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, aoa friends,dear members i hope all are fine.this is the topic i attempted.i need ur comments on my way whether i did it safelyn....
-i made a comprehensive n neat outline
-i remained stick to it
-i was in the favour of the topic
-n i supported my view by mentioning other means of combating terrorism i.e military action,counter terrorism n counter insrgency strategies
-why dialogue has become necessary
-then i did mentioned the should be parties to the dialogue i.e insurgents n allies/invaders as well as b/w the allies
-then i did elaborate what should be the dialogue(that i did in farm of citing suggestions)
-i did not much discussed terrorism in Pak n mentioned Pak's interests n concerns w/ regard to the need n agenda of the dialogue
-in doing so i rather focused Afghanistan as the roots of terrorism
-i did highlighted the flaws in war on terror when i explained the circumstances w/h gave rise to the need of dialogue

THE LACKINGS I FEEL
-my language was simple,though nt over simplified n i totally forgot to give a touch of flowery english anywhere
-i did compiled my essay n gave a good conclusion,but my suggestions were in points not scattered over the pages,as some ppl say they should be of this n this no. of pages
-towards the end of my essay the examiner might feel that im in a hurry as my writing was no more that neat as it was in the start
-n the most serious i did not support the uses of dialogue w/ historical instances so it might give a look to my essay not so pursuassive
this is not the sequence in w/h i attempt the topic,i just typed wharever i could recall.pls do comment.thnks
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please dear management remove this post as saparate thread n paste it in the thread for essay 2010.thanks
Lets have it here to discus this particular topic. I wrote the same and have some concerns about my outline as well.
And I am to post it here after seeing this post.

->Meaning

->Background and History

->Islam religion of Peace

->Examples of negotiations and peaceful resolutions from Islamic History

->Failure of combating terrorism by force
.... Iraq
.... Afghanistan

->Need for Dialogues

->Analyzing Terrorism
->Factors and role played by West
.......Exploitation and Deprivation
.......Proxy wars
.......Supporting Dictators
.......Respect of sovereignty
.......Clarifications needed
->Role by Muslim World
.......Avoiding radicalism and extremism
.......Misinterpretation of teachings
.......Economy
.......Education
.......Enlighten moderation

->Concluding Remarks
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->Meaning

->Background and History

->Islam religion of Peace

->Examples of negotiations and peaceful resolutions from Islamic History

->Failure of combating terrorism by force

.... Iraq
.... Afghanistan

->Need for Dialogues

->Analyzing Terrorism

->Factors and role played by West
.......Exploitation and Deprivation
.......Proxy wars
.......Supporting Dictators
.......Respect of sovereignty
.......Clarifications needed
->Role by Muslim World
.......Avoiding radicalism and extremism
.......Misinterpretation of teachings
.......Economy
.......Education
.......Enlighten moderation

->Concluding Remarks
ur outline is strong,persuassive n inspiring....
nonetheless do explain pls in what context u discussed the thing in ur outline"analysis of terrorism"?
lastly i need comments on my outline.i hope i ll soon get some...
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Dialogue is the best course to combat terrorism.


“Peace cannot be achieved through violence; it can only be attained through understanding.”



I – Introduction:

II – Dialogues in the History:

A – Charter of Madina.
B – Treaty of Hudabiya
C – Conquest of Makkah
D – World Wars and treaties
E – Dialogues with Jews of Madina

III – Terrorism in the World

A – 9/11 Attacks
B – Mumbai Attack
C – Massacre in Kashmir
D – Israeli aggression in Palestine
E - Occupation of Afghanistan and Iraq etc
F – Al-Qaeda and Taliban

IV – Pakistani Perspective

A – TTP – Tehrik-e-Taliban-e-Pakistan
B – Al-Qaeda at work
C – Lashker-e-Jhangavi, Jund Ullah etc
D – Foreign hands – Raw and MOSAD etc

V – Dialogues in Pakistan

A – Army-Governor deal with TTP, Net Muhammad
B – Swat Peace deal
C – Result of dialogues
E – Composite dialogue with India
F – Grievances of Pakistan against Afghanistan

VI – Fruits of Dialogue Process

A – Saving innocent people
B – Prevention of suicide attack and bombs blasts
C – Economic development in the country
D – Regional Peace (in case of India)
E – Stability of the country in all walks of life.
F – Prosperity in the affected areas

VII – Disadvantages of using force

A – Spirit of Revenge
B – Threat to the lives of Civilians
C – Increased Expenditure on arms and ammunitions
D – Confrontation of Muslims with one another

VIII – Recommendations

A – First Dialogue then use of force
B – Understanding the root causes
C – Infrastructure in the affected region
D – Provision of education and health facilities
E – Economic packages in the affected areas
F – Redress the grievances of disaffected
G – Quick Justice
H – Equal distribution of resources
I – Role of Ulema

IX – Conclusion



@All,

Your comments are warmly appreciated on my outline. These are the points which I mentioned and remember rest I can’t recall now.

