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aishamemona Thursday, December 06, 2012 12:35 AM

[QUOTE=aishamemona;522505][B][COLOR="Blue"][B]Man probes into space but not into himself[/B][/COLOR][/B]

Man has reached on moon, trying to reach other planets, he is getting busy to search out the other planets but have forgotten himself. Man has discovered many things but has not discovered himself. He is getting busy in materialist world, but he is going far from himself. He thinks about other galaxies, he thinks where the Plato planet is gone, but he doesn't think that where he is gone. He wants to probe out every thing that is in the space. He is going far far away from himself. Man is going further with materialistic world. Many sufis, mystics, and wise mans tried to find out the God, they used to go into temples, mosques, to sadhos but the God was not present. As God can not be seen in these things because it needs a spiritual will, sincerity with oneself. As Hazrat Shah Abdul Latif Bhittai said "Allah can be seen into ones heart". When a man with sincerity, spirituality and honesty looks into his heart, he can find out Allah in his inner core of heart.


In this current era, man has forgotten himself, he is alone from himself. He is just trying to search out new things. He has created airplanes, shuttles, rocket and many other things. Although he is failed to make himself satisfied. Moreover, he is asking himself what he is!, why he is!, what he has to be!, he has just forgotten his reality, he is alone from the spirituality, is getting busy in materialistic world. He wants to more and more reality about the universe, wants to reach to the sun,he wants to make his heaven at moon, but he is alone from himself. While he thinks about supernatural powers, divinity, then he comes to know that these are the things which get him relaxed. Furthermore, when he jumps into his heart and gets to know that what I am, what I have to be, then this world becomes beautiful for him. He sees every thing with spiritual eyes, but when man does not look into his inner core of heart then he becomes disturb, disheart and not satisfied with himself, because he is getting busy with materialist world, probe into space but does not probe into himself.

[B]Words: 379[/B]

[B][I][COLOR="Olive"]Please check it out and give me marks. So that I can be able to improve more and more.[/COLOR][/I][/B]

[B]Thanking in advance......[/B][/QUOTE]

Faisal please check it out. I believe on your checking. Waiting............Otherwise :huh waiting.....

Ahmed Faisal Thursday, December 06, 2012 02:32 AM

[QUOTE=aishamemona;522505][B][COLOR="Blue"][B]Man probes into space but not into himself[/B][/COLOR][/B]

Man has reached on moon[COLOR="Blue"][B],[/B][/COLOR](no comma)[B]and[/B] trying [COLOR="Blue"][B]to reach[/B][/COLOR] for other planets[COLOR="Blue"][B],[/B][/COLOR][B][B](.)[/B](should be full stop)[/B] [COLOR="Blue"][B]he[/B][/COLOR][B]He[/B][COLOR="Blue"][B] is getting busy to search out the other planets but have forgotten himself[/B][/COLOR][B][B](He is busy searching new planets but unfortunately forgot about himself)[/B][/B]. [COLOR="Blue"][B]Man has discovered many things but has not discovered himself. [/B][/COLOR][B]( it is called redundancy, so remove it)[/B])[COLOR="Blue"][B]He is getting busy in materialist world, but he is going far from himself.[/B][/COLOR][B](He is persistently running after materialism but could not foucs on his spiritual needs).[/B] He thinks about other galaxies, he thinks where the [COLOR="Blue"][B]Plato[/B][/COLOR][B]( Plato is not any planet??)[/B] planet is gone[B](restructure it)[/B], but he doesn't think that where he is gone. He wants to probe out every thing that is in the space. He is going far [COLOR="Blue"][B]far[/B][/COLOR] away from himself. Man is going further with materialistic world[COLOR="Blue"][B](redundancy again)[/B][/COLOR]. Many sufis, mystics, and wise [COLOR="Blue"][B]mans[/B][/COLOR][B](Men)[/B] tried to find out the God, they used to go into temples, mosques, to sadhos but the God was not present. As God can not be seen in these things because it needs a spiritual will, sincerity with oneself. As Hazrat Shah Abdul Latif Bhittai said[B](,)[/B] "Allah can be seen [COLOR="Blue"][B]into[/B][/COLOR][B](in)[/B] ones heart". When a man with sincerity, spirituality and honesty looks [COLOR="Blue"][B]into[/B][/COLOR][B](in)[/B] his heart, he can find out Allah [COLOR="Blue"][B]in his inner core of heart[/B][/COLOR][B](there)[/B].


