Originally Posted by Da Skeptic

Fortune favors the brave:

‘God helps those who help themselves’, says another proverb, echoing a similar meaning as that of the given proverb. Indeed those who dare to attempt at something, fortune favors them in one way or another. Nothing can help a person who is timid and sluggish to achieve something. If one is a coward and is less confident about oneself, one could not get going in any phase and pass of life. One’s courage and confidence takes one towards one’s goal and one achieves success. Fortune cannot favor one who lacks courage and self-assurance; for such a person is not worthy of any favor.

Cowardice, lack of confidence and timidity take one to nowhere. Verily, circumstances assist one who tries and tries hard. It has been said truly, ‘Man is the architect of his own fortune’. Thus one who is brave, crafts his (one's) destiny in the way he (one) wants, and the one, who is timid, meddles with himself (oneself) and his (one's) fortune; and ultimately comes out of it with bare hands. A stock of examples can be given from history of such brave men who worked diligently; made fortune help them; and paved their way to their destiny or goal. Hazrat Muhammad (P.B.U.H), Quaid-e-Azam, Napoleon, Hitler, Einstein, Newton and many more, are the examples of those men (unnecessary) who struggled, worked industriously, compelled fortune to favor them, and fought their way to success.

Hence, those who make courage and confidence their armor and struggle hard to achieve their goals, fortune gets compelled to favor them; whereas those who debilitate their efforts because of timidity and cowardice and a lack of courage, get no favor of fortune and stand empty handed throughout their lives.


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Originally Posted by aishamemona

So nice of you Faisal and Da Skeptic .... Thanks for such a nice checking out my writes up. Now I have written down an other para please check it out like earlier and point out my mistakes and please correct them so that I may be able to not repeat the same mistake again.

Present Scenario of Poverty in Pakistan

Currently, poverty is increasing day by day in Pakistan(Topic sentence should be more emphatic). Infect (In fact), since a decade the poverty increasing of our country has been increasing very fastly[B](there is no such word) than that of earlier years[/B]( The population has been increasing dramatically since 2000 in Pakistan) . According to the current reports of the Asian Bank(,) that(no need to put that here) the(no article) one-third people of Pakistan are living below the poverty line. Among these people, seventy five(75) percent of people are living in rural areas. The poor people are nearly(virtually) unable to get basic facilities of life such as education, health, sanitation and many thinks(things) which( the usage of which is informal in academic writings, so use that here)(that) are considered very important for a life. As a result, the urbanization is increasing, crisis and social evils are increasing day by day.(this sentence does not make sense) Because of poverty people are engulfed in the cruel clutches of terrorism, extremism, violation, theafting (,)and many more such crimes are being (Why being here?)increased day bay day. On the one hand(,) people of rural and uraban areas are being(should not be passive here) suffered from poverty. and(no conjunction) on the other hand, our so-called politicians are getting busy in order to make their vote banks increased (busy in making there vote bank)instead of overcoming the problems. In this juncture, it is the need of hour(confirm it) to handle the problems. However, first of all it is highly required to understand that what are the reasons of poverty increasing(unnecessary) in Pakistan.

The first reason of poverty in Pakistan is Illiteracy. ……………

Originally Posted by aishamemona

Dear members and Faisal now I have tried my best to not make even a single mistake again. Please check it out critically and point out my mistake and correct it.

Thanks in advance

Currently, Pakistan is facing severe poverty problem. It has become one of the biggest challenges for our country that faces today. According to the report of ADB (Asian Development Bank), one third population of Paksitan is living bellow (below) the poverty line. whereas, (unnecessary )among these people, 75 percent poor people live in rural areas and they depend on agriculture. Since the recent floods of (on) Pakistan, the infrastructure of the country has nearly been destroyed. The floods left the People in a big miserable time (consider revising it). People are jobless, because the do not have much opportunities in rural areas to earn due to floods and energy crisis problems (unnecessary). In this way, urbanization is increasing day by day. In the urban areas, target killing, terrorism, extremism, social evils and many immoral activities are increased (increasing) it is (unnecessary) because of poverty. Although, the current democratic government has been doing its best to overcome this problem but it has not been tackled effectively due to corruption, malpractice and mismanagement. On the (omit the article) one hand, people are engulfed in the cruel clutches (clutches do not engulf.. Engulf means 'Nigal lena (in Urdu)' and Clutches means 'grip or control') of poverty, on the the other hand, our current politicians are enjoying their privileges.

Originally Posted by Natashaaa

@ahmed faisal: i think reading and writing is the best way to improve english, memorizing grammar is a class 5 way of learning how to write without errors.

Originally Posted by SADIA SHAFIQ

''Cut Your Coat according to your Cloth''


Allah has given specific capabilities and resources to each individual(everyone) .These implies each of us has given authority vary person to person(These imply/ this implies that authority has been bestowed upon us that varies person to person).One can either generates further wealth by using given one or remains contented( One can creates more wealth by investing the available money or may stay satisfied with the wealth at one,s disposal). Contentment is an Islamic junction prescribed to Muslim Ummah for multi-puspose (multipurpose) benefits.when a person keeps his expenditure according to his income ,he(i think there should be plural noun i.e. they) remains satisfied .In modern age materialism provokes( arouses) among masses(unnecessary) lust to buy above then(beyond) their purchasing power .This situation has caused lending on the basis of interest(.) As a result,creating in-debted (indebted) society.That's why Islam has taught us moderation ,the key element (of) spending a prosperous life.


The rule of moderation is applicable in all the institutions of government; family,politics,economy and religion. It forbids extremes in a particular system ,also applicable to each and every individual of society(this sentence could have been much better). Islam has given rights to each individual according to his /her(i think their should be there) responsibilities.So one can enjoy freedom in limits.West has given undue rights to individuals which has caused social evils.These evils not only destroyed bodily health but (also) leads towards spiritual death. Hazrat Ali (R.A) had taught his subjects that one should restrained between these two extremes . He ( R.A) remained contented through out his life and never aimed to get more and more wealth or power . In fact ,greed ,lust(greed and lust) are evils leading towards other sins like murder ,fornication and devastation of community .That's why ambition is considered a moral sin.

"The Tragical History of Dr.Faustus'', by Christopher Marlowe lights on this particular theme. The hero of that play wanted unlimited power and wealth , stood against Almighty and made fun of Holy scriptures .In the end ,he had (to)faced[B]( face)[/B] disappointment which hindered him to ask for forgiveness.And the state of hopelessness destined hell for him .



"Till swollen with the cunning of self- conceit
His waxen wings could not mount above his reach,
And melting heavens conspired his over throw.
"

The theme of greed ,ambition(,) and lust have lessons for us.These characters in man creates hopelessness and extremes.And, and man becomes insane for his ambition.He tries to get all the things by wrong means . contentment is blessing in guise which creates humane attitude in man.All of us can not get undue resources and wealth.Also it is necessary for healthy procreation of society .