Sir you rightly observed the key point or flaw in my piece of work. your observation and analysis is, categorically, better than mine. If I say, a man has the ability to be determined then don't you think he is an ablest man???

well I went back to your expansion and tried to identify the portion where you have pointed out the relation between determination and ability? This is the point I explained earlier. unless you explicitly write it down, don't expect the reader to be making all the connections "if a person has the ability to be determined then is he the ablest man?"

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I Know I am Bad But When Bad is the Best, Bad is the Only Choice

thank you so much sir... really meaningful comments for me as i was expecting many mistakes :p
but your comments boosted up my confidence...
seriously i do not have anyone who can check my work even academy does not take it seriously...

rightly said i will surely add that point in my expansion
thanks again

yeah i missed industrial revolution! that is a good example...
thanks for your suggestion

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Thank you I have got your point. Thank for the corrections.

Now check the next expansion, please. As I tried, in this expansion, not to make it Islamiat or history paper . I also tried to generalize the things I mentioned.

KEEP YOUR FACE TO THE SUNSHINE AND YOU CAN NOT SEE THE SHADOW (CSS 2002)

There are countless men and women around the world. Some of them are of positive mind while others are of negative. On the one hand, there are people who attempt to do a particular job because they want to enjoy benefits, profits, and advantages. On the other hand, there are people who are risk averse, they are always afraid of loss or danger. They, intentionally or unintentionally, think about the negative side of a particular activity rather than positive side. This is why the former are more successful than the latter. In addition, Bomb escorts are always ready to defuse bombs anywhere. It does not mean they do not know about the danger of this task rather they do it because of their hope of getting their jobs done. Similarly, when a doctor operates a patient in Operation Theater, despite the fact that operation may be unsuccessful, he operates the patient, it is just because of the positive aspect of that operation. Furthermore, a businessman often invests his capital into business in the hope that he would earn some profit out of that business, and he usually earns profit. On the contrary, a man who is afraid of loss in a business can never become a good business man. As a matter of fact, virtually every successful man in this world believes in positive mind, because a pessimist can never be successful until he avoids the dark side of a particular thing. Even now in today’s world, people are living in a despair and pessimism. If they start to feel happiness, however small, around them, they will not feel dismay and hopelessness.

It is praiseworthy, indeed. Your sentences possess good flux and flow but there should be variety and change in sentences. Though, you have tried well, I can see, but you can do better, I perceive.

Quotations are ornaments of writing so kindly use them. You could use, "A pessimist sees the difficulty in every opportunity; an optimist sees the opportunity in every difficulty." By Winston.

Your all examples are general,if you had used example of Hellen Keller (This quotation is also of H.Keller.), it could have been more beautiful.

As whole, it is quite well.

Regards,

Can somebody tell me the meaning of this saying:

In strategy, it is important to see distant things close, and take a distant view of close things. (CSS 2002)

The idea is to be careful and measured while making a strategy to gain some destination.

One, might ignore some certain things which deserve his attention. Things which are obvious still need as much attention as the things which are obscure. Sometimes, we ignore something which deserves our attention and sometimes we are just not able to explore things which are to be thought upon.

The first step is to ascertain what exactly needs to be done and second step is to know that how it should be done.

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the meaning (as I perceive it) would be: In strategy, it is important to see distant things close (the goal/target: we need to visualize it. Only when we know for sure as to what our objective is only then we could possibly conceive a strategy) and take a distant view of close things (the closer things are our assets/options/abilities/resources/decisions that we have and we need to visualize their impact in the future).

So we need to foresee the impact that our assets have on the objective that we have in the future.

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I Know I am Bad But When Bad is the Best, Bad is the Only Choice

Impossible is often untried

This maxim describes a reality of life. Things prevailing to be impossible look so because they are often untried. One has to find the ways to let these things happen and be possible. Nothing can downtrod the powerful and indomitable will of a human being who is imbued with natural tendency to do impossible. It is a famous proverb, “where there is a will, there is way” which affirms the need for a powerful will to do unprecedented things. God had created man with mind and ability to explore world through observation and experience and as a result he tried and found it. Only man need to have powerful will to execute the impossible. Man’s will can overcome all the hindrances and obstacles coming on his way to convert the very impossibility into possibility.
Since the birth of man, he had sheer determination to explore the world. Making fire was an impossible act which he did after a series of efforts with stones. Similarly as the world progressed, he invented wheel which made his life comfortable. As the time passed, he made progress with leaps and bounds and invented the things which were impossible without his efforts. Small pox was a disastrous epidemic which exterminated millions of people and it was possible to cure a patient with small pox at that time. But genius of man awakened and he found the remedy in its own victim. It was Edward Jenner who made it possible to cure Small pox with the pus released from the pimples of victim. He successfully inoculated a 8 year old boy with pus and boy stayed healthy and shielded from small pox. Man has always eager to explore spatial areas around our lively planet. Expedition to moon was an impossible idea to think about but man didn’t restricted himself thinking about world only and he took daring step of sending rocket on moon so that he could unveil the hidden mysteries of this vast universe which he had never thought before. He could not have succeeded if he didn’t try. And now he is a step ahead to conquer Mars the 4th planet of solar system. He failed several times in doing so but at the end he got it with resolute will and persistency.
Everything is impossible until it is tried. One cannot earn money if he don’t try. One can’t get knowledge if has no will and no action. Actions always speak louder than words. One must need to put his will into action to let it happen with utmost efforts. There was a spider who tried to climb up the wall and she failed 99 times and miserably fell on ground. It seemed impossible that she would climb that up. But she did it 100th time. One can do any impossible thing if he try with determination and persists it.

Umarabbas sir and other seniors are requested to check this expansion. As I think I could not get the real meaning of this proverb. Let me know whether I caught the idea or otherwise and also check other grammar and structure of sentences mistakes. Thanks in anticipation.

YOU WILL FIND POETRY NOWHERE UNLESS YOU BRING SOME WITH YOU

Everyone keeps some specific interests, hobbies, games near to him. Often one thing which is liked by someone is hated by other. The hidden idea in this saying is that if one does not have knowledge or interest in something, he will never find that thing fascinating. Similarly, if a person likes good human nature he can find good human nature every where. Art, say for example, galleries exhibitions are conducted throughout the world. Many people go to the exhibitions and buy many paintings. They spend hundreds of thousands on buying such painting. For them, art is the beauty of life. They keep these paintings everywhere such as at their homes, offices etc. on the contrary, a person who does not have sense of art can never find art anywhere. In the same manner, a tourist likes to travel different places and countries around the world. He is usually fond of beauty of this world. This is why he finds beautiful places everywhere. Quite a contrary, a person who does not like traveling can never feel the beauty of this beautiful world. It is ridiculous that many people criticize others for not having sense of specific thing. These people must realize that God has given every man with specific qualities and interests. If one man has no sense of a particular thing he must have the other. It would be safe to conclude that if one person does not have a kind of taste or interest in a particular activity, he will never go after it. He can never understand it, so if a person wants to know something well he must take interest or have some knowledge about it. (Words 288)