Jamalnasir what was your score in composition? Please tell me in detailed manner that how many syno, anto, grouping words etc did you correct. Then we can understand how much work you need to project on for your upcoming attempt. It will also help newcomers for getting an idea to pass composition?

Brother it's my DMC and 13 out of 20 synonyms/antonyms were correct. Don't know about remaining 7

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PRECIS

Last May, the author and his friend, John visited Cherokee county, Oklahoma - a relatively quieter tourist attraction. They went to the beautiful town of Qualla Boundary, where reenactment of 18th century lifestyle in Oconaluftee Village, introduced tourists to Cherokee’s history. The duo stumbled upon a souvenir shop decorated with traditional artifacts and had lunch with George - the outgoing owner of the shop. George was a former woodcutter, who switched to his current profession due to want of income. George told them that aside from trade, the Cherokee earn extra money through small businesses during the tourist season. Finally, they saw some historic articles in a local museum. On his return, the author longed for the place and hoped for a new adventure.

Topic: An Excursion to Cherokee
Words in Precis : 125
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Sorry for misplaced smileys.

Dear!separating the phrase with comma means that it is not required for the sentence to make sense.The Sentence can stand on its own.Putting it at the end give it importance.

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Author writes that in previous May vacation when he wanted to go to a placid place, his friend Joan called him to go to Cherokee. Going by air, they toured Qualla Boundary town of Cherokee, wedged in alpines. It seemed like three centuries in past. Nevertheless of different languages, they found market where there were handicrafts. A young man named George astonished them by welcoming in good English, who invited for lunch. George told that he was a woodcutter and his side business was of a guide. He further told that Cherokees do different businesses, like organising Bingo weekend where people go to play games. Before departure they went to a museum. After return, author was suffering the nostalgia of Cherokee.

I have highlighted some of your mistakes. There are sentences, which need revision.

• Instead of 'called him', use 'advised him'
• Qualla Boundary - a town of ....
• "Like

Organizing a Bingo weekend". Never give examples in precis.

Another mistake that i committed too is an absence of article.

It should An author.

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The pessimist complains about the wind,the optimist expects it to change,the realist adjusts the sails.

Please also assess my precis.

Thanks sister Sarah Mehar for giving suggestions and attempting précis, but sorry I am not satisfied with it, I think you couldn't comprehended it properly.

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Except for john,which should be enclosed in commas-appositive,i didn't find anything wrong.Nice effort!

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The pessimist complains about the wind,the optimist expects it to change,the realist adjusts the sails.