In this current era, man has forgotten himself,[B](.)[/B] [COLOR="Blue"][B]he is alone from himself[/B][/COLOR]. He is just trying to search out new things. [COLOR="Blue"][B]He has created airplanes, shuttles, rocket and many other things. Although he is failed to make himself satisfied.[/B][/COLOR][B](Although he created airplanes, shuttles, rocket and many other things, but could not satisfy himself).[/B] Moreover, he is asking himself what he is!, why he is!, what he has to be!, he has just forgotten his reality, he [COLOR="Blue"][B]is alone[/B][/COLOR][B](divorced from)[/B] the spirituality, [B][COLOR="Blue"]is getting busy in materialistic world[/COLOR][/B][B](redundancy)[/B]. He [B]still [/B] wants to [COLOR="Blue"][B]more and more reality[/B][/COLOR] [B]know more [/B]about the universe, wants to reach to the sun,he wants to make his heaven at moon, but he is [COLOR="Blue"][B]alone from[/B][/COLOR][B](alone and from can not come together)[/B] himself. While he thinks about supernatural powers, divinity, then he comes to know that these are the things which [COLOR="Blue"][B]get him[/B][/COLOR] relaxed him. Furthermore, when he jumps into(in) his heart [COLOR="Blue"][B]and gets [/B][/COLOR][B](unnecessary)[/B]to know that what I am, what I have to be, then this world becomes beautiful for him. He sees every thing with spiritual eyes, but when man does not look [COLOR="Blue"][B]into[/B][/COLOR] his inner core of heart then he becomes disturb, dis-heart and not satisfied with himself, because he is getting busy with materialist world, probe into space but does not probe into himself.

[B]Words: 379[/B]

[B][I][COLOR="Olive"]Please check it out and give me marks. So that I can be able to improve more and more.[/COLOR][/I][/B]

[B]Thanking in advance......[/B][/QUOTE]

Need hard work.. .

zuhaib ahmed Thursday, December 06, 2012 04:21 PM

[QUOTE=Ahmed Faisal;522620][B][COLOR="Blue"][SIZE="5"]Empty Vessel makes much noise.[/SIZE][/COLOR][/B]

When complemented about his scientific achievements, Issac Newton humbly told his admirers that he was just like a child picking up pebbles in the ocean of knowledge. While humility is the hallmark of a great man, a hollow man is often characterised by boastful manners.

A truly learned man is always conscious of the vast area of human endeavour of which he is ignorant. He knows what he does not know. A shallow person with a smattering of knowledge about a handful of subjects is completely oblivious of his ignorance of most subjects. He shows off whatever little he knows to attract attention. It does not matter so long as he is in the company of ignorant people. But he thoroughly exposes his ignorance in the presence of knowledgeable people.

Desire to show off one's superiority is observed mostly among people who are acutely conscious of their inferiority or worthlessness. They try hard to conceal their lack of substance by putting up a brave front while knowledgeable candidates facing an interview board are precise and to the point in their replies to questions, shallow candidates beat about the bush to conceal their ignorance.

They consider they smart enough to browbeat the veteran and experienced members on the interview board. In ideological disputes in a political party, the most seasoned politicians will keep their counsel whereas the novice will move heaven and hell to prove their point. The veteran leader intervenes decisively and settles the issue with his weighty opinion. Achievement oriented people take as their role models the greatest achievers in the world.

