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Default I am Writing a Paragraph please check it seniors and criticize my mistake of grammar?

Asalam O Aliekum !
i love my beautiful country because we call it motherland and everybody loves his mother. Nowadays many terrorists and criminals try to afraid the people of our country but they can't because our countries motto is faith,unity,discipline and Faith in ALLAH is our belief so He is the only king who give us life and we will return it to him. One day INSHAALLAH I will become a CSP and serve my country in a better way.
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Asalam O Aliekum !
i love my beautiful country because we call it motherland and everybody loves his mother. Nowadays many terrorists and criminals try to afraid the people of our country but they can't because our countries motto is faith,unity,discipline and Faith in ALLAH is our belief so He is the only king who give us life and we will return it to him. One day INSHAALLAH I will become a CSP and serve my country in a better way.
Brother, here, i offer some reviews. Paragraph is really good in grammar except some minor mistakes i would say (which would be gone by practice):

First, "Nowadays(,) many terrorists and criminals try to afraid (replace it by words like, terrorize/fighten/cause fear or other) the people of our country(,) but they can't because our countries motto is faith,unity and discipline. Faith in ALLAH is our belief so He is the only king who give(s) us life and we will return it to him. One day, INSHAALLAH, I will become a CSP and serve my country in a better way".

Try to write short sentences give full-stop where it needs.


Rest of members can point out if i missed a spot.

P.S.: InshaAllah, you will become!
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I am very thankful to you brother. i am really weak in grammar and sometimes i try to quit this struggle for Civil Services but i can't because i love this career. today where i stand in English language is horrible for me because my academic session is also very weak. I am trying to approach a friend like you who can criticize my mistakes and guide me because it is important factor while preparing competitive exam. May ALLAH give you success and blessings. Please be in touch with me.
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I am very thankful to you brother. i am really weak in grammar and sometimes i try to quit this struggle for Civil Services but i can't because i love this career. today where i stand in English language is horrible for me because my academic session is also very weak. I am trying to approach a friend like you who can criticize my mistakes and guide me because it is important factor while preparing competitive exam. May ALLAH give you success and blessings. Please be in touch with me.
You can post here members and fellows will guide you through. Thats what we do here.
now, coming to your grammar i don't think you are "really weak," as you said. These are just minor mistakes which you will ratify throughout your learning.
Don't halt on mistakes ever, keep doing them but most importantly keep learning about them and try not to make same mistakes again...
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You can post here members and fellows will guide you through. Thats what we do here.
now, coming to your grammar i don't think you are "really weak," as you said. These are just minor mistakes which you will ratify throughout your learning.
Don't halt on mistakes ever, keep doing them but most importantly keep learning about them and try not to make same mistakes again...
Hope it helps!
Thanks you so much for your again response. I truly motivated from your words, INSHAALLAH i will improve my English skills.
Bro can you please tell me that what is your education, are you preparing for CSS ?
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Thanks you so much for your again response. I truly motivated from your words, INSHAALLAH i will improve my English skills.
Bro can you please tell me that what is your education, are you preparing for CSS ?
I have graduation in Chemistry, yes i am preparing and i appeared in CE-20 this year!
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I have graduation in Chemistry, yes i am preparing and i appeared in CE-20 this year!
how was your attempt this year and what are your expected marks ? Can you please tell me If you don't mind.
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Default How to Improve English?

Hi there,
There are many ways of improving English. At one hand you can enhance your
reading English books on your favorite topics. Begin to read some good
grammar book. Even most important for me is to teach grammar to others
and we gain much knowledge this way. There are even more methods but
take your first step and we will be assisting you via this forum.
All the best.

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