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[zuhaib ahmed]

Miserable condition of Woman
The woman is practised sole of shoe since the time, she is ever limited till ceilings, caged in four walls, murdered for sake of honor, deprived of education, bereaved of due rights, victim of acid spree, brides are burnt, enslaved, engraved, chocked, banned, chained, sold in dark of nights, for rapist and lusty men she is like an innocent sheep among dogs, foxes and wolves and she has ever bore and tolerated torments, tensions, tragedies and tortures. Is the woman born for miseries?


Before Islam the woman was known curse, was practised worse than slaves, they had no freedom and free will, they were used for one purpose. In any home where a daughter got birth she was known curse and either she was engraved alive or fired or thrown In ditches or sold in pennies, she was killed to death before her innocents eyes putt glance over this world, People were female infanticides. Women’s conditions were speechless, she was a prize in wars but after Islam, Prophet Mohammad almost eradicated these customs of ignorant people which were started since ice ages, stone ages and dark ages, daughters were then declared as a blessing, mother was said three times greater than father and she was given basic rights and Prophet Mohammad PBUH says. “He is worst who is worse with his wife and children.” But, alas! These same customs are alive in corners of world, still daughter is known curse in some parts of India, Africa and Egypt and she is still practised worse than an animal in our country Pakistan.


Dowry has consumed and killed thousands of girls in Pakistan. Girls have suicide because of dowry and those girls who bring insufficient dowry they are tortured and dealt as a slave for home works. Newspapers are full with cases of dowry system. Many girls remain unmarried because they cannot afford dowry. Islam is totally against of dowry system as Quran says. “And give women (on marriage) their dower as a free gift; but if they, of their own good pleasure, remit any part of it to you. Take it and enjoy it with right good cheer.” (AlNisa: 4). It is prohibitive to ask for things from girl’s parents to provide dowry but it is right for a girl she should be given dowry as her parents can afford.


Swara and Vani custom is an awful crime committed in Pakistan by rude and ignorant minds. If any member of home does injustice with anyone in village, then, it becomes law for sinner to give unmarried girl to whom he did injustice or any crime. Girls of 12 or 14 years are married with 50 or 60 years of aged men. Those girls’ lives are ruined for the sake of her family members, then these girls are practised as sole of shoe, they are used like animals and then, all life they pass as a woman in graveyard.


Honour killing is worst crime, which is being committed highly in Pakistan and India. If women goes out or seen out a wild men (her brother or father) beheads or balds her with axe. It has been an ordinary crime. It is against every religion, as well as in islam its prohibited because Quran says: “if you kill one man you kill whole humankind.” Men has reached moon but he has not changed his nature of wildness, He remains a wild beast and where he sees any sparkle he comes with guns, axes and swords and kill girls for the sake of honour and then they curl their moustaches that they did a quite good job. Bride burning and acid throwing are too common crimes and they are also part of columns in newspapers.


Literacy rate in females is just 36% as compared to men that is 64% in Pakistan. People of Pakistan consider that women must be just a good house wife, if she goes school or gets education she becomes party girl and Barbie girl. That’s why girls’ school and centres are being attacked and blasted by Taliban’s and illiterates who call themselves true Muslim. Islam asks to get females learnt and educated as the prophet Mohammad highly emphasized for education of women. He says: “acquiring education is must for women and men.” Women is also denied to get job or earn livelihood because she is known a bird to be caged, freedom is not for women she is to live ever in home then in grave and this situation is common in Pakistan.


If woman gets educated then she is not let for getting job or she denies herself not to go because they are asked in field for sexual intercourse which becomes spot over her respect. Do we not know? When a deer comes among foxes, will they leave her go freely? Men of Pakistan should give respect to the women, they should not resemble to beast character. Hazrat Mohammad PBUH says. “When you see woman down your eyes, and do not see her again.” And at other place Prophet Mohammad says. “If you see women and think about her sexuality and lustily in mind means you raped her.” Men of Pakistan should know value of women and they should know what Islam says them for women.