Thus an accomplished batsman like Sachin Tendulkar would like to equal the record batting average of over 99 in test cricket of Don Bradman of Australia. As he has not reached anywhere near this average so far, his achievements have not gone to his head.

Not only individuals, communities and nations too loose their balance and indulge in tall talk. With half of India's population still ignorant of the 3 r's at the turn of the Twentieth Century, many Indians boast of their great civilization and dream of once again putting on the mantle of the World-Guru.

The erstwhile rulers of the Soviet Union bragged about destroying capitalism and bringing about universal communism at a time when their economy was nearing collapse. U.S.S.R. has since disintegrated and Russia is fighting for her survival.

Wonder and mystery of world and phenomena of life induce awe in the minds of profound thinkers. It is impossible to unravel all the mysteries of nature. Man has only begun to understand a few aspects of this mystery. The enormity of the task of under¬standing nature strikes him dumb.

All his formulations of law of nature or of society are tentative attempts without any finality. Only semi-educated people can claim to have discovered the whole truth about nature or society. No ideology alone can solve the problems of mankind. If somebody claims so, he will be considered an ignoramus in the world of today. Wisemen will venture a few tentative generalisations. Only shallow people will be loud in their protestations, it is truly observed that an empty vessel makes much noise.

An eminent example of disproportionate noise compared to factual knowledge is provided by the big ruckus raised in connection with article 370 of Indian Constitution relating to the State of Jammu and Kashmir. Most people who cry hoarse over deletion of article 370 have never read this provision of the constitution. Their emotional outbursts are triggered by their momentary impulses. Knowledge of constitutional provision made by the founding fathers of Indian Constitution would surely have a salutory effect on them.

Brevity is the soul of wit', said William Shakespeare. A Wiseman weighs his words carefully before making use of them. He never wastes a word. He is able to express the profoundest of thoughts in fewest possible words. Francis Bacon is famous for his pithy and epigrammatic sentences. He is the most quotable of all English essayists. Similarly Alexander Pope excels as a poet in capturing great ideas in memorable phrases like "Fools rush in where Angels fear to tread" or "A little knowledge is a dangerous thing". Bacon and Pope occupy high position in English literature whereas many of their more verbose, pompous and longwinded contemporaries are completely forgotten.[/QUOTE]
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Dear Faisal,

You word count is 723. :ohmy:

If only you have written it as an expansion. Please, lessen the word count. :) [/CENTER][/FONT][/B][/COLOR]

zuhaib ahmed Thursday, December 06, 2012 04:41 PM

[QUOTE=Da Skeptic;519426][B][U]Fortune favors the brave:[/U][/B]

‘God helps those who help themselves’, says another proverb, echoing a similar meaning as that of the given proverb. Indeed those who dare to attempt at something, fortune favors them in one way or another. Nothing can help a person who is timid and sluggish to achieve something. If one is a coward and is less confident about oneself, one could not get going in any phase and pass of life. One’s courage and confidence takes one towards one’s goal and one achieves success. Fortune cannot favor one who lacks courage and self-assurance; for such a person is not worthy of any favor.

Cowardice, lack of confidence and timidity take one to nowhere. Verily, circumstances assist one who tries and tries hard. It has been said truly, ‘Man is the architect of his own fortune’. Thus one who is brave, crafts [COLOR="DarkRed"]his[/COLOR] destiny in the way [COLOR="DarkRed"]he[/COLOR] wants, and the one, who is timid, meddles with [COLOR="DarkRed"]himself and his fortune[/COLOR]; and ultimately comes out of it with bare hands. A stock of examples can be given from history of such brave men who worked diligently; made fortune help them; and paved their way to their destiny or goal. Hazrat Muhammad (P.B.U.H), Quaid-e-Azam, Napoleon, Hitler, Einstein, Newton and many more, are the examples of those men who struggled, worked industriously, compelled fortune to favor them, and fought their way to success.

