[B][SIZE="4"][COLOR="Magenta"][FONT="Courier New"]A Thing of beauty is joy forever


Beauty is the greatest and the vastest source of joy in this cosmic universe. Each particle in this beautiful and soulful world has essence of beauty _beauty is the parent of joy. It is insurmountable, it roots out grieves and gloom from one's heart, gives blooming joy and takes to the gala and soulful world. It is infinite blessing of GOD which is worthy of admiration and sweetest source of joy.



Beauty is untiring attraction for artists like the infinite gravitation of black holes. Sculptures depict the nature, make idols and whiff the soul of beauty in it. Poets hug beauty of universe and give breath of beauty in their words. Flute man with his flute sings language of soul with essence of beauty. Singers take voice of heavens and sing among souls and angles. And, painter with his colors make the beauty infinite. Work of artist is essence of beauty _where there is existence of art there is presence of beauty and where is presence of beauty there is essence of joy.



World is poured with purest beauty which makes eyes behold it forever, makes tongue to sing songs of praise for it. Compels hands to compose poems for it, makes brains to be in its fantasy, Pulls feet to move towards it, makes body worship and makes soul lover of it. Sky, moon, stars, tress, birds and seasons how beautiful they are! They are real soul of joy _an infinite joy. He who beholds its beauty a moment that moment becomes eternal joy for him which flows in soul like a river.


Nature is full with beauty from a star to a flower there are thousands sources of beauty and each source becomes the eternal joy for man. Beauty of nature in first espy gives sweetest smile to the soul. A smile of beauty changes the lives. Indeed, Thing of beauty is joy forever.

"Beauty is truth and truth beauty." John Keats

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XUHAIB AHMED THE TRAVELLER[/FONT][/COLOR][/SIZE][/B]

[B]Man probes into space but not into himself
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In the above mentioned lines the wise man is trying to elaborate the reality, that space which was considered unconquerable and was an unsolved puzzle of history. Is now due to scientific advancement being probed. On the other hand man is getting far from himself. All energies are directed outward, to discover what is on mercury or any other planet and moon. On the contrary man has failed to discover self. He is unaware which energies are working inside him. He does not know the functioning of his mind. Like when he sleeps or wakes up he is unaware of the whole process. He is also unaware of the force which is making functional all the immunal system of body. With eyeing to uncover the space he is also spiritually backward, but he knows how to survive in the space and which instrument and gear is required to move in the space. The more man is unearthing the space, the more he is getting away from self. So the writer has rightly said that man has probed into space but not into himself............

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[QUOTE=Malik Iqbal;457210][B]Man probes into space but not into himself
[/B]
In the above mentioned lines the wise man is trying to elaborate the reality, that space which was considered unconquerable and was an unsolved puzzle of history. Is now due to scientific advancement being probed. On the other hand man is getting far from himself. All energies are directed outward, to discover what is on mercury or any other planet and moon. On the contrary man has failed to discover self. He is unaware which energies are working inside him. He does not know the functioning of his mind. Like when he sleeps or wakes up he is unaware of the whole process. He is also unaware of the force which is making functional all the immunal system of body. With eyeing to uncover the space he is also spiritually backward, but he knows how to survive in the space and which instrument and gear is required to move in the space. The more man is unearthing the space, the more he is getting away from self. So the writer has rightly said that man has probed into space but not into himself............

Seniors Please check and highlight my weaknesses........[/QUOTE]


Quite well.
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that space which was considered unconquerable and was an unsolved puzzle of history.[/B]

Does writer say this?

You have much focused on SPACE rather than SELF.
You had to focus on SELF rather than SPACE.

It is like:

[B]You read novel but not your college course.[/B]

Means, I want to say you to READ YOUR COLLEGE COURSE.

Same, Man SHOULD PROBE INTO SELF was the key point.


Overall, quite well done.

[B]Sweet are the uses of adversities[/B]........

In this statement the wise man is trying to explain that a person learns more during his hard time than in his days of being in saddles. Difficulty comes not to overwhelm man, but to make him conscious and realize him his weaknesses and limitations. He knows the value of time and resources which he has wasted or not utilized and has not saved nine for rainy day. He then strives hard in order to come out of the crisis and break the shackles of dependence. For instance, after the catastrophies of Second World War Japan was almost finished. This great nation without losing hope rises from the ashes and strives hard to attain their lost glory and regain their status in the world. Know there is no match of the said state technologically on the planet and have prepared them for the sunny day. The nation or people who do not learn lesson from their mistakes and difficulties. So history repeats itself, but at a much higher cost.

[QUOTE=Malik Iqbal;457667][B]Sweet are the uses of adversities[/B]........