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Seniors please comment.....im anxiously waiting fo commens from newstudent

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"all human beings are born equal in dignity and rights but they are in shackles."
Introduction: human beings in chains throughot history; they're in chains in the present world. Common sources of chains and bonds......religion, sex, colour, race etc.
Historically:
I) inquisition in Europe: how muslims and jews lost their freedom of religion to the fanatic rule of Isabella and Ferdinand in spain.
2) US constitution begins with the words: Men are born equal. But Blacks remained slaves and disenfranchised for a better half of US history till 1960s.
3) Women disenfrachised in europe historically till 1930s.
4) Colonialism
Freedom and human rights in the Present day world:
1) Muslims denied religious freedom in the west: the scarf issue and ban on minarets on mosque bulidings.
2) dictatorial regimes around the world
3) women denied access to education and other basic rights in some societies
4) Taliban playing havoc with freedom of expression and human rights in parts of afghanistan and pakistan
5) Israel trampling on the rights of palestinians
6)India dfying human rihjts in kashmir
Conclusion
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Dialogue is the best course to combat terrorism.


“Peace cannot be achieved through violence; it can only be attained through understanding.”



I – Introduction:

II – Dialogues in the History:

A – Charter of Madina.
B – Treaty of Hudabiya
C – Conquest of Makkah
D – World Wars and treaties
E – Dialogues with Jews of Madina

III – Terrorism in the World

A – 9/11 Attacks
B – Mumbai Attack
C – Massacre in Kashmir
D – Israeli aggression in Palestine
E - Occupation of Afghanistan and Iraq etc
F – Al-Qaeda and Taliban

IV – Pakistani Perspective

A – TTP – Tehrik-e-Taliban-e-Pakistan
B – Al-Qaeda at work
C – Lashker-e-Jhangavi, Jund Ullah etc
D – Foreign hands – Raw and MOSAD etc

V – Dialogues in Pakistan

A – Army-Governor deal with TTP, Net Muhammad
B – Swat Peace deal
C – Result of dialogues
E – Composite dialogue with India
F – Grievances of Pakistan against Afghanistan

VI – Fruits of Dialogue Process

A – Saving innocent people
B – Prevention of suicide attack and bombs blasts
C – Economic development in the country
D – Regional Peace (in case of India)
E – Stability of the country in all walks of life.
F – Prosperity in the affected areas

VII – Disadvantages of using force

A – Spirit of Revenge
B – Threat to the lives of Civilians
C – Increased Expenditure on arms and ammunitions
D – Confrontation of Muslims with one another

VIII – Recommendations

A – First Dialogue then use of force
B – Understanding the root causes
C – Infrastructure in the affected region
D – Provision of education and health facilities
E – Economic packages in the affected areas
F – Redress the grievances of disaffected
G – Quick Justice
H – Equal distribution of resources
I – Role of Ulema

IX – Conclusion


A – 9/11 Attacks
B – Mumbai Attack
C – Massacre in Kashmir
D – Israeli aggression in Palestine
E - Occupation of Afghanistan and Iraq etc
F – Al-Qaeda and Taliban


ur outlines are really very nice

u should have mention suggestions of Dialogue about all these matters as well ....
over all that was very good effort
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why i ve no comments about my outlne?what can possibly be the meaning of this indifference on the part of my fellow members?please do send ur comments on my outline,i really need that.

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wonderful peice of work.could also suggest the things to be negotiated.
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wonderful peice of work.could also suggest the things to be negotiated.

What kind of things to be negotiated? Can you please eleborate?
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Brother a well attempted outline. However it is indeed difficult to comment on outline as it is much short. Few comments:

1. It would be a good idea to provide some theoratical background in introduction and the next paragraph (Although not a rule, just a suggestion), and not to rely completely on historical events elaboration.

2. If you discuss each historical event with some theme then it would be much better. For example you stated:

I) inquisition in Europe: how muslims and jews lost their freedom of religion to the fanatic rule of Isabella and Ferdinand in spain.
2) US constitution begins with the words: Men are born equal. But Blacks remained slaves and disenfranchised for a better half of US history till 1960s.
3) Women disenfrachised in europe historically till 1930s.
4) Colonialism

My Suggestion:

1. The humans have lost their freedom because of tyrannic regimes like the rule of Ferdinend ........
2. Even though with modern ideas in politics like that of constitution, humanity saw new horizons of freedom. Constitution provided necessary enforcement mechanism for the basic human rights but however one of the oldest constitution i.e. American constitution distinguished among humans merely because of their skin clolor ......

I mean to say that you should provide a good background of any historical event or fact.

Rest you can provide more events or details as you like and can manage.

One more point that I would add is that the two adjoining paragraphs should have some connection and relevance.

Good luck.

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What kind of things to be negotiated? Can you please eleborate?
Thanks for your comments.

i'd love to,but need some comments on my outline before anything else...

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i humbly request all the respected members of this forum to pls share thier view regarding my work.thanks n regards
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