Essay Paper 2010 - Page 5

irshadsod · #41 Sunday, March 07, 2010

Quote:

Originally Posted by Noor_2009

i wrote can women be equal to men in Pakistan?

Outlines

Introduction
about equality and women condition etc as i did mention all in my essay

can women be equal to men in Pakistan

women is not equal to men in Pakistan but she can be equal to men in Pakistan
we shall have to see all those places where she has not equal rights
then we can explain how can she be equal with men in Pakistan
women status in Pakistan

Faces of inequality of women in Pakistan
Women in home
Women in society
Women in education
Women in politics
Women in jobs
Women in culture
Women in economy
Women in equality in decision making

Poor women
Women inequality in relation
Women as sister (as compare with brother)
Women as wife ( as compare with husband)
Women as daughter ( as comparer with son)
Women as mother ( as compare with father)
Government steps

Politics, law, NGOs , Education and in jobs fix quota

Suggestions

Pakistan a Islamic country
Islamic principles should be follow
Orthodox Muslim thoughts should be discourage
Education should be necessary
Women should remove her fear
Women should know about her rights
Brother should be cooperative
Husband should be cooperative
Father should be cooperative
Law and order condition should be better for women
Women should be courage in decision making
More quota for jobs should be increased for women
More sets should be reserved in parliament
Women should be courage in economy field
Narrow mind thinking should be change
Media should play its role
Women can play better Role in country progress

Conclusion

criticism will be welcome....

Noor, you have attempted essay very well. There is no major blunder or deviation in your outline. You have rightly touched all the dimensions of the essay with proper balance. I don't see any thing excessively risky in your attempt.

Wish you best of luck. You have passed Essay paper. Now concentrate on the remaining papers. Mark my words if you have attempted essay in the same manner as you have outlined here in forum then no body can cause you fail in this paper.

Saleeqa Batool · #42 Sunday, March 07, 2010

I attemted "Dialouge is the only course to combatt terrorisam.My outlines are reproduced below

1. Introduction
Dialogue indispensable to curb terrorism
Current scenario with reference to USA and Afghanistan

2. Why dialogue?
a. Ideological war
b. Terrorists commitment to their cause
c. Anti-western sentiments amongst common man
d. Tribal Norms
e. Terrorist assert themselves as freedom fighter
f. Availability of finance to the terrorists

3. Does invitation for dialogues amounts to surrender before unjust demands of terrorists?

4. Scope of dialogue must include
a. Establishment of peace
b. Distinction between different motives of terrorists
c. Empowerment of locals

5. Dialogues must be accompanied with other measures
a. Social development of violent region
b. End of discrimination against Muslims
c. Promotion of interfaith harmony

6. Conclusion

Waseem Riaz Khan · #43 Sunday, March 07, 2010

Can women be equal to men in Pakistan.

The topic was quite tricky. Most people have thought it the Rights of Women in Pakistan or Inequality Of women.
The topic covers the latest developments and future of women in Pakistan. It has hardly anything to do with what women do in western nations and in Islam. Its solely about pakistan and about the potential of women.

Quote:

Originally Posted by Saleeqa Batool

I attemted "Dialouge is the only course to combatt terrorisam.My outlines are reproduced below

1. Introduction
Dialogue indispensable to curb terrorism
Current scenario with reference to USA and Afghanistan

2. Why dialogue?
a. Ideological war
b. Terrorists commitment to their cause
c. Anti-western sentiments amongst common man
d. Tribal Norms
e. Terrorist assert themselves as freedom fighter
f. Availability of finance to the terrorists

3. Does invitation for dialogues amounts to surrender before unjust demands of terrorists?

4. Scope of dialogue must include
a. Establishment of peace
b. Distinction between different motives of terrorists
c. Empowerment of locals

5. Dialogues must be accompanied with other measures
a. Social development of violent region
b. End of discrimination against Muslims
c. Promotion of interfaith harmony

6. Conclusion

Nicely elaborated indeed. Have you qouted some historical evidences where dialogue had really solved the issue of terrorism?????