The western world is known educated and developed but in 2008 nearly 90,000 reported being raped, means in every 3rd minute a rape takes place in USA. This is because of free atmosphere no veil or to cover body rightly. They wear half clothes which are not-allowed in Islam and Pakistani women have also started to wear mini shirts and skirts, that’s why rapes and sexual intercourse is increasing in Pakistan. A woman without veil is like an open room of rubies and pearls, will a greedy Man or thief not try to get rubies and pearls? and at the same time pearls are covered or room is locked, will a man dare to inter in? So, Islamic law says to wear veil. Which decreases rape cases and women remain in purity. Allah says in Quran; “And say to the believing women that they should lower their gaze and guard their modesty; and that they should not display their beauty and ornaments except what must ordinarily appear thereof; that they should draw their veils over their bosoms and not display their beauty except to their husbands...31" (Holy Qur'an 24:30-31) Women should wear veil when she goes out of home, it is must.

International media or western world speak ill about Islam that In Muslim countries women are not allowed to get education. Its not Islam which is against women education but narrow minded scholars and Muslims has chained legs of women. Talibanisation and other communities are apples of discord. Education in Pakistan is developing but in many parts of Pakistan same condition and tradition go on as in Baluchistan, FATA, tribal areas and interior Sindh.


Lap of mother is first tuition of child. If mother is learned and educated her children get real tuition of life. They are taught to know very essence of life and they do not derail from the track of life. As is the society so is the system or as is the home so is child.


Freedom of women does not mean that she starts to go in bars, disco dances and other ill places. She has to live in morality, in limitations which are asked by Quran and has to be like a perfect woman should be. A perfect woman should try to be Scholar like BiBi Aisha R.A, passionate like Helen Keller, socialist and democratic like Benazir Bhutto, insurmountable like Mother Teresa.

Women in past, they were not given due rights and social values but in present time women have proven that they can do everything, they have proven themselves in every field of world. Women can do a lot for betterment of country as she has equal rights. Western world has given freedom to women but that has been worse, because they cross the limitations. Woman if gets out of home must not forget Islamic culture. In Pakistan and many other countries still majority of women is chained, candles of desires & hopes are extinguished; their Dreams are buried like nameless corpse. Women should fight for their rights; still in their eyes are ceased drops. They should tell the world and write their names in pages of history. Their first right is to get education and they should fight for this. Government should open school for girls as many as they can because if one woman is learned whole home is learned and no doubt they are blessing. Woman is not born for miseries she is known blessing and bliss. This is ignorant nature of men who has made women miserable. Woman is breath breathing human-being, this is her right, and she should be given her rights with justice.

Written By:
Xuhaib Ahmed Pirzada THE TRAVELLER.

[marilatif]

if this essay is really written by you then u dont need any improvement. simply superb. just go and sit in the exam, u are going to top it. but i seriously doubt that it is written by u.

pardon me if i am wrong.

[Hamza Kahlon]

he will top the essay exam if this topic comes which obviously is not certain.

But i agree your essay covers almost every aspect of the topic, but in an idealistic scenario, id say u can further improve the structure of ur essay.
Another thing, there should be an outline or atleast a thesis statement so that the examiner knows what all ur covering and how, without needing to read every word of ur essay. U could suffer because of that.

In the end a very good effort, but do work on ur grammer (noticed quite a few mistakes) and try to 'upgrade' ur written expression and vocabulary.

P.S. After going through a few paragraphs just now, i wanted to 'warn' for ur own good that work on ur grammer. Uve made innumerable mistakes. Good ideas but horrible grammer.

The only thing i can suggest u in this short time, i guess is that u should ready new articles and focus on sentence structure.

[zuhaib ahmed]

Originally Posted by marilatif

if this essay is really written by you then u dont need any improvement. simply superb. just go and sit in the exam, u are going to top it. but i seriously doubt that it is written by u.

pardon me if i am wrong.

Oh! Thanks a lot My Highness for great remarks and appreciation. I need bachelor degree to sit in CSS exams as i am in intermediate.
I assure you it's written by me. I want to show you poem of mine which resembles with this.
Here it is:

WOMEN IN GRAVEYARD

Limited till ceiling, caged in four walls,
No. no! Don’t fire and she there falls
Women are practiced as sole of shoe,
Oh! Man, listen to her cries and calls.

Oh! Just for sake of honour,
Girls beheaded, thrown in corner.
Separated are the agreed hearts,
Born daughters and killed sooner.

Curse of dowry kills brides,
Bereaved of deserving rights,
O! Buried, in buried graveyard!
Women sold in darkness of nights.

Eyes which ever dared,
Blinded, no one cared.
And those who love here,
Fired, they are being fired.

Being sinless blamed & defamed,
Injured, punished and damned.
Justice is in which direction?
They were killed who claimed.

