CHECK MY ESSAY: A state without law and justice can not prevail!

[Travolta]

Assalam o Allaykum
Thanks to Administrators those who activated my account and provided me an opportunity to be a part of this prestigious environment helping CSS Aspirants.
Though i am a 50 -50 CSS aspirant but i will share my own written essays over here so that senior members and perfects in the art of essay writing can help raise my standards ! so here goes my first essay ..!

A state without law and justice can not prevail

Greek philosopher Aristotle in 350 BC quoted that “ the rule of law is better than the rule of any individual”. It strikes hard the mind of one who really can think about, and question straight away arises “what is law “? To the very best law can be defined as the protocol or set of procedures which governs the functionality. In very simple statement l aw can be defined or declared as the cause explainer,which simplifies and justifies some action around. It is always explained in or setup in institutional manner
Logic makes things very clear so as the law does the same thing. To apply of rules we need involvement of institutions which always have a basic responsibility of smoothening the functionality of maximum things happening around. So basic need of law is to keep running the institutions smoothly with out any disorder.
Law is very important and acts as basic and primary necessity of human beings.Major reason behind this fact is that law is the defining factor for politics ,economics,society and values related to society as al these collectively belong to humans. A set of well defined laws always play a positive roles in the development of any particular society and bad laws always do the opposite creating anarchy and disorder in the society.
The term justice is an action for the well defined law.justice is the placement of things according o their justification and orders.in society justice defines the relationship and places the functions in right order.so it is now understood that law and justice are defining and governing phenomenon of a system and without it there will be a no force of bond for correct working of the system.
Law and justice can only be practiced if the sense of good and bad is very clear among the system elements . moreover this sense must be a universally accepted code for institutions of a state.think of law and justice as a compact box and it will look like as a differentiating factor in that system by making implementations by force of justice.
Law and justice are directly involved in setting up the pace of institutes of a state. Law regulates the operations of institutions by providing a protocol set to follow and justice maintains the balance.administritaive law ,human rights ,trade ,health and international law ,these all regulate the respective departments of a state for their true working . so whenever consideration of law is found weak in instutions of a state then there prevails injustice or law of individuals for personal benefits. this situation always reduces the efficiency factor of institutions and promotes the chances of corruption and rule of individuals .when collective efficiency of all institutions of a state is not up to the mark then progress becomes dream .
Examples are out in form of countries like Pakistan and India which are badly indulged in bad law practices .though Pakistan has managed to lift up the standards by restoring the deposed chief justice and his crew ,but still there are issues of corruption regarding law disorder. on the other hand countries like Saudi Arabia through its strict law and justice system has over overcame the problems and now are on the path of steady progress.
If internal system of a state is not upto the standards and not working in accordance with the law and justice ,hen there are no chances of getting something good out.
So conclusively a state in order to image it self as an authority or to prove something commanding to other states must practice rule of law implicated by good amount of supporting justice.

[vicky786]

@ Travolta

Not a bad essay in terms of grammar, appropriate use of language, and composition.

The first and most apparent criticism on your essay would be the length, you need both quantity and quality to gain top marks, and not to mention relevancy.

Your sole focus has been on institutional weakness, please focus on other points such as:

Political instability and undesired effects of it (civil unrest, violence)

Please expand on corruption, explain more how it can clog the administrative function of the Government, and the possible negative effects on the masses.

Explain the causes of injustice such as Kleptocracy, neopotism, ineffective mechanism to enforce laws and accountability.

Lack of safeguards to protect human rights, and property rights.

I am sure you can think of many other points to write, and don't forget to put forward recommendations in order to improve the system.

Overall a good piece of writing, mostly abstract though, it would be beneficial to add more facts, you have briefly mentioned India, Pakistan, and Saudi Arabia but more detailed explanations are required. I would compare Afghanistan(lawless region) with USA(highly developed laws and independent judiciary).

Keep up the good work

[Anonymous 12]

@ VICKY786

ur analyses on all essays u analyzed here are v excellent. it shows ur skill so please keep on analysing. one more thing , plz share tips on essay writing ad share some of ur essays as well.
we hope for ur attention.
regards.

[DR IMTIAZ KHUSHIK]

Dear

English is pretty well
Still need more ideas
Avoid repitation of same ideas

[Muhammad T S Awan]

Travolta, welcome to the CSS Forum Pakistan.

Your intention to help the aspirants and sharing material is commendable.

In my thinking amalgamation of these sentences cannot be termed as an essay. There is a great room of improvement. Firstly please dont use green colour bigger font, it gives difficuilty for reading in forum. Secondly, try to improve your sentence strucuting and usage of grammer. Thirdly, there seems to be dearth of cohesion in your sentences to give an impression of good paragraph.

[mosvi]

After reading all of the above essay without any aid form dictionary i thought myself as a good english literate, but after reading the consequent comments my delusion is broken

[fawadhussain8]

it was a good effort but you really need to work hard on your grammer plus you have to give more analysis on those countries who fail to provide justice and end up in ruins like Afghanistan.
One more thing you must have to increase the quantity by upholding the quality of your essay.

[Raheel Anees]

A nice attempt but i believe there is always some room for improvement.

[Riaz Ahmed Alizai]

welcome to the forum,and i appreciate your ideas.The thing i found lacking in your essay, is the usage of punctuations.You have repeated the same concepts,and did not exert law and justice impact as a whole.So you should work hard,keep continue your efforts,till you find yourself in the premises of recognized faces.