If you have any other attempts left, please start preparing. And consult a good essay teacher this time, get your essays checked.

If I were your examiner, I would not even read to the end of your outline. Irrelevant is a small word for this one. You didn't even write a single point in the outline addressing the main question.


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you wrote for or against?

Aspirants who have attempted this essay should listen to Howard zin's lecture on u tube with title: 'modern wars are not holy wars'.they would get clear idea of what the essay is about.

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brother ...... examiner is asking about MODERN WARS. so there is no need to go in past.
we should highlight on going wars

You post very good outline but this outline is not compatible with topics.You discussed most important point at end like
5.Modern Wars after World Wars
a) Arab- Israel war
c) Indo- Pak wars
6.Present wars of 21st century
a) Global War on Terrorism
b) Middle East Conflict
7.Are modern wars conform to
the concept of holy war?
8.Conclusion

you discussed modern wars not past wars.You add heading of jihad that is most demanding in such type of essay.As jihad main purpose to remove religious opression over people but some terror element like isis and ttp used jihad to spread islam on basis of sword and this is main cause of holy war.Always remind main theme of topic that asked in exam.I add solution in my essay that is not compatible with argumentative essay but still i prove my point in solution.Like pakistan and india issue solved by un plebiscite solution,Musharaf four point formula and chenab formula but india never agreed on this solution as india has doubt on pakistan that is muslim country.Due to religious difference india has doubt if they handed over kashmir to pakistan then all western and eastern river passed through jammu kashmir and it creates problem for india so this issue is not solved due to religious difference and this holy war is still continue.Always stick to point that asked in exam to convince examiner

Here is only two heading is used
1 war that is holy war

discussed different type of modern wars and discussed religious element in war
2 war that is not holy war

discussed those modern wars that is not holy war


In conclusion give your argument whether it is holy war not holy war and ends his essay with final argument

Dear you made candid analysis on this outline.Some chaps here here are making hue and cry over my outline whereas I grasped the topic in its entirety.Any argumentive essay requires one's aurgument in fullest encompassing historical overview pertaining to the topic.
I tried to support my argument with historical facts that time of holy wars has passed long ago and modern wars are not HOLY wars. Holy wars are not without designs these are mere being staged by world powers to quinch their "vested interests".
Furthermore, Alhamdolillah I am much confident about my work and InshAllah will make it through.
P.S Alhamdolillah I have passed essay paper twice.

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My best wishes with you that you passed essay also this time.If you become successfull in convincing examiner then you sure passed this essay.I only give my analysis.As far as examiner is concerned,They only watch convincing argument.But hit essay to point is more demanding in essay paper.As far as your essay is concerned,You represent historical background to convince examiner that today war is not holy war and it is used by some psycho power like usa,russia then it is right.It depends upon evidences.But it is main purpose of essay to hit essay to point.Represent historical background in modern war like holy prophet used jihad to remove religious opression.Even when he migrated to medina and when his companion asked holy prophet to fought with those who creates problem for relgious practices.Holy prophet said ALLAH don't give me order to fought with infidel.Then ALLAH revealed reveleation.
"those who asked for fought,Told them order is given as they are wrong.ALLAH is best aider of those who fought against them."
Now this revelation clearly represent that jihad purpose to remove religious opression but this terror element used jihad to spread islam as holy prophet spread islam by preach and used jihad to remove relegious opression.But isis and ttp used jihad to spread islam on basis of sword instead of preach.Now you used this argument in syria and ttp war against pakistan. But my argument is different and i give evidences that today war is holy war and some country used this holy war to accomplish their motive.Like iran used shia and saudi arab used sunni to accomplish their motives.But examiner only watch fact and figure and even this examiner don't know meaning of essay.If examiner think that historical element is needed then he right your essay.Otherwise what i discussed that is requirment of essay.I don't discussed any thing from my side but essay main purpose to hit essay to point that asked in exam.However it depends upon examiner.If examiner convinced by your arugment and he thought historical element is necessary then he passed essay otherwise if he doesn't convinced then he failed candidates.

Don't take my comment wrong.insha ALLAH you will passed exam and my best wishes with you that you passed exam.

I appeared and presented following views, Kindly give your precious comments on this seniors:

Are Modern Wars not Holy Wars ?

1. Introduction: The Modern wars are in no way holy wars but have been perverted by the stakeholders for their own vested interests.

2. Holy War: In its truest sense

3. Current Scenario of the World

4. Syrian Conflict: War of Interests
(A) Battle ground of the world.
(B) Battle of Ideologies.
(C) Battle of Hegemony.

5. Palestine-Israel Conflict: Sacred claims or Race of Survival ?
(A) Background
(B) Prevalent Scene
(C) Survival of the fittest
(D) Hegemony of the US

6. Terrorist Elements: Warped sense of Jihad

7. War against terrorism: Cleansing, Not Jihad !
(A) Pakistan's Scenario
(B) Scenario of other war torn countries

8. Conclusion