Hence, those who make courage and confidence their armor and struggle hard to achieve their goals, fortune gets compelled to favor them; whereas those who debilitate their efforts because of timidity and cowardice and a lack of courage, get no favor of fortune and stand empty handed throughout their lives.


Word Count: 280

Criticism will be valued greatly.. :) Feel free to criticize.. :)[/QUOTE]

[B][B][COLOR="DarkRed"][CENTER][FONT="Arial Black"]Good work, Indeed. :) I expected little more. :sad [/FONT][/CENTER][/COLOR][/B][/B]

zuhaib ahmed Thursday, December 06, 2012 04:54 PM

[QUOTE=Natashaaa;521225]i beg to differ. seriously you're comparing writing to maths....MATHS is all about formulas which have to be learnt unless you make your own formulas...english is very different from maths. you cant expect an adult to memorize grammar and then apply it in each sentence whilst writing. english cannot be learnt, it's all about practice, reading and writing. i dont remember consulting a grammar book after class 7 and my english is okay[/QUOTE]

[B][COLOR="DarkRed"]Read this:[/COLOR][/B]

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Da Skeptic Sunday, December 09, 2012 11:06 AM

[QUOTE=zuhaib ahmed;523075][B][B][COLOR="DarkRed"][CENTER][FONT="Arial Black"]Good work, Indeed. :) I expected little more. :sad [/FONT][/CENTER][/COLOR][/B][/B][/QUOTE]

Thanx.. You should know that expectations seldom come true in this world.. ;)

Natashaaa Monday, December 10, 2012 03:13 PM

@zuhaib ahmed
 
grammar is the core of every language, i just believe at 22,23 u cant memorize grammar n then apply it in each sentence of a 2500 word essay..basics one shud know rest we get hang of it whilst reading regularly..i dnt know a lot of grammar jargon,kinds of verbs etc,yet my writing skills are satisfactory.. im not denying the importance grammar has,im just saying one does not need to delve into grammar books to be good at english

Da Skeptic Monday, December 10, 2012 04:15 PM

Have something to say and say it as clearly as possible.. says Mathew Arnold..
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zuhaib ahmed Tuesday, December 11, 2012 01:50 AM

[QUOTE=Natashaaa;524934]grammar is the core of every language, i just believe at 22,23 u cant memorize grammar n then apply it in each sentence of a 2500 word essay..basics one shud know rest we get hang of it whilst reading regularly..i dnt know a lot of grammar jargon,kinds of verbs etc,yet my writing skills are satisfactory.. im not denying the importance grammar has,im just saying one does not need to delve into grammar books to be good at english[/QUOTE]
[B][COLOR="DarkRed"][SIZE="3"][FONT="Book Antiqua"]
So am I reasoning but our reason cannot avoid importance of Grammar. I speak Sindhi Language fluently and write impressively but I don't know its Grammar. So can you and everyone.
I have seen many men who know all about English grammar but cannot speak English fluently and write expressively. And, many men, I have seen who speak English fluently but don't know what its Grammar is.

If I ask a child, "If I drop a book will it fall on earth?"

He will surely reply, "Yes, It will fall on earth, I have experienced it many times."

But if I ask him, "Why does it fall on earth?"

He will remain confused and think why it falls.

But, Da Skeptic can answer it easily, he will say, "The reason it falls is gravity."


Indeed, we can learn a language without memorizing rules of Grammar but we will not be able to answer what rules of grammar are. (As child couldn't answer why book falls on earth but Da-Skeptic did.)

In CSS we have to take both things parallel. If only you understand. I don't say you be Swan or Thomson but you should try. I know you know rules of grammar. Sometimes, we deny saying we don't know.

Regards,[/FONT][/SIZE][/COLOR][/B]

Natashaaa Tuesday, December 11, 2012 02:49 AM

@zuhaib ahmed
 
why exactly would you need to answer what rules of grammar are?


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