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The intro should include the general idea of your essay. It should include whatever you want to be in your essay. E.g. If one is writing essay on Economy its problems and remedial measures. Ones intro should include a hint regarding present condition, problems, and steps taken for its recovery. It should be a precise of your whole essay.


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Poverty in Pakistan and its causes.....

Introduction
Kids are being 1. sailed by their mothers, jobless people are putting themselves on fire in front of tv camera, 2. owing to hungriness a girl with tears in her eyes looking for food in the trash of a famous fast food restaurant to quench the fire of her hunger, a little kid 3. who shivering with nothing on his body looking at other kids who are playing and enjoying 4. every facilities of life. Animals and humans are drinking water from a same pond. In hospitals, people are crying with awful pain, cursing hot weather and government, 5. and death of many people from a curable disease due to lack of health care.These are the realities of the pure land-Pakistan who is 6. engulfed in the cruel clutches of Poverty since her inception.

Current Scenario
Currently, Poverty has been 7. of the biggest 8. problem of Pakistan. It is multifaceted problem. 9. for instance poverty gives birth to other problems such as socioeconomic and political problems. According to the Asian Development bank's report 10. that in Pakistan there are nearly one third population is under the poverty line. That means these poor are unable to earn $1.5 per day. In this connection, in rural areas of our country, people's lives have been miserable. They are unable to get basic facilities, such as education, health, employment, even though some times they 11. can not afford to have two times meal in a day. As a result, in these conditions, people are encouraging their 12. childs to do child labour. Which is considered against the law of United Nations, people have become psychological patients and are getting wrong direction which is against the rule of law. In the same token, the uncertainty is being increased day by day.


Causes....

Overpopulation
Poverty has a lot of causes, but we can start it from the real root of all evils that is overpopulation. Since a decade Paksitan's population has been increasing 13. on rocket speed. According to the concerned organizations, it is predicated that if Pakistan does not control the ever-growing population then the result would be too much awful. According to them, by 2050 Pakistan will be the third most populated nation in the world. 14. Consequently, a lot of people can not access the basic needs of life.

Unemployment
Another cause of poverty is unemployment, Pakistan's nearly 60% population is youth. 15. And most of them are jobless in rural and urban areas. It is said that the youth are the future of a country. However, the future of our country is being executed unfairly. Jobless people are becoming psychological patients. Recently, 16. It is watched in breaking news on different Tv channels that jobless men holding their 17. degrees who putting themselves on fire in front of media, 18. because they think that by the time there is so hope for a green sign. 19. It is enough to say that is the worst effect on our youth of the history. The current democratic 20. government announced many programmes in the name of Benazir income support for technical educations in order to alleviate poverty. Sadly, this project 21. came under the corrupt people who 22. did not utilize it for the sole cause.

Child Labour
However, child labour is being increased to the apex. Poor people 23. can not afford to send their children to the school because they consider their children earning hands. People are encouraging their children for odd works e.g. welders, formers, sweepers and so on. Little children can be seen on school 24. time who are doing job in order to fulfill the basic needs of their family. However, media and 25. NGO's have condemned the child labour many times, on the other hand in past, some countries refused to import the goods which were made by children in factories. 26. But despite of all these factors, owing to inflation and poverty, parents are 27. bond to send their children to work.

Industrial
Moreover, many industrial unites are being closed because of many problems such as crisis of energy, terrorism and so on. In this result, many people have been jobless. This has affected the life of the poor people and they protest against it but nothing has been done for 28. the sorting out this problem so far.

Agricultural
Similarly, due to the lack of energy and water crisis, agricultural sector is being affected. As a matter of fact, Pakistan is an agricultural country. Most of the people in Pakistan are farmers. Due to the water and energy crisis their lands become only unfertilized lands. 29. Beside this, in rural areas, people have big family. When a father distributes his land to his sons into pieces, the land remains unfertilized owing to lack care of it. Most probably the sons of the farmer do not take interest in it. 30. And the result is increasing in poverty.

