack of trust on Government.
• Social unrest.
• Feeling of deprivation among women.

Strategies to bring the change in the condition of women ;-

• Education.
• Role of government.
• Media.
• Role of religious leaders.
• International community.

Conclusion.

Pakistan is in state of gender inequality. Women’s inferior status to men exists in all strata of Pakistani society. (I will also give you the same suggestion which Faisal has given. Don't confine yourself to Pakistan. The issue is global. You can write in Pakistan's context only when asked so) The reasons and manifestations of the inequality differ quite considerably as we move from one socio-economic class and region to another. The global gender gap report 2012 states that no country has (so far) attained gender equality completely. Moreover, this report ranked Pakistan as the third worst country in the world for women. The issue of gender inequality has frequently been raised internationally on the evidence (grounds) that a nation cannot progress when a vast segment of society is deprived of its due share and not allowed to play its role properly. The causes of gender inequality are multifarious. Most importantly, the main cause of gender equality is economic dependence of woman on man and limited access to cash and credit. Besides these economic factors, there are some political causes that increased the magnitude of gender inequality in the country. In adequate representation of woman in politics is the chief cause of gender inequality. No woman is appointed as head of the state, even in USA or India which are democratic countries, is an ample fact to proof (prove) that gender equality is a myth. Socially, Gender inequality is directly proportional to patriarchal mindset up and poverty. Heinous culture (cultural) practices are also restricting the woman to attain the heights of glory. Misrepresentation of Islamic teachings by narrow minded mullahs in Islamic countries is a religious factor that contributed towards gender inequality. Consequently, gender inequality limits productivity and ultimately slows [down the] economic growth. It sows the seeds of hatred towards government and deprivation among women. Therefore, It is the need of the hour that government should devise strategies that promotes gender equality in the society. Lastly, education should be the government’s top priority(top priority of government) to combat the effects of gender inequality. Only dedicated and serious efforts are needed to overcome the dragon(Appropriate words are: monster, menace, threat, peril etc.)of gender disparity.

Please evaluate my attempt sidra , shakeel bhai and ahmad bhai.

I read all members's attempt. Well. i must say shakeel bhai and ahmad bhai you both are doing great job. keep it Up. An advice to sidra :- Some csps told me either to favor topic or totally negate it. One should not adopt mid way So this is a kind advice for you otherwise your attempt is praiseworthy.

Your attempt is praiswrothy. I have tried to point out few of your mistakes. You are doing a good job. Your expression is attractive. Keep it up.

shakeel ghori · #**180** Friday, April 12, 2013

Everyone is requested to attempt this essay:

Higher Science Education in the developing countries

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