First deseve and then desire:


History bears sad record of failures behind successful persons.some persons born fortunate.they gain what they desire.however, this happens rarely.all men are not born fortunate.on the one hand, the people who believe in the result of their hardwork,certainly become successful and enjoy the comforts of their labour.moreover,they gain by the dint of hard work what they desire.So happened with bill gates,founder of microsoft international.he was disappointed in early stage of his life because his desire of achieving the goals was more than what he had deserved.however, he worked hard and became successful and deserved what he desired.

On the other hand, there are some persons who only desire to achieve things but don't work for there wishes to come true.Consequently,such kind of the people achieve nothing but failures and great miseries in their lives.

Therefore,people often suggest others who desire more than what they deserve,"First deserve and then desire".



Comments will be appreciated.

good, It covers all the requirements of expansion. well structured paragraph. 153 words are less than the required word limit in CSS exam. anyhow, it is appreciable expansion. keep it up.

Where there is a will there is a way:

Expansion:
Life is full of uncertanity.the people live in the dreams.some people believe that everything happens,due to luck and they totally reply on it.moreover, they don't think cosciously about the goals that they need to achieve in their lives.consequently, the people often fail to achieve their goals.

however,there are the certain people who think about achieving their goals.moreover,who are ambicious and have will power of achieving their goals, achieve them easily as compare to those who don't show willingness in their work.In fact, the people who have will people who have will power of doing anything in their lives, don't face any sort regarding mental pressure.Because, the will power is an assest of them that worth more than the ignorance and the luck.Will power is helpful in every sphere of life.

thus, some have rightly said,"where is a will there is a way."which advices us that will power is only weapon through which we can achieve all kind of goals in every department of life.

Please check it.
comments will be appreciated.

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Dear!
Your writing skills are appreciable. again you ignored the word limit. In CSS paper, for expansion, word limit is 250 t0 300. You wrote only 164 words.

abt ur first expansion.... kamran good attemptd.plz be careful while using grammatical structures as u've used "on the one hand" without using "on the other hand" in the passage..it 'd have been good if u had used 'with fortune '..n one more think is that u must first try to explain the idea, the meaning of the idea clearly than give examples to explain it further..
thx
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aoa i underlined few mistakes in ur expansion.
secondally while making an expansion do support your ideas with examples.
i hope it didn't discourage you.everyone commits similiar mistakes while making first attempts....
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@FAIQA
thank u faiqa.
Faiqa i have used the tranisional expression,on the other hand, in the begning of second paragraph of my first Expansion.please reread it.

@KAWISH
Thank you very much kawish for correcting me.
Kawish as far as my little knowledge is concern word, the people, gives sense of plural.however, if we don't use article THE before word people it gives the sense of public.therefore, i used several times THE before word PEOPLE.correct me if iam wrong.
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@JAVED IQBAL
yes Javed, you are right that i have jotted down very little expansions.i haven't adjusted much examples and several other things in my expansions.In my next expansion i shall stretch the size of my expansion.

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Baroz-e-Hashar main be-khof ghuss jaonga Jannat mien,
Wahin se aye thay Adam woh meray baap Ka ghar hai
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u r right but we dnt need to particularize the term (people) by using the article while talking about the human generation as a whole...others respected members may confirm...
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ROME WAS NOT BUILT IN A DAY:

Rome is cradle of oldest civilization.Rome was not built in a day or two.it was built in very long span of time.it was built by constant labour and preservance.moreover, people devoted their time to built it.Rome is a great example of greatness. the greatness of rome is everlasting.

Similiarly,man doesn't get real success in very short time.he works hard and adopts patience to become successful.man becomes successful and sustaines his success for ever because of constant labour and preservance.moreover,every successful man achieve success due to sincerity with his work.such people are respected not only by those with whom they interact but also by other people.On the other hand, there are some other people who become successful without facing any hardships.

Further, such people can not sustain those heights.what they achieve by wrong ways,they miss all because of their incapabilities.it often happens,for instance, with politicians.they reach at great heights but they fail to maintain themselves at those heights.they fall to obscurity with astounding quikness.In addition to this, such people are at fight with themselves.they satisfy neither themselves nor their children.Indeed, they gain everything they wanted.However,they unable to enjoy those comforts and charms for long time.

To sum up, great achievements in life are not gain by the people by sudden flights.however,they work hard and patiently to achieve their goals and finally,after constant labour and preservance they achieve such goals.Thus,the proverb,Rome was not built in a day, advices us that we need to work hard to achieve the great goals which can not be achieved in very short series of time.lastly,we need to understand that the right thing, at the right time and at the right place matters alot.

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Wahin se aye thay Adam woh meray baap Ka ghar hai
(Allam Iqbal)

Dear!
In the expansion, first two lines do not match with the given statement. There is no need to define Rome.
the third paragraph which starts with the sentence"Further, such people can not sustain those heights." , is also not matching with the statement.
Other two paragraphs match with the statement, but in expansion there is no need to divide expansion in multiple paragraph. there should be only one paragraph. in first two or three lines you have to define the statement. next, you have to put two to three examples to explain the statement, in the ending lines you have to conclude your explanation.