No justice, women ever enslave,
Shroud- less women’s will engrave.
Wings of free will are broken,
Shattered dreams are save.

Chocked by father, brother & husband,
Banned for ever and they are chained.
Women are used as patrimony.
Tired eyes rained, hunted hearts pained.

Extinguished candles of desires & hopes,
Dreams are buried like nameless corpse.
Oh! Women, fight for your rights,
Still in your eyes ceased drops.

Xuhaib Ahmed THE TRAVELLER

Thanks a lot and keep on guiding me. =)

[zuhaib ahmed]

Originally Posted by Hamza Kahlon

he will top the essay exam if this topic comes which obviously is not certain.

But i agree your essay covers almost every aspect of the topic, but in an idealistic scenario, id say u can further improve the structure of ur essay.
Another thing, there should be an outline or atleast a thesis statement so that the examiner knows what all ur covering and how, without needing to read every word of ur essay. U could suffer because of that.

In the end a very good effort, but do work on ur grammer (noticed quite a few mistakes) and try to 'upgrade' ur written expression and vocabulary.

P.S. After going through a few paragraphs just now, i wanted to 'warn' for ur own good that work on ur grammer. Uve made innumerable mistakes. Good ideas but horrible grammer.

The only thing i can suggest u in this short time, i guess is that u should ready new articles and focus on sentence structure.

Thanks a lot. Indeed my grammar is weak. ;( Yes, i shall try to make outlines in next attempt.
I would work over it as i have ample of time almost 3.5 years. Humary pass waqt bohat hai.
Just keep on praying for me and let not me astray. THANKS!

[Sana Tariq Khan]

simply awesome

[zuhaib ahmed]

Originally Posted by Sana Tariq Khan

simply awesome

Thanks for appreciation.

[Shazi76]

Originally Posted by zuhaib ahmed

Miserable condition of Woman
The woman is practised sole of shoe since the time, she is ever limited till ceilings, caged in four walls, murdered for sake of honor, deprived of education, bereaved of due rights, victim of acid spree, brides are burnt, enslaved, engraved, chocked, banned, chained, sold in dark of nights, for rapist and lusty men she is like an innocent sheep among dogs, foxes and wolves and she has ever bore and tolerated torments, tensions, tragedies and tortures. Is the woman born for miseries?


Before Islam the woman was known curse, was practised worse than slaves, they had no freedom and free will, they were used for one purpose. In any home where a daughter got birth she was known curse and either she was engraved alive or fired or thrown In ditches or sold in pennies, she was killed to death before her innocents eyes putt glance over this world, People were female infanticides. Women’s conditions were speechless, she was a prize in wars but after Islam, Prophet Mohammad almost eradicated these customs of ignorant people which were started since ice ages, stone ages and dark ages, daughters were then declared as a blessing, mother was said three times greater than father and she was given basic rights and Prophet Mohammad PBUH says. “He is worst who is worse with his wife and children.” But, alas! These same customs are alive in corners of world, still daughter is known curse in some parts of India, Africa and Egypt and she is still practised worse than an animal in our country Pakistan.


Dowry has consumed and killed thousands of girls in Pakistan. Girls have suicide because of dowry and those girls who bring insufficient dowry they are tortured and dealt as a slave for home works. Newspapers are full with cases of dowry system. Many girls remain unmarried because they cannot afford dowry. Islam is totally against of dowry system as Quran says. “And give women (on marriage) their dower as a free gift; but if they, of their own good pleasure, remit any part of it to you. Take it and enjoy it with right good cheer.” (AlNisa: 4). It is prohibitive to ask for things from girl’s parents to provide dowry but it is right for a girl she should be given dowry as her parents can afford.


Swara and Vani custom is an awful crime committed in Pakistan by rude and ignorant minds. If any member of home does injustice with anyone in village, then, it becomes law for sinner to give unmarried girl to whom he did injustice or any crime. Girls of 12 or 14 years are married with 50 or 60 years of aged men. Those girls’ lives are ruined for the sake of her family members, then these girls are practised as sole of shoe, they are used like animals and then, all life they pass as a woman in graveyard.