National Disasters
31. Besides, the natural disasters are the biggest problems for a nation whether in form of flood, earthquake or any other. Pakistan has been affected 32. from earthquakes in 2005 and floods of 2010-12. These disastrous realities are the worst 33. example for a nation in increasing poverty. As a matter of fact, the flood not only kills the people but also destroys their wealth and every thing they have. Due to these problems, poverty of Pakistan has been increasing since the recent flood.

Corruption
Nevertheless, corruption is another cause of poverty in Pakistan. Since the inception of Pakistan, 34.she has been looting by the corrupt people from top to bottom. Quaid e Azam Muhammad Ali Jinnah has made this country for the prosperity of people. 35. To see these current circumstances he must be crying like a wolf that he had not made this country for the corrupt people who are looting and sucking her blood like hungry vampires. Currently, a lot of causes have been disclosed 36. and are under the process by the Supreme Court of Pakistan. Sadly, from top to bottom corruption is on apex. Recently, the Asghar Khan case has tarnished and vanished the image of Pakistan 37. in the front of international media. Nine generals are involved in this case of corruption. 38. Beside this, there are lots of other causes which are concerned with the country including Swiss cases 39. and as well NLS, Steel Mill, Match fixing and so on have 40. boost the rate of poverty in Pakistan.

Politics
On the other hand, vendetta between political actors have been increasing day by day as the elections are very close. Most of the politicians are not doing considerable jobs in order to work for the prosperity of the nation. Sadly, Some politicians have been anchors of the electronic 41. media. Where they are debating for vote bank. Pre-planned talk shows are the concrete evidences. They do not refrain from doing these 42. sorts of things. Most of the politicians want to get the handle of this country in order to move it by their own will. In simple words, in our country, there are immature politicians, they do not even point out the key problems of the country. Owing to their irresponsible role whether by democratic politicians or opposition parties,43. all have not been having patriotic. Owing to these mingling factors, our socioeconomic and political problems have been increasing.

Terrorism/Extremism
44. Beside this, the gravest problem which has been on the apex since the nine elven is terrorism. 45. it is the problem which has been one of the biggest causes of the poverty in Pakistan. Terrorists are killing innocent people, hitting law and enforcement agencies, destroying public and government properties. Their ideology is different and they are ready to kill or be killed for their sole purpose. Due to hard line of 46. terrorist in Pakistan, innocent people are being killed in the name of so-called target killing. Target killing is increasing day by day. Mosques, Hospitals, Schools, offices, parks, any place-we name it and the place is not safe anymore. Recent attempt of murder of Mala and her friends' instance 47, is the most important. The extremists do not want women to be educated, because their ideologies are different and they consider 48. them 49. to be good Muslims. But unfortunately they are on wrong side, and killing innocent people. Every day people are being killed like a score game in numbers. Exclusive and live bomb explosion 49. showing flesh and blood every where. Owing to terrorism and extremisms' activities the industrial sector, transportation, business, trade and other economical growth's spots are being frozen. As a result, due to closing of the offices and working places poor people are being affected awfully. 50. And the rate of poverty is going to the rapid speed.


To be continued......

Please check it out if there is any mistake or any thing else you want to discuses would highly be appreciated.



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ANd thanks to my friends especially maria, mansoor, babar, shahreena, fasl who gave me some ideas for attempting it.....
Mistakes are highlighted as far as my knowledge is considered. I shall post corrections of these highlighted mistakes as I get time.

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1. Sold. You have written Sailed which is a blunder. The very first sentence possesses an unavoidable mistake. Don't forget; first impression is last impression.

2. Is looking.

3. Who is shivering.

4. Every facility.

5. Sentence highlighted doesn't give good sense.

6. You should use Engulfed By.

These were a few grammatical mistakes. Any senior can catch more. I would suggest you to precise your words. Try to use present indefinite tense when you present any descriptive scene.

7. one of the biggest.

8. Problems.

9. For.

10. in Pakistan nearly one third population is under the poverty line.

11. cannot.

12. Children

13. With.

14. Cannot

15. Do not start any sentence with AND.

16. it.

17. degrees are putting.

18. It doesn't give complete sense.

19. of the history?

20. Has announced.

21. has come.

22. who are not utilizing it.

23. cannot

24. who do.

