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My Essay outline kindly evaluate
Topic: Constitution Of New Provinces
A. Introduction
B. General Grounds for divsion of Provinces:
- Historic links
- Administrative inefficiency
- Economic Disparity
- Ehtnic and linguistic basis
- Other(examples from International cases)
C. Pakistan's Case
1. Punjab:
- large population, area/ administrative inefficieny
- Deteriorating law and order
- Economic disparity
- Case of Bahawalpur
2. Sindh
- Rural and Urban divide
- Karachi's importance for the province
- Feudalism and Illiteracy
3. Balochistan
- Religious Pashtuns and secular nationalists
- Trbial feuds and poverty
- provincial autonomy
- Case of Gwadar and Kalat
4. Khyber Pukhtoonkhwa
- Administrative ineffectiveness
- underdeveloped infrastructure
- Case of Swat, Chitral and Dir
- FATA and Pashtun areas of Balochistan
D. Politics on Division of Provinces
- Govt's strategy for coming elections
- PML-N's popularity in Nothern and Central Punjab and majority in PA
- MQM and PPP's stance on Sindh
- ANP's claim on FATA and Pashtun belt of Balochistan
E. Suggestions
1. Division basis:
- Poluation and area i.e Better Administration
- Economic disparity
- Languistic and ethnic grounds
2. Methodolgy
- Consensus of Political players
- Commission
- Referendum
- Constitional route of resolautions in Provincial assemblies
F. Conclusion
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Originally Posted by adventurous
Topic: Constitution Of New Provinces
A. Introduction
B. General Grounds for divsion of Provinces:
- Historic links
- Administrative inefficiency
- Economic Disparity
- Ehtnic and linguistic basis
- Other(examples from International cases)
C. Pakistan's Case
1. Punjab:
- large population, area/ administrative inefficieny
- Deteriorating law and order
- Economic disparity
- Case of Bahawalpur
2. Sindh
- Rural and Urban divide
- Karachi's importance for the province
- Feudalism and Illiteracy
3. Balochistan
- Religious Pashtuns and secular nationalists
- Trbial feuds and poverty
- provincial autonomy
- Case of Gwadar and Kalat
4. Khyber Pukhtoonkhwa
- Administrative ineffectiveness
- underdeveloped infrastructure
- Case of Swat, Chitral and Dir
- FATA and Pashtun areas of Balochistan
D. Politics on Division of Provinces
- Govt's strategy for coming elections
- PML-N's popularity in Nothern and Central Punjab and majority in PA
- MQM and PPP's stance on Sindh
- ANP's claim on FATA and Pashtun belt of Balochistan
E. Suggestions
1. Division basis:
- Poluation and area i.e Better Administration
- Economic disparity
- Languistic and ethnic grounds
2. Methodolgy
- Consensus of Political players
- Commission
- Referendum
- Constitional route of resolautions in Provincial assemblies
F. Conclusion
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i couldn't understand what you wanted to convey with this topic as your outline was a deviation from the topic..... May you could not write the correct words of topic or you are mistaken in interpreting it.....
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Introduction:
Pakistan's history has seen successive policies of centralization and decentralization y alternate governments. The struggle for acquiring bigger control over resources and gaining maximum authority has overshadowed other issues like ways and methods to improve governance and establish homogeneous society. But the prevailing conditions of ineffective governance, deteriorating law and order, economic disparity and poor health and education services has made an impact on national preferences and provided a feedback to political forces for realigning their approach towards addressing public problem.Its echo on national horizon returned with a proposal for creating new provinces or reconstituting the present ones on new lines. The objectivity of this suggestion has been viewed with much suspicion but it surely offers a new dimension in finding solution to many problems the country faces.
Division of provinces has, in history, been a major tool for better oversight, efficient administration and quick response to any calamity or revolt.This has however turned more complex these days. In a federal constitution, provinces are not mere administrative units, but they enjoy their position as federating units with residuary powers vested in them. Moreover, the modern democracy has to cater for public public opinion, how contradictory and emotional it may be. So, it constitutes a case for a complex, visionary and tough political decision on whether to make new provinces, if yes than how to go ahead with this.
@ rishzzz,
I tried to come up with a reply to topics like 'should new provinces be constituted in present pakistan?' or ' New provinces are better for the country or not'
The flow of the outlines is intended to show a sort of feasibility study for new provinces.
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In my opinion your outline suggests that you intend to mention about many many things in your essay. You can afford to do this while you're sitting at home and preparing for essay paper and you have ample time, but in practical circumstances when you are attempting a CSS essay paper, you don't have much time to make such a lengthy outline so try to condense it. In addition I think that with such an outline coming to the conclusion will be difficult as you have to summarize many things at the end.
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@ umer, thanks a lot. Its my first effort, so am trying to get the focus right. i will definitely try to be specific while writing in exams.
Can someone assess the 'Introduction'. This, being my maiden essay outline and introduction, will help me getting clearer on how to approach any topic.
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Topic is Constitution of Provinces, while the missing link is Constitution of Pakistan applied for having more provinces. The effort is appreciable but I second the opnion to condense it and avoid stretching. Somewhere I have found deviation as well...... So keep it up...And good Effort, once again
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Introduction:
Pakistan's history has seen successive policies of centralization and decentralization y alternate governments. The struggle for acquiring bigger control over resources and gaining maximum authority has overshadowed other issues like ways and methods to improve governance and establish homogeneous society. But the prevailing conditions of ineffective governance, deteriorating law and order, economic disparity and poor health and education services has made an impact on national preferences and provided a feedback to political forces for realigning their approach towards addressing public problem.Its echo on national horizon returned with a proposal for creating new provinces or reconstituting the present ones on new lines. The objectivity of this suggestion has been viewed with much suspicion but it surely offers a new dimension in finding solution to many problems the country faces.
Division of provinces has, in history, been a major tool for better oversight, efficient administration and quick response to any calamity or revolt.This has however turned more complex these days. In a federal constitution, provinces are not mere administrative units, but they enjoy their position as federating units with residuary powers vested in them. Moreover, the modern democracy has to cater for public public opinion, how contradictory and emotional it may be. So, it constitutes a case for a complex, visionary and tough political decision on whether to make new provinces, if yes than how to go ahead with this.
@ rishzzz,
I tried to come up with a reply to topics like 'should new provinces be constituted in present pakistan?' or ' New provinces are better for the country or not'
The flow of the outlines is intended to show a sort of feasibility study for new provinces.
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The above highlighted areas were either unsuitable or not fit as per requirements of sentence, you also committed some mistakes in using prepositions as well. However your good points are tenses and argumentative build-up despite the fact that this introduction is quite beginner you will have to do more...... on it
2ndly your outline was a nice effort if you make it according to said topic but not the said topic according to outline. Hope you got me...
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@ rishzzz, thanks a lot for your assessment. What do you mean by a beginner level?
- Should the language be improved? how? by using literary words?
- Should substance be replaced with some examples, quotes? How to better equip this introduction with such material? one example may be.
I am afraid that using more difficult words or changed style of portraying my thoughts would hinder my natural way of responding to a queries or building up an argument. What do you suggest?
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Quote:
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@ rishzzz, thanks a lot for your assessment. What do you mean by a beginner level?
- Should the language be improved? how? by using literary words?
- Should substance be replaced with some examples, quotes? How to better equip this introduction with such material? one example may be.
I am afraid that using more difficult words or changed style of portraying my thoughts would hinder my natural way of responding to a queries or building up an argument. What do you suggest?
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No your expression is improving. You just need practice. Lack of practice is the only cause behind these little errors. no need to panic.... keep the practice in pace. You will do better.....
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