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Plus, I want to add that in an expansion length matters a lot. So try to expand your expansion up to 300 words. Besides, use some idioms and be very crystal clear. As it is your first expansion, so that's why you lack in coherence, continuity and smooth language. Mind one thing that while you are attempting your expansion; you have to be yourself, attempt it with your own examples which must be based on logical and analytical tendency. Well said by faisal that attempt it once again as per given suggestions and inshllah you will see the difference. Last but not the least, try to use simple and clear language in the beginning state. Wish you best of luck... @Shuaib & A:Salam,,,,, dears so far you have not attempted your expansions! Thanks. |
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First deserve than desire
God has bestowed the human with a gift of life and intellectuality as well. Meanwhile, human by nature has got bundle of desires, and to cater these desires human does not bother to cross the moral limits. Consequently, he indulges in social evils, theft, robbery to fulfill his illegal desire. Hence, the proposition sums up the hard reality of life. In this context, the adage implies the term deserve in the sense of some genuine resources, capability and self confidence. Nonetheless, these are the prerequisite elements to materialize the desire; otherwise a wish would merely a wish. Likewise a renowned writer quoted, “If wants were horses even beggars would ride”. The Scientists marked their feet on the surface of the moon which was considered beyond imagination. Meanwhile, ships have been parading on the waves of ocean by enslaving the tides of ocean. In archaic, man was dependent on the mercy of nature; storms, earthquakes, floods, endemic diseases and other natural disasters had led the mankind at the brink of destruction. Aftermath the scientists came up with a pragmatic approach by making themselves capable and equipped with modern technical techniques to eradicate the roots of all ills, which endangered the biosphere on earth. Nonetheless, scientists did not merely desire but they worked hard, burnt their midnight oil to materialize the desire. Moreover, the charismatic leaders of the world who brought revolution in the conservative and bigot societies with their capabilities and assiduous efforts. In this context our national hero Mohammad Ali Jinnah had not merely a desire of separate home land for Indian Muslims but he worked day and night and made himself firm determined to cater the desire. Finally he got decisive victory in achieving the separate home for Muslims named as Pakistan. Furthermore, it is desire of every one to have three b’s big bungalow, big car, and bank balance. However, to materialize the desire one must have sufficient economic resources; otherwise it is merely a unfulfilled desire. In this context, the resources, capability are milestone to mould the wish in the desired shape. In the nutshell, the proposition is wisely quoted and reveals that deserving, is the only tool that perpetuate the cycle of genuine desires. |
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Every cloud has a silver lining
It is an obvious fact that the life of man is in a continuous dynamic state. Happiness and sorrows are alternating phenomena of life. When man is afflicted with adversities of life, he feels disheartened and soon loses hope. He does not realize that the difficult times are short lived and soon will be followed by moments of joy and happiness. This proverb unveils to man that there is always light at the end of the tunnel. It is a fact that every man encounters hardships in some point of his life. Many people, in such situations, become frustrated and depressed and adopt a pessimist attitude about life. Such persons, when overwhelmed by the miseries, start to curse their fate. On the other hand, there are a few people who do not stop struggling in such times and counter the miseries of life with resilience and courage. They approach life with optimism and find opportunity in every difficulty. In fact, adversities demonstrate the hard realities of life and the real mettle of man is tested at such times. Thus, it provides an opportunity to man to develop a strong will power and determination. All the great leaders of the world encountered immense obstacles in their path, but they stood firm on their feet and toiled incessantly to get their goals. During Pakistan movement, the Muslims of the subcontinent faced atrocities and wrath of both the Hindus and the English, but they did not lose hope and struggled hard against all the odds, giving their blood and treasure, and eventually got independence to form a separate Muslim state. Nelson Mandela, the renowned reformist of South Africa, was imprisoned for life for his activism to the cause of equality of his fellow men. Despite the hardships, he continued his endeavour and emerged out as redeemer of his nation. The trials and misfortunes of life reinforce the fortitude and will of man to face coming challenges in a staunch manner. This idea not only applies to man but also to nations as well. People’s Republic of China, once considered a backward and underdeveloped country, worked day and night to become the leading economic icon in the contemporary world. To conclude, the proverb exhorts that behind every difficulty there is a ray of hope. Therefore, man should not cow down in the hands of hard times and strive hard to steer the course of events in his favour. In this endeavour he should exercise great patience and courage. He should adopt an optimistic view of the world because hardship are momentary and will be followed with moments of relief and happiness. In this way he can increase his productivity and fulfil his goals. |
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Good Work done by you!