25. NGOs

26. it Seems incorrect sentence. Construct it again.

27. bound.

28. Omit THE.

29. Besides.

30. Do not start any sentence with AND.

31. Here BESIDES doesn't seem good.

32. By.

33. Example?

34. Has been looted by.

35. Having seen or while seeing. Crying like a WOLF? What does it mean?

36. disclosed by and are under the process of.

37. In-front of.

38. Besides.

39. No need to use here AS WELL....

40. boosted .

41. Connect the former sentence with WHERE...

42. Sort

43. All are not being patriot or all are not having patriotic approach.

44. Besides.

45. It.

46. Terrorists.

47. MOST IMPORTANT? most deplorable.

48. themselves

49. Omit to be.

50. Don't start any sentence with AND.

If I am wrong any senior can make me correct.

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Thank you brother for pointing out my mistakes. There are also a lot of typo mistakes which you have pointed out. I will attempt it again. Thanks.
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Mistakes are highlighted as far as my knowledge is considered. I shall post corrections of these highlighted mistakes as I get time.

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I let you know, in many places you are mistaken.
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The nation's poverty rate is as high as it's been in almost two decades. Last year, 1 in 6 Pakistan was poor - more than 46 million people, including 16 million children. But on the campaign trail, the issue of poverty has received surprisingly little attention. When he first ran for president, Our leaders went to a low-income neighborhood in Balouchistan. and spoke passionately about hunger and poverty.

"The problem is that when politicians talk about jobs, they don't talk about how they're going to reach the most vulnerable people who have been out of work for the longest time.

Anti-poverty advocates say they're especially disappointed because they think Zardari has a very good record to run on. They credit him with keeping millions of additional people out of poverty during the recession with stimulus spending on things such as expanded tax credits for low-income families, unemployment insurance and food stamps. And they note that his health care law will extend Medicaid coverage to millions of additional poor people.
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your introduction of the essay seems more a news story rather than an introduction of the essay or it seems as a beginning of the political talk show.

The things you discussed in introduction should be discussed in consequences or effects of poverty.

Moreover, while giving the causes you discussed consesquences also which should be discussed separately.

You should be to the point and precise while attempting an essay.

There are lot of grammatical mistakes as mentioned by zuhaib. You should work on these mistakes.
hopefully you will get rid of these mistakes and get good marks in essay.
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I have made up my mind to post here the introductions to topics I practice. It will not only expose my practice to scrutiny and criticism, which will guide me in the right direction but will also help the novice writers is getting an idea of how to write an introduction. Comments will always be cordially received.
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Dialogue is the best course to combat terrorism.
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Terrorism is an enormous threat to humanity today. It is essential to combat it. It can be combated in two ways: through force or through dialogue. Force is the naked us of weapons. It can suppress the terrorists; it will force to hide themselves but it will not disarm them. It is, therefore, the last resort. Terrorists can be disarmed through dialogue only. The dialogue encompasses diplomatic intercourse, social reconciliation, economic incentives and political integration. The terrorists have demands. Force does not address them. Only dialogue can. Consequently, we need to have faith in dialogue as the best course to combat terrorism.
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United Nations: achievements, failures and future
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The organisation of the United Nations is the clothing of the noblest dream of humanity, a dream of global unity and cooperation. It has evolved asa global moral force. It has existed as a sanction and authority behind international laws. It has provided a platform for dialogue and intercourse on international issues. It ended colonization and de-legitimized naked intervention. It has stood up against slavery, child labor and injustice to immigrant workers. But the list of failures of UN is deplorable in the same degree. It has failed to implement its core objectives: international peace and security and cooperation. It has witnessed genocides, dictatorships and nuclear proliferation but failed to prevent them. Palestine imbroglio is stark exposition of its impotence. But assessing the role of UN in these respects is tantamount to ignoring the fact of its creation. It was not prepared for the onerous roles we expect it to undertake. It was made for the Western and North American nations, yet has earned the respect of all nations. Its role must continue. For this, reform of the security council is necessary. Only after internal reforms can the UN meet its current challenges. Otherwise, it may be reduced to a nominal global organization.
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