Please check my start and ending of Essay (Energy Crisis) and let me know whether it was worth good or not.
"Student with a pen looking at his book in dark room, Childs weeping with their mothers fanning them with hands, an unending queue of vehicles and humans on petrol and CNG stations, a fierce crowd burning tyres on road; ready to kill or be killed' protesting. Patients crying with pain cursing hot weather and Govt. This is neither a trailer of an action movie nor an excerpt from a novel. This is the true picture of world seventh Nuclear power, one of the richest country in coal and gas reserves-Pakistan which is facing the severe energy crisis of the history."
This was my start of essay
In the end I gave optimistic vision and ended my essay by Robert Frost quote
"The woods are lovely, dark and deep,
But I have the promises to keep.
And miles to go before I sleep,
And miles to go before I sleep."

Please analyze and let me know.
Regards
Mansoor Arshad Khattak.

Brother.
Both your beginning and ending are quite good.
You've started and ended more like a speaker in a speech contest.
Apart from very few grammatical mistakes, I can't see anything wrong.
Such dramatic introductions are recommended.
I hope it clicks as there are few examiners who have some sort of disliking for such style.

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Success assured for the distinction you have created by your style.

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@Kibzai..Abdulsammad:
Thanks brothers for ur appreciation. I am thankful for ur worthy comments.
May u all be blessed.
regards
Mansoor Arshad

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OUTLINE: 1. Introduction 2. Pakistan’s Energy Sector 2.1 Energy Supply 2.2 Energy Consumption 3. Sources of Energy in Pakistan 3.1 Non-renewable resources
(Fossil fuels) a). Petroleum products
b). Natural Gas
c). Coal 3.2 Renewable Resources
a). Hydro power o Current Hydropower stations
o Potential Hydropower
stations 3.3 Alternative Energy Sources a). Wind
b). Solar
c). Agricultural biomass /
biodiesel
d). Tidal 3.4 Nuclear 4. Causes of Energy Crisis 4.1 Growing Energy Demand 4.2 Lack of proactive and
integrated planning for
production of energy 4.3 Imbalanced energy mix 4.4 Non-utilization of
enormous indigenous energy resources
a). Thar Coal
b). Hydal power generation 5. Consequences of Energy Crisis 5.1 Economic Factors
5.2 Agriculture Sector
5.3 Industrial Sector
5.4 Unemployment
5.5 Social Issues
5.6 Poverty 6. Conclusion 7. Recommendation/Solutions
of Energy Crisis 7.1 Judicious energy use/ saving unecessary energy usage
o electricity saving devices
o Awareness campaign for energy saving o Reduction in unnecessary
transportations
o Installation of effective
equipment/energy efficient in
industries
o Decreasing line/transmission losses 7.2 Developing new energy resources
o Tapping indigenous
resources
o Using renewable resources
(water) by constructing new
dams and hydro power plants o Import of natural gas
o Utilizing alternative energy resources  Wind power
 Biodiesel /Biomass
 Solar
 Tidal o Enhancing civilian nuclear
capacity

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Farrah, How can i post my outline after his mind blowing approach to essay........ i just want to tell u that i do not know if u will pass or not but i know one thing that this is one of the finest pieces of writing i hav ever come across. the characters of my essay (Iqbal, ghazali, Plato, baba bulleh shah etc) will prove out to be infirm against ur essay :-) bravo girl! great writing!!

since It is strictly prohibited to mention one's name in any paper, I fear that you can get zero in essay paper . However, your essay outline is superb.I wish examiner may overlook your blunder so that you can get good score. Otherwise, he can mark you zero according to rules....

She hadn't mentioned her name. She wished but didn't mention.

Regards,

Thank you

But hey you should say,"You are going to pass Insha Allah" ab ye tou na kahen na k I don't know You allocated me DMG last year,don't forget

Uff sara zor zero marks pe hai shubh shubh bolye

1)I didn't mention my name there.
2)If I mentioned,I would write "Poetess :Farrah Zafar".

Ofcourse I would not write, "Hey Examiner ! You know what,?this poem is written by me

Pray for me please.And good luck

Yup

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Mortal S ! Please post your outline.It seems you have attempted the same essay.

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Love is my Shield,Truth is my Sword,Brain is my Crown,Smile is my Treasure and I'm a Queen;
Quitters never win and Winners never quit..!!!