I think this was the most simple and easy-to-comprehend essay in the whole paper. The chances of getting astray are minimum.

irshadsod · #44 Sunday, March 07, 2010

Quote:

Originally Posted by Saleeqa Batool

I attemted "Dialouge is the only course to combatt terrorisam.My outlines are reproduced below

1. Introduction
Dialogue indispensable to curb terrorism
Current scenario with reference to USA and Afghanistan

2. Why dialogue?
a. Ideological war
b. Terrorists commitment to their cause
c. Anti-western sentiments amongst common man
d. Tribal Norms
e. Terrorist assert themselves as freedom fighter
f. Availability of finance to the terrorists

3. Does invitation for dialogues amounts to surrender before unjust demands of terrorists?

4. Scope of dialogue must include
a. Establishment of peace
b. Distinction between different motives of terrorists
c. Empowerment of locals

5. Dialogues must be accompanied with other measures
a. Social development of violent region
b. End of discrimination against Muslims
c. Promotion of interfaith harmony

6. Conclusion

Good attempt but essay could be more beautified had you quoted some major examples from history regarding the effectiveness and positive results of initiating "Dialogue" and some major negative implications / drawbacks from history which erupted due to absence or lack of dialogue. Your outline is not irrelevant but it is not comprehensive either. Your outline has mainly focused on "How should the dialogue be started and what should be included in that dialogue process" but you have spared little time for proving the worth of a dialogue. Essay has shortcoming of little bit imbalance style. Your essay should have contained atleast 30% to 40% material on the worth, effectiveness, pragmatism, feasibility and historical precedence of "Having dialogue and great success" or "Not having dialogue and pocketing huge losses in its aftermaths".

Overall this essay can be parked into average attempt.

Saleeqa Batool · #45 Sunday, March 07, 2010

i started with the following line

The idea of negotiations with terrorists sounds contrary to commen sense, yet the apparent faliure of allied forces make us to believe that dialouges are indispensible to eradicate bring peace.

The remaing essay hovered around this idea with out any refernce to history.

umarabbas · #46 Sunday, March 07, 2010

my reply in two parts:

1- You are right...one cannot ignore CAN...but its a question...and one can answer it after analyzing all the facts...that's what i did...i said she can be over a period in the future...because of every step taken by the government, medias role etc etc....yeah i gave a slight touch to whether it can or it can't.

2- secondly, you are right the question was not about the rights in Islam or rights in the west...what i meant by discussing them was that there are two prevailing perceptions about equality in pakistan....those who find sanctuary in Islamic ideals and those who see the west as the best guide for these liberties.....therefore i discussed them in the context of Pakistan...

3- Thirdly i discussed the agents which can give protection/equality to women in pakistan...i.e religion, constitution, and social attitude.....but all have failed...n i gave reasons for that....

i have i have cleared my side of the story..:P

Waseem Riaz Khan · #47 Sunday, March 07, 2010

Quote:

Originally Posted by Saleeqa Batool

i started with the following line

The idea of negotiations with terrorists sounds contrary to commen sense, yet the apparent faliure of allied forces make us to believe that dialouges are indispensible to eradicate bring peace.

The remaing essay hovered around this idea with out any refernce to history.

If you have written same sentence in the paper then unfortunately you have made 3 grammatical as well as spelling mistakes in the first line.

Well historical evidences are quite important but i think your essay is not that much confusing and it will fetch good marks. If you have written grammatically correct english, your essay will get good response from examiner. Now that you have done it, go and prepare next papers. I think this is not the right time to evaluate everyhting that you have written. It may affect your coming papers.

Saleeqa Batool · #48 Sunday, March 07, 2010

common,dialogue,makes

no mistake in first few paras but i am afaraid to have commited few mistakes in ensuing paras.

ayezzaS · #49 Sunday, March 07, 2010

HEY PEOPLE YOU OUGHT TO HAVE COMMENTED ON MY DETAILED Outlines?where have you ben stuck....u must pay heed to all those who wish to be read overhere...its callous that nobdy had even read all those outlines ov mine

Hunain · #50 Sunday, March 07, 2010

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Originally Posted by ayezzaS

HEY PEOPLE YOU OUGHT TO HAVE COMMENTED ON MY DETAILED Outlines?where have you ben stuck....u must pay heed to all those who wish to be read overhere...its callous that nobdy had even read all those outlines ov mine

Hey, your outline seems good to me, I attempted the same essay. Best of luck.

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