In this statement the wise man is trying to explain that a person learns more during his hard time than in his days of being in saddles. Difficulty comes not to overwhelm man, but to make him conscious and realize him his weaknesses and limitations. He knows the value of time and resources which he has wasted or not utilized and has not saved nine for rainy day. He then strives hard in order to come out of the crisis and break the shackles of dependence. For instance, after the catastrophies of Second World War Japan was almost finished. This great nation without losing hope rises from the ashes and strives hard to attain their lost glory and regain their status in the world. Know there is no match of the said state technologically on the planet and have prepared them for the sunny day. The nation or people who do not learn lesson from their mistakes and difficulties. So history repeats itself, but at a much higher cost.[/QUOTE]

Good Effort!

My advice would be to increase the word count, make atleast two paragraphs, include some quotation, give one more example.

[QUOTE=pearlyS;456773][B][/B][CENTER][B][U]Prosperity Make Friends,Adversity Tries Them[/U][/B][/CENTER]

[LEFT][FONT="Arial Narrow"]It is an undeniable fact that when a man steps up the ladder of success & acquires a lavish life-style,people start befriending him to channel his fortunes for their own good.However,such people with selfish aims are only to stay with him in his heydays not the otherwise. When providence turns the page & that same man faces adversity,he gets the chance to recognize the real face of his so called friends. Though purple-patch of one's life keeps coming & going but this very movement is enough to test who stands beside the loser and who abandons him.
It is a common observation that everyone wants to develop contact with the one who has some clout to influence & manipulate or simply have an enviable socio-economic status.People show great enthusiasm in befriending those who could be future assistance in any form or any way. This is the pull factor that often draws selfish people.Albeit it is strange that when a person goes through hardships,he weeps alone.Nowhere he finds those cronies around who,during his smooth-sailing,never missed a chance to ensure him of their loyalty.
Adversities like a magnifying glass reveal the true substance of one's best friend(s).Adversities teach her victim who to befriend & trust though in a hard way. [/FONT][/LEFT]



please evaluate,mark & guide!![/QUOTE]

Your expression is good and you have nicely divided the expansion into short paragraphs.
Expansion is supposed to be around 250-300 words so increase your word count.
You have given your point of view but not supporting events / examples to substantiate your stance. You may include some real life examples to justify your point of view.
If you can have a quotation related to the topic, its even better.

Good luck :)

[QUOTE=pearlyS;456270][B][U][FONT="Arial Black"]Show me a hero and I will write you a tragedy
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Hero & villain are two characters that never leave us alone because either we are to act like the one or to take side of one. however,the romanticism that is attached with the word "hero" never fails to charm us & to make us feel greatly attractive toward this word & theme of heroism. Nonetheless,being a hero does come with a price-tag that is not in the pay-range of ordinary souls or we may say that when their is a hero,their is or are tragedies & trials by life_that goes a step beyond to test their mettle. the word 'hero' itself symbolizes the theme of being superior from all.so when we perceive someone as hero,this is certainly because of something exceptional done by him.this something exceptional may be his courage,bravery,spirit of fight against all odds or any task that an ordinary man may feel too hefty to be undertaken by him.thus somewhere we all connect this word hero with some sort of milestone or benchmark which is a must to cross or achieve to gain the title.
being a hero or person of unique abilities & achievements is not a piece of cake. striving to conquer something hitherto invincible or staying impregnable despite volley of teething problems is a constant journey. those who choose this path are extraordinary souls in ordinary bodies. though this earned them an eternal fame or laurels. however,a hard earned & maintained fame. once a person put on the shoes of a 'hero' after hackneyed struggle another battle ensues. battle to keep one's prestigious position or success.
when we go down the history lane & start glancing over life stories of all great people we know,we come across unique stories of sufferings,struggles & success. nelson mandella & aung san suu kyi are two great names of modern political world.they are hero for their people in their own way. mandella earned this fame after a long fight for the rights of his nation.he suffered imprisonment for 27 years.aung san suu kyi arrested for around 15 years in 20 years.again a persistent stance against trials thrown in by life. thus these long years of battling for the right thing & negating all luxuries offered by self-centredness fetched them the halo of glory.
thus the romanticism the word 'hero' exhibit is not without cost. jealousies, bottlenecks,traps,ploys,conspiracies & what not that come to hinder the path of a hero.it seems life too show it's stiff side before taking a hardworking man into her comforting lap.but after giving him taste of her cozy side,she again turns demanding.life is a teacher that never ceases to take exams & those who claim to be hero,for them life too shows her super skills of erecting barriers & animating nightmares.so,show me a hero & i will write you a tragedy.



