Books are my friends that never fail me(My attempt in PMS) - Page 3

Farrah Zafar · #21 Wednesday, July 25, 2012

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Originally Posted by Wamik

Well Done

Plz tell us how hve u prepared so well
&

IF i am not mistaken woh urdu sher kuch yun hai:

SUROORE ILM HAI KAIFE SHARAB SE BEHTAR
KOI RAFEEQ NAHI KITAB SE BEHTAR

Thanks ! Sher youn hai,see the post below,

Quote:

Originally Posted by siddiqui88

Good attempt. Wish you the best for result.

Meray khyal se Urdu shair youn hai..." Hum nasheeni agar kitaab se ho, Is se behtar koi rafique nahi ."

Well,Wamik ! I didn't prepare it,in fact,I never prepare essay.Being student of literature,I already had enough material to put into it.

musmanhussain · #22 Thursday, July 26, 2012

excillent farah,definitly u get success,if u write same,which is written above.

VetDoctor · #23 Tuesday, December 18, 2012

Keeping in view your skills, your score in english esaay in PMS is hard to digest...
anyhow, all the best for your next attempt.....

anastasia · #24 Thursday, December 20, 2012

@ Farrah Zaffar.
I want to ask.. while attempting an essay is it necessary to write all the quotes in the outline that we have to write in essay or only a few?

Farrah Zafar · #25 Thursday, December 20, 2012

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Originally Posted by anastasia

@ Farrah Zaffar.
I want to ask.. while attempting an essay is it necessary to write all the quotes in the outline that we have to write in essay or only a few?

Hmm.It depends.If you have enough time,then you may mention all quotes but if time is short,you may only mention the name of the writer and word 'Quote'.I did both things in my papers.

sajidnuml · #26 Thursday, January 03, 2013

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Originally Posted by Farrah Zafar

I'm posting in section of Essay as it is appropriate place for it so I don't expect it to be moved in PMS section.

I wrote 7 pages and 2 of outline.Overall it can be considered 10 pages as there were some extra lines too.I'm not happy for its length.However I'm hoping for the best.

Besides,I think I have skipped some points as I couldn't remember them.

Books are my friends that never fail me - Thomas Carlyle

When I'm hurt ,they console me
When I'm dejected,they encourage me,
When I'm sad,they make me smile,

Proudly and happily let me tell thee,
books are my friends that never fail me

--->Who is a friend?

--->Requisites of a good friend (help,entertain,encourage etc)

"A man is known by his company"

--->comparison of books and friends

--->books as different kinds of friends

~religious books,
~informative books,
~biographies
~entertaining books,
~educational books
~historical books
~literary books

--->Books are part of literature,some genre;

~poetry
~drama
~novel
~criticism etc

--->Literature and reality

Oscar wilde says, "Life should follow literature"

--->Role of books in development of personality

It is said,"Personality depends upon character,character depends upon thoughts and thoughts depend upon people we meet"
So people whose friends are books have pure and mature thoughts.

--->Books are guiding stars

--->Some books help in studies

As Bacon says in his essay "Of Studies",

Some books are to swallow,some are to chew and a few are to digest.

--->Some books entertain.

e.g Oscar Wilde's "Importance of being Earnest".This book not only satirizes the aristocratic class but also entertains the readers.

--->Some books share experiences

e.g biographies of famous people.Abraham Lincoln shared his experiences and presented golden tips to lead good life.

--->Some books give way to catharsis.They discuss delicate emotions and feelings of love.

~e.g books of poetry

~Poem by Prabhakar bangurde

--->Some books teach moral lessons

~Dr.faustus by Marlowe tells that if a man runs after materialistic pursuits and is mad for power and money,he is damned eternally.

~Heart of darkness by Conrad exposes the exploitation of black people by the white men.

~He says,"Power corrupts man and absolute power corrupts absolutely"

Then he presents the character of Mr.Kurtz who is incarnation of evil and meets an unpleasant end.

~Keats emphasizes on value of truth.He says,

"Beauty is truth,truth beauty,that's all ye know on earth and all ye need to know"

--->Conclusion

~Books are the best companions.

ہم نشین ہو کتاب سے
اس سے بہتر کوئ رفیق نہیں

"Be in company of books as they are the best companions"

I'm doubtful about the urdu couplet because I read it long ago during my school days.

Kindly comment on my outline.

Good effort but as there is always a room for improvement, so I shall make some positive remarks which in my view will be appreciated. I hope you do not mind it.

Yes starting words are impressive but what I notice in your attempt is that you did not give a proper follow up as the topic is:"Books are my friends that never fail me". there are two things in the topic: books are my friends and they do not fail me. You agreed that 'books are my friends' but you did not explain: they 'do not fail me'.

secondly this outlines lacks proper organization
In my view some parts of your outline were completely irrelevant or they were irrelevantly placed and discussed with no reference to the Topic.