some minor mistakes in your expansion. Over all its written Good. Every cloud has a silver lining It is an obvious fact that the life of man is in a continuous dynamic state. Happiness and sorrows are alternating phenomena of life. When a man is afflicted with adversities of life, he feels disheartened and soon loses hope. He does not realize that the difficult times are short lived and soon will be followed by moments of joy and happiness. This proverb unveils to mean that there is always light at the end of the tunnel. It is a fact that every man encounters hardships at some point of his life. Many people, in such situations, become frustrated and depressed and adopt a pessimistic attitude about life. Such persons, when overwhelmed by the miseries, start to curse their fate. On the other hand, there are a few people who do not stop struggling in such times and counter the miseries of life with resilience and courage. They approach life with optimism and find opportunity in every difficulty. In fact, adversities demonstrate the hard realities of life and the real mettle of a man is tested at such times. Thus, it provides an opportunity to man to develop a strong will power and determination. All the great leaders of the world encountered immense obstacles in their path, but they stood firm on their feet and toiled incessantly to get their goals. During Pakistan movement, the Muslims of the subcontinent faced atrocities and wrath of both the Hindus and the English, but they did not lose hope and struggled hard against all the odds, giving their blood and treasure, and eventually got independence to form a separate Muslim state. Nelson Mandela, the renowned reformist of South Africa, was imprisoned for life for his activism for the cause of equality of his fellow men. Despite the hardships, he continued his endeavor and emerged out as redeemer of his nation. The trials and misfortunes of life reinforce the fortitude and will of man to face coming challenges in a staunch manner. This idea not only applies to man, but also to nations as well. People’s Republic of China, once considered a backward and underdeveloped country, worked day and night to become the leading economic icon in the contemporary world. To conclude, the proverb exhorts that behind every difficulty there is a ray of hope. Therefore, man should not cow down in the hands of hard times and strive hard to steer the course of events in his favor. In this endeavor he should exercise great patience and courage. He should adopt an optimistic view of the world because the hardship is momentary and will be followed by moments of relief and happiness. In this way he can increase his productivity and fulfil his goals.
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A man is as rich as he is contented
The saying describes that the measurement of richness of a person depends on his level of contentment. That is to say that the amount of wealth possessed by him, cannot grant him surety of happiness. Therefore, the wealth of a person is resides in the happiness and composure. In today’s world, man has distorted the criteria of happiness. He assumes that if he earns more money, he will be satisfied. Thus, he yearns for temporal possessions and seeks luxuries of life. But unfortunately, this practice have brought even more frustration and anxiety to him. The pursuit of affluence traps man in the quagmire of greed and selfishness, who then indulge into immoral means to fulfill their desires. Almost everyone is heard to say that if he were as rich as someone richer than him with whom he envy, he would be happy. Give that person the amount of money that he wants, and he will find another person, richer than him, to envy with and remain as discontented as ever. This is because the hunger of desires is insatiable, the more he gets, the more he wants. Contentment is a state of mind which depends more on one’s approach than on one’s possessions. It is usually attained by the persons, who remain grateful of all the blessings upon them and possess the spirit of serving the humanity. The blessings can be in the form of good health, a loving family, good friends, and the fulfillment of basic necessities. This can be realized by comparing oneself to those who are less fortunate. Harboring compassion and helping the poor section of society from one’s own hard earned money or through social services, also brings comfort to one’s mind. The pursuit of riches will escalate the internal unrest of mind, which can be overcome by adopting philanthropic approach. It is apparent that the real wealth of man is his level of satisfaction in life. Thus, it is unrelated to his bank balance and the luxuries of life but rather depends on his approach towards life. Therefore, it would be a wise choice not to run blindly after the riches, instead adopting an approach as to fulfill one’s basic needs and serving the cause of humanity to one’s capacity. This will help to eliminate social evils, while love and brotherhood will flourish in the world. |
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So many days have passed and not a even a single review
Kindly evaluate my expansion. Sent from my AMOI N821 using Tapatalk |
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Word count for attempting an expansion in composition paper is 250-300. You have written almost 400 words. It matters a lot, you should write between the told word count. You better shorten it first, and lets see how you beautify it. |
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Lessen the word count. You have written almost 550 words. |
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_ Avoid repeating words and ideas. _ It looks like an Islamiat Paper. _ You should add some more lines. These are 230 words. _ You could give some other examples. Try to add some quotations. _ As Virgil said, "Love conquers all." _ And, "Love begets Love." _ No doubt, quotations are ornaments for an expansion. Regards' |
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