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[QUOTE=pearlyS;456344][CENTER][B][U][FONT="Arial Black"]Call No Man Happy Till He is Dead[/FONT][/U][/B][/CENTER]


A human heart is full of desires & quest for everything he covets is in human nature. Nonetheless,desires have strange property that the more they are fulfilled the more they get multiplied. This continuous running after one's desires reduced a man into an unhappy & unsatisfied being who only gets peace after death.
Urge to amass & amplify one's gain is not new & unusual. Competing with fellow humans is not bad in itself but this makes life a machine fueled by one's own peace. This ultimate toll of having countless desires stops when one stops breathing.
When we start entertaining an idea to accomplish something or to achieve something special this peddles us to work hard. When that goal has been achieved,immense joy follows in. The sense of achievement itself propels a man to take further stride. Then comes another goal another cherished dream & wheel of struggle again picks motion. This activity start treading a path that takes away happiness & satisfaction by replacing them with greed & ungratefulness.
As all human beings are or majority of them tends to drift into this endless cycle of desires,dreams & demands. Thus they all somewhere in their heart feel a gap a void that stays unfulfilled or in some cases gets wider.Only after death this void gets filled & peace comes in. Thus it is apt that call no man happy till he is dead because precisely that is the state where he no more feel the need to improve.


total time:30 minutes

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[QUOTE=usman khalid;457677]Your expression is good and you have nicely divided the expansion into short paragraphs.
Expansion is supposed to be around 250-300 words so increase your word count.
You have given your point of view but not supporting events / examples to substantiate your stance. You may include some real life examples to justify your point of view.
If you can have a quotation related to the topic, its even better.

Good luck :)[/QUOTE]

thanks for evaluating...if it's possible,kindly read & rate above quoted expansions too...so that i get better idea.

regards

[B]Man is Architect of his own fortune[/B]

In this statement of wise man is trying to explain that man himself is responsible for his development. Luck has nothing to do with it; it is man struggle that counts. He designs his own future what he sows today will be harvested in future. So it solely depends upon what he strives for. In order to be successful in life there is a dire need to burn midnight oil. Good planning is also a component of future achievements.

There are people in the history, who belong to an ordinary family background. They did not only design their destiny, but also changes the course of history. Like, the former United States president Abraham Lincoln, who was a son of slave, he with his planning and efforts managed to break the shackles of slavery. He not only managed to get at the helm of the affairs of his state, but also save his country from civil war.

People who wait and depend on others have a very small share in future. They get what is left by others. Bill Gates one of the richest and successful businessman was not a wealthy person. He did not wait for a miracle to be happened or depended on others to lend countenance to him. He himself stepped forward and work hard, now he has not only say in the US, but all over the world. So from the said discussion it is clear that man himself is architect of his own fortune…………………….


[B]
Seniors please check and assess me..............[/B]

[QUOTE=Malik Iqbal;457689][B]Man is Architect of his own fortune[/B]

In this statement of wise man is trying to explain that man himself is responsible for his development. Luck has nothing to do with it; it is man struggle that counts. He designs his own future what he sows today will be harvested in future. So it solely depends upon what he strives for. In order to be successful in life there is a dire need to burn midnight oil. Good planning is also a component of future achievements.

There are people in the history, who belong to an ordinary family background. They did not only design their destiny, but also changes the course of history. Like, the former United States president Abraham Lincoln, who was a son of slave, he with his planning and efforts managed to break the shackles of slavery. He not only managed to get at the helm of the affairs of his state, but also save his country from civil war.

People who wait and depend on others have a very small share in future. They get what is left by others. Bill Gates one of the richest and successful businessman was not a wealthy person. He did not wait for a miracle to be happened or depended on others to lend countenance to him. He himself stepped forward and work hard, now he has not only say in the US, but all over the world. So from the said discussion it is clear that man himself is architect of his own fortune…………………….


[B]
Seniors please check and assess me..............[/B][/QUOTE]


though i am not a senior but still want to comment....very sensible piece of writing & natural flow in style :))

[QUOTE=Malik Iqbal;457667][B]Sweet are the uses of adversities[/B]........

In this statement the wise man is trying to explain that a person learns more during his hard time than in his days of being in saddles. Difficulty comes not to overwhelm man, but to make him conscious and realize him his weaknesses and limitations. He knows the value of time and resources which he has wasted or not utilized and has not saved nine for rainy day. He then strives hard in order to come out of the crisis and break the shackles of dependence. [B]For instance, after the catastropheis of Second World War Japan was almost finished. This great nation without losing hope rises from the ashes and strives hard to attain their lost glory and regain their status in the world.[/B] [COLOR="DarkRed"](You started this idea in Past, it was better to End in Past.)[/COLOR] [B]Know[/B] [COLOR="DarkRed"](NOW)[/COLOR] there is no match of the said state technologically on the planet and have prepared them for the sunny day. [B]The nation or people who do not learn lesson from their mistakes and difficulties. [/B] [COLOR="DarkRed"](WHAT DOES HAPPEN TO THEM?)[/COLOR] [B]So history repeats itself, but at a much higher cost.[/B][COLOR="DarkRed"](Re-arrange it, it confuses; don't you think so?) [/COLOR]
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Word limit is 250-300. Your are 170.

Try to divide your expansion into three or four Paragraphs.

1 Para. Meaning and Central Idea.
2nd and 3rd Para. Examples, justification and quotation.
4th. Conclusion with an appropriate message.[/B][/SIZE][/COLOR]

Overall Good efforts. :)