Honour killing is worst crime, which is being committed highly in Pakistan and India. If women goes out or seen out a wild men (her brother or father) beheads or balds her with axe. It has been an ordinary crime. It is against every religion, as well as in islam its prohibited because Quran says: “if you kill one man you kill whole humankind.” Men has reached moon but he has not changed his nature of wildness, He remains a wild beast and where he sees any sparkle he comes with guns, axes and swords and kill girls for the sake of honour and then they curl their moustaches that they did a quite good job. Bride burning and acid throwing are too common crimes and they are also part of columns in newspapers.


Literacy rate in females is just 36% as compared to men that is 64% in Pakistan. People of Pakistan consider that women must be just a good house wife, if she goes school or gets education she becomes party girl and Barbie girl. That’s why girls’ school and centres are being attacked and blasted by Taliban’s and illiterates who call themselves true Muslim. Islam asks to get females learnt and educated as the prophet Mohammad highly emphasized for education of women. He says: “acquiring education is must for women and men.” Women is also denied to get job or earn livelihood because she is known a bird to be caged, freedom is not for women she is to live ever in home then in grave and this situation is common in Pakistan.


If woman gets educated then she is not let for getting job or she denies herself not to go because they are asked in field for sexual intercourse which becomes spot over her respect. Do we not know? When a deer comes among foxes, will they leave her go freely? Men of Pakistan should give respect to the women, they should not resemble to beast character. Hazrat Mohammad PBUH says. “When you see woman down your eyes, and do not see her again.” And at other place Prophet Mohammad says. “If you see women and think about her sexuality and lustily in mind means you raped her.” Men of Pakistan should know value of women and they should know what Islam says them for women.


The western world is known educated and developed but in 2008 nearly 90,000 reported being raped, means in every 3rd minute a rape takes place in USA. This is because of free atmosphere no veil or to cover body rightly. They wear half clothes which are not-allowed in Islam and Pakistani women have also started to wear mini shirts and skirts, that’s why rapes and sexual intercourse is increasing in Pakistan. A woman without veil is like an open room of rubies and pearls, will a greedy Man or thief not try to get rubies and pearls? and at the same time pearls are covered or room is locked, will a man dare to inter in? So, Islamic law says to wear veil. Which decreases rape cases and women remain in purity. Allah says in Quran; “And say to the believing women that they should lower their gaze and guard their modesty; and that they should not display their beauty and ornaments except what must ordinarily appear thereof; that they should draw their veils over their bosoms and not display their beauty except to their husbands...31" (Holy Qur'an 24:30-31) Women should wear veil when she goes out of home, it is must.

International media or western world speak ill about Islam that In Muslim countries women are not allowed to get education. Its not Islam which is against women education but narrow minded scholars and Muslims has chained legs of women. Talibanisation and other communities are apples of discord. Education in Pakistan is developing but in many parts of Pakistan same condition and tradition go on as in Baluchistan, FATA, tribal areas and interior Sindh.


Lap of mother is first tuition of child. If mother is learned and educated her children get real tuition of life. They are taught to know very essence of life and they do not derail from the track of life. As is the society so is the system or as is the home so is child.


Freedom of women does not mean that she starts to go in bars, disco dances and other ill places. She has to live in morality, in limitations which are asked by Quran and has to be like a perfect woman should be. A perfect woman should try to be Scholar like BiBi Aisha R.A, passionate like Helen Keller, socialist and democratic like Benazir Bhutto, insurmountable like Mother Teresa.

Women in past, they were not given due rights and social values but in present time women have proven that they can do everything, they have proven themselves in every field of world. Women can do a lot for betterment of country as she has equal rights. Western world has given freedom to women but that has been worse, because they cross the limitations. Woman if gets out of home must not forget Islamic culture. In Pakistan and many other countries still majority of women is chained, candles of desires & hopes are extinguished; their Dreams are buried like nameless corpse. Women should fight for their rights; still in their eyes are ceased drops. They should tell the world and write their names in pages of history. Their first right is to get education and they should fight for this. Government should open school for girls as many as they can because if one woman is learned whole home is learned and no doubt they are blessing. Woman is not born for miseries she is known blessing and bliss. This is ignorant nature of men who has made women miserable. Woman is breath breathing human-being, this is her right, and she should be given her rights with justice.

Written By:
Xuhaib Ahmed Pirzada THE TRAVELLER.

Very nice dear Zuhaib......Its really an applausable effort....Keep it up
Prayers with you

[doli]

very well written ...keep it up

[zuhaib ahmed]

Originally Posted by doli

very well written ...keep it up

Thanks a lot sis G!