Originally Posted by seher bano

@ Sonia

Precis (2011)
Psychological factors of discontentment

Psychological factors of discontentment are numerous. The hopeless person is one who fails , in adolescent, to have his due portion of contentment and takes the particular way of life coupled with the extra focus on the accomplishment that are in contrast to the feat linked with it. Possibly, one can be so pessimistic that everything becomes useless for them. Drunkenness always brings momentary contentment. Authoritarians believe that contentment is achievable, but people who desire for intoxicant are pessimistic. They can be made sure about the possibility of contentment. Drinkers usually feel pride of their discontentment and very less people, despite contentment, opt for discontentment. Nowadays there is a general perception that contented people have enjoyed their life and there is nothing new any more. This fact usually distracts the naïve people.
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Originally Posted by Afshan Choudary

Precise 2005

Psychoses and neuroses: mental disorders

Psychoses and neuroses are mental illnesses which make man unable to keep balance in his life. In psychoses, complete breakdown of ego takes place. When men become fail to achieve goal of his life, he cannot shift his energy towards another task. In strong emotional sickness, he behaves like animal. And in less severe emotional sickness, he may use excessively one of the four mental functions at the cost of other three. In emotional disorders, whatever the severity is, he become fail to maintain proper balance in life. Such disorders do not cause cultural deviance rather t is deviance form himself. On the other hand, neurosis is strange behavior which may vary from culture to culture. (Total word count 116)

Originally Posted by WaqasAhmed

Psychological factors of discontentment are numerous.
If I were you, I would write, “There are numerous psychological factors of discontentment.” It is easier to read

The hopeless person is one who fails , in adolescent, to have his due portion of contentment and takes the particular way of life coupled with the extra focus on the accomplishment that are in contrast to the feat linked with it.
(hmm… sentence is too long and confusing for me, maybe I am a little dumb)
A hopeless person is THE one who fails, in adolescent, to have ONE’s due portion of contentment and takes the particular way of life (what does this mean?) coupled with AN extra focus on the accomplishment that are in contrast to the feat linked with it.

Possibly, one can be so pessimistic that everything becomes useless for them. (disagreement between “one and them”) Drunkenness always brings momentary