54 pages my gosh.....cheetay ho tum tou bhaiii ..... the outline is great mashallah...only if there are no mistakes, this wud be the best essay on this topic....cheersss!!!

Your outline is very impressive but how come possible that you have written essay on 57 pages in 3 hours period?

@irshadsod...its possible wen the person is in the writing business...m going to be a published writer vey soon i.A
@umarabbas...janab compliment was vry nice..hum kch aisey hi hain..thanku...bas ALLAH kal wala sci pass kra dey amen
@hunain...thankyou
thanks a million you all

please check out my outline .. i have mentioned few points below of my essay ..


Projects:
Thar Coal Deposits, Saindak Copper, Kakar, Sui, Wind Corridors, Gypsum, Rock Salt, Limestone

Analysis, Mangement in text with:
Mughals, China and developed nations

In Suggestions:
Super Computers, China Assistances, GAAP and AAA, Example of Kala Bagh Dam, Corruption - Kickbacks and Patronages; nepotism and croynism, Import of technology to own it, rather enjoying sharing at 20:80 ratio. etc

Idioms Used in between:
10 and 15

2 Quotations:
One by Meliore - " It is not only what we do, but also what we do not do, for which we are accountable "

Other by Quaid-e-Azam at the end - " Pakistan came into being to live forever " ( I have used this quotation because in my conlusion i have written that Quaid has gift us Pakistan with enormous deposits of Minerals, thats why we should care of our resources to uphold our self with dignity "

Your outline seems good not very comprehensive but gives a gist of your writing. Your writing skill can make a difference while attempting paper so what I believe is that written matterial matters more then outline if its not very comprehensive like yours.

So if you have written analytically and relevantly you are at safer side.

Umar you have narrowed down the topic too much. Your outline is not the true indicator of your writing even its not very much descriptive to clarify the topic. I hope you have written well with authentic citation to go through the paper safely.

Keep one thing in mind Essay examiner tolerate if you have missed some of the dimension or description of the topic but can never tolerate if you have played with irrelavents.

Best of Luck for your result

Silent Volcano here I am adding my opinion that may not match to others and I hope you will take it positively.


I think your intro should constitute the prevailing situation of man and women disparity in Pakistan along with its future prospect.

Intro is always the mirror of your essay and examiner should get the idea what you are going to discuss in the ensuing paras. Its brevity and clarity determine that you are gonna crack the hard nut of essay or not. So as per my opinion your intro isnt well defined.

I think its highly magnified concept of your essay because it should given more than a para just to emphasize that Pakistan being the Muslim country follows Islamic teachings in all spheres of life especially to chain women into the home but when it comes to women rights we rarely follows them. Then you can discuss women education.

Relevant to the topic but have discussed so precisely.

Relevant but not presented in the way that could touch the reader. I mean to say you have presented gold in earthern ware.

I dont know how you have discussed it because this very line isnt so descriptive.

Silent the essay has ended but I couldnt find the answer of Can I mean Can women be equal to men in Pakistan
No discussion over the topic point
No pros and cons of the topic
No justification to support your argument point.

I hope you will check it out once again.

Best of Luck for your CSS

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i attempted can women be equal to men in pakistan

outline
introduction
women and men,two essentials of society
women and men in pakistan
women past and present in pakistan
. history
. current scenario
problems or challenges face by women
. domestic violence
.honor killing
.gender discrimination
. forced marriages
. the discrimination of lower social status
. harassments women have to face
at social level
at jobs
physically and mentally
issue of women empowerment to bring status equal to man
problems of women empowerment
.at poltical level
. at economic level
. at social level
efforts of various institutions and organizations to improve conditions
. efforts fo government
.efforts of women right organizations
. efforts of ngos
. efforts of united nations(UNDP)
problems exacerbating discrimination
.illiteracy
. religious and cultural taboos
. feudal system
.paradox of man thinking
.social boundaries
. social injustice
. inaccessibility to justice
. no political representation
pakistan an islamic state has some boundaries
how to improve status of women
(here i mention 12 points for improvemnt of status socially,economically,politically,educationally and duties of male members)
equal status of women will have better effects(mentioned effects)
conclusion
(conditions improving
women are not equal to men
can be equal through sustained efforts )this was my conclusive paragraph
24 pages
comments

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08. Without independent truth-finding commission , accountability is unachievable?

Essay Outline!!


Introduction

• What are truth finding institutions?
• What is accountability?
• Main scheme behind the predicament

Historical Implications and the standard of truth finding institutions in Pakistan

• Recent Scenario….. (Judicial set-backs and Government interference)
• NRO, the legal protection to corruption

Struggle in discovering independent truth finding commissions cum legal frame works

• From 1947-1960(PCA 1947)
• From 1961-1988(PPC 1960)
• From 1988-1999(CPI, PCPS, NAO)
• From 2000-2009(NAB reforms 2002 and police reforms)

The Fault lines behind the grieved situation

• Corruption in United India, inherited to Pakistan
• Economic problems of people and inflation
• Poor standard of life
• Meager accountability standards
• The highest corrupt institutes in Pakistan (WAPDA, NHA, MWH, POLICE, PUBLIC SERVICES & COURTS…..)

Recent surveys and crying facts and figures

• CPI
• PCPS
• WWGI
• TI surveys

• Different kinds of corruptions and frauds
• Electoral fraud, embezzlement, kickbacks, nepotism, cronyism, petty bribery etc
• Government’s attitude of policies to address mismanagement

Effects of the widespread calamity

• Domestic corruption rises
• Poverty and economic conditions worsen
• Inequitable distribution of wealth
• Institutes are derailed
• Good governance invisible
• Undermining FDI, Investment and inflows

Recommendations to improve the aggravated crisis

• Independent judiciary and complete check
• OMBUDSMAN, AUDITOR GENERAL OF PAKISTAN, NAB to work independently without government’s interference
• Media can give a live audit
• Transparent parameters and recruitments
• E-Governance will bring revolution
• Zero tolerance measures

Critical Appraisal




i started essay with a one page quotation of andrew jackson and it was of 40 pages essay including outline....

but in the outline i could not write in good hand writing as rest of the paper was, because i wrote it in just 10 mins cz time was nearing end.....
have i got chances to pass the paper???

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i attempted this topic "Without independent truth-finding commission , accountability is unachievable"
my outline included almost the same points but historical reference in my essay was not in so detail.

@ deadly

I dont know if your outline is good or bad, but it is more or less similar to what i wrote on this topic. At least I am satisfied now that someone has approached this side as I did. (For the last two days the idea that i might have lost the plot of my essay was haunting me, though )

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"Read in the name of your Lord who created, created man from a clot. Read, for your Lord is most Generous, Who teaches by means of the pen, teaches man what he does not know." (96: 1-5)

i just want to tell u guys that i appeared last time but couldnt pass because of the political science calamity ,i want to share some thing with u all.Can u imagine i didnt write essay outline in my previous attempt and scored 50 marks by writing 12 pages.Secondly how come no one has attempted the last topic which was imperialist designs of super powers and their derisive implications ,it was a piece of cake considering the knowledge of u all people