Women's Empowerment

[uzmauzi]

Please check my first attempt for writing essay on women empowerment.
Following are outlines.

Outlines:

1) Freedom Of Women ( Introduction)
(a) What is women empowerment
(b) Cultural and religious impact
(c) Current scenario
2) Women in Urban and Rural Societies
(a) Women in urban society of Pakistan
(b) Women in rural society of Pakistan
(c) Comparison of rural women to urban
3) Employment
(a) Women at work in 21st century
(b) Women's economic role in Pakistan
(c) Use of Islam to deny women's right of freedom for work
(d) Job environment and veil
(e) The status of women at workplace after the fall of communism in
Eastern Europe
4) Problems at workplace
(a) Gender discrimination at workplace
(b) Inequality in division of labor
(c) Use of Islam to deny women's right of freedom for work
(d) Poor Security
(e) Insufficient maternity leaves
(f) Sexual Harassment
5) Education Of Women
(a) Gender disparity in education
(b) Role of government in women's education
(c) Status of women's education in Pakistan
6) Problems of Education For Women
(a) Problems of access to education
(b) Problems of separate school for girls
(c) Fear of extremists
(e) Fear of losing power
(f) Frequent changes in educational policy
(g) Solution of above problems
7) Women's role as a housewife
(a) Housewives are more responsible mothers than working women
(b) Being a housewife is a job, not a role
(c) Women's role as a housewife in modern society
(d) Women's role as a housewife in Pakistan
(e) Status of housewife in Muslim society
8) Conclusion

[exclusively]

Sorry to say but I am not satisfied with your attempt. Your outlines are not up to the mark. Please don't play with your essay, learn 'how to attempt an essay'. Though your outlines are good but you lack a lot in techniques and way. I am not discouraging you am just telling you what I have observed.

[uzmauzi]

Originally Posted by exclusively

Sorry to say but I am not satisfied with your attempt. Your outlines are not up to the mark. Please don't play with your essay, learn 'how to attempt an essay'. Though your outlines are good but you lack a lot in techniques and way. I am not discouraging you am just telling you what I have observed.

Thanks a lot. Please help me. How can I improve writing style? How to attempt an essay?

[IslamabadKid]

You have given the chequered picture of the essay, Women's empowerment. All you need is to connect the dots to make the vividly clear picture of your thoughts about the respective topic.

I have not studied about Women and society in details yet, but I believe in a general theory to solve most of the essays and that is:"Ask yourself the following questions: What is ABC? Why should ABC? How to ABC? So on..."

Considering the above-mentioned theory, I am to make the outline in the following way:

• Introduction(wherein you have to start off with the question:"What is women's empowerment?")
• Why is empowerment of women necessary?
• How to empower women?
• Women's empowerment for shaping the future of a country(with special reference to Pakistan)
• Recommendations
• Conclusion

Thereafter all you need is to put your thoughts in the broad categories that I have outlined above.

NOTE: You can play more with the outline, but be logical; and do not try to present your thoughts as if you are brainstorming, which is meant to pen down the thoughts on a separate paper to make the organised, well-balanced outline.

P.S: Further amendments in the stage of processing the outline will be encouraged.

-israr

[uzmauzi]

Originally Posted by IslamabadKid

You have given the chequered picture of the essay, Women's empowerment. All you need is to connect the dots to make the vividly clear picture of your thoughts about the respective topic.

I have not studied about Women and society in details yet, but I believe in a general theory to solve most of the essays and that is:"Ask yourself the following questions: What is ABC? Why should ABC? How to ABC? So on..."

Considering the above-mentioned theory, I am to make the outline in the following way:

• Introduction(wherein you have to start off with the question:"What is women's empowerment?")
• Why is empowerment of women necessary?
• How to empower women?
• Women's empowerment for shaping the future of a country(with special reference to Pakistan)
• Recommendations
• Conclusion

Thereafter all you need is to put your thoughts in the broad categories that I have outlined above.

NOTE: You can play more with the outline, but be logical; and do not try to present your thoughts as if you are brainstorming, which is meant to pen down the thoughts on a separate paper to make the organised, well-balanced outline.

P.S: Further amendments in the stage of processing the outline will be encouraged.

-israr

Thanks. I 'll post new attempt but organized manner.I know, I have to work hard and more practice.