My outline on Great Nations Win Without Fighting

[jafferbhutto]

My outline on Great Nations Win Without Fighting:

- I started with Hazrat Adam a.s and then discussed ancient history of conflicts and wars

- Causes of conflicts n wars (Brief History of all wars and their outcomes)

- Discussed and compared arab spring with European countries

- Then gave examples of developed countries (Like Japan and France as they have progressed well after their conflicting histories of wars and revolutions)

- Then I came to Pakistan fron 1947 till now ..

- The wars and the problems with its neighboring countries (India,Afghanistan,Iran)

- What should be done and what should not be done (Better but not Bitter relations with all countries especially neighbouring countries)

- They should learn from the countries like Japan and France ..

- Good relations for the development of the nation as Great Nations win without Fighting .. !!


How was it.. ?? Please give your valubale comments .. !!

[Roshnain Swati]

You didnt hit the core of the essay. Most of your outline is tangential to the topic..

If we decipher the essay, we have three important terms to keep our focus on

1. Great Nations (We cant discuss people or even tribes etc)
2. Win
3. Without fighting

Elaborate each part and you are done..Like Definition of great nation, What determines their greatness - again mention and discuss few things like economic prosperity, technological advancements etc etc ), then what win means -- Is it only war ?

Then discuss the reasons why nations fight (though this is a bit irrelevant, it will help your essay flow to the next part - Can greatness be maintained without fighting )

You may also discuss what are the alternatives if a nation is not to fight?

Then conclude.

Wherever possible, give examples.

Let more expert opinions flow in.

[maryam firdos]

my outline:

what is a win?
not the subjugation of people
educational progress
economic prosperity
friendly neighbours
peace
(i discussed few points more; currently cant recollect)
great nations which won without fighting:
establishment of Pakistan
prosperity of china
nations which are losing due to fighting:
America is losing
hunger: 5 lakh children sleep with empty belly
economic muddles: shut down
soldiers losing lives in afghanistan..........few more points
egypt is losing
life, property nothing is safe
pakistan is losing
more than 40,000 deaths in war on terror
billions have been spent on war on terror
no peace
economic decline .........few more points
recommendations
talks with terrorists
pens instead of guns
apt role of international organizations
(many other points)
conclusion

[Abid khan Achakzai]

sorry i think your essay is not according to demanded essay.

[students]

see outlines of following members for comparison.
Nadia from Karachi.
Samar from Lahore.

[sikander kalhoro]

My outlines of the above essay: (I'm writing the outlines by disagreeing the phrase)

1. Introduction
2. No nation becomes great without fighting
3. Struggle for the fight always results into 'win'
4. A retrospective look to the historical fights
4.1: Greek city-state 'peloponessian war'
4.2 French Revolution
4.3 American Civil war
4.4 Struggle for independence of Pakistan
5. Conclusion

[lalaps]

You are little out of the topic but, according to me it really depends that how much examiner is impressed with your views .although your point of view is quite comprehensive but if you had mentioned about the great nations and their policies to progress like educational policies health etc and narrating with developed nations quoting the history but not history only then it may be a sound essay .but my wishes are with you because no one knows what examiner likes .
Good luck
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[lalaps]

I liked your negating outline sir if you don't mind would you please mention here your introductory paragraph ?

[Maqsood Qadir]

Sir plz discuss your outlines in a little bit

[sikander kalhoro]

Please use the 'quote' option so it could be obvious that whom you are talking to.