For example:

Who is a friend? ( yes fine but no follow up)

Requisites of a good friend (help,entertain,encourage etc)

yes fine but from here you could have started to finish first part of the essay like: "books are my friends" because like a friend they do followings things

Books are my friends

-Books teach
-books entertain
-books encourage
-books help
-books motivate
-books share experience
-books guide

note ( above points could be presented differently like Source of encouragement etc
and so on maintaining that they do not fail me but unfortunately you discussed these things in isolation at the end

- comparison of books and friends
( there was no need as it was acknowledged that books are my friends)

-"books as different kinds of friends

~religious books,
~informative books,
~biographies
~entertaining books,
~educational books
~historical books
~literary books

--->Books are part of literature,some genre;

~poetry
~drama
~novel
~criticism etc""

Ok but these points should have been used with reference to making one a success story. Or they should simply be made a list under a under such headline 'Kinds of books one must read if he does not want fail in life'

Books are guiding stars. such sentences were needed )

~Dr.faustus by Marlowe tells that if a man runs after materialistic pursuits and is mad for power and money,he is damned eternally.

~Heart of darkness by Conrad exposes the exploitation of black people by the white men.

~He says,"Power corrupts man and absolute power corrupts absolutely"

Then he presents the character of Mr.Kurtz who is incarnation of evil and meets an unpleasant end.
~Keats emphasizes on value of truth.He says,

"Beauty is truth,truth beauty,that's all ye know on earth and all ye need to know"

this material is irrelevant. it is another question that it can be made relevant.

Again rest of the outline is excellent but isolated and misplaced. Lack of organization of material is visible on the face of this outline. Quotes were excellent no doubt but misplaced.

At least, It could have been an easy task had you divide the outline in two parts like this.

1 Books are my friends ----2 books never fail me.

I have made the above remarks with a good intent ) I hope they are taken in the same spirit.

I wish you good luck!

Farrah Zafar · #27 Friday, January 04, 2013

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Originally Posted by sajidnuml

Good effort but as there is always a room for improvement, so I shall make some positive remarks which in my view will be appreciated. I hope you do not mind it.

Yes starting words are impressive but what I notice in your attempt is that you did not give a proper follow up as the topic is:"Books are my friends that never fail me". there are two things in the topic: books are my friends and they do not fail me. You agreed that 'books are my friends' but you did not explain: they 'do not fail me'.

secondly this outlines lacks proper organization
In my view some parts of your outline were completely irrelevant or they were irrelevantly placed and discussed with no reference to the Topic.

For example:

Who is a friend? ( yes fine but no follow up)

Requisites of a good friend (help,entertain,encourage etc)

yes fine but from here you could have started to finish first part of the essay like: "books are my friends" because like a friend they do followings things

Books are my friends

-Books teach
-books entertain
-books encourage
-books help
-books motivate
-books share experience
-books guide

note ( above points could be presented differently like Source of encouragement etc
and so on maintaining that they do not fail me but unfortunately you discussed these things in isolation at the end

- comparison of books and friends
( there was no need as it was acknowledged that books are my friends)

-"books as different kinds of friends

~religious books,
~informative books,
~biographies
~entertaining books,
~educational books
~historical books
~literary books

--->Books are part of literature,some genre;

~poetry
~drama
~novel
~criticism etc""

Ok but these points should have been used with reference to making one a success story. Or they should simply be made a list under a under such headline 'Kinds of books one must read if he does not want fail in life'

Books are guiding stars. such sentences were needed )

~Dr.faustus by Marlowe tells that if a man runs after materialistic pursuits and is mad for power and money,he is damned eternally.

~Heart of darkness by Conrad exposes the exploitation of black people by the white men.

~He says,"Power corrupts man and absolute power corrupts absolutely"

Then he presents the character of Mr.Kurtz who is incarnation of evil and meets an unpleasant end.
~Keats emphasizes on value of truth.He says,

"Beauty is truth,truth beauty,that's all ye know on earth and all ye need to know"

this material is irrelevant. it is another question that it can be made relevant.

Again rest of the outline is excellent but isolated and misplaced. Lack of organization of material is visible on the face of this outline. Quotes were excellent no doubt but misplaced.

At least, It could have been an easy task had you divide the outline in two parts like this.

1 Books are my friends ----2 books never fail me.

I have made the above remarks with a good intent ) I hope they are taken in the same spirit.

I wish you good luck!

Thank you so much for your valuable comments.

Well,Sajid This outline is merely a rough copy of what I wrote in exam.I couldn't reproduce it here same as I wrote there.I wanted to share the sketch so I just presented the points.Lack of organization is due to this reason.

Secondly,my focus was on 'role of books' that they never fail me.I justified the topic in right direction,that's for sure.Elaboration with examples was done.

In my view,mainly the reasons were,

1-Wrong couplet
2-Short length
3-may be the selection of literary essay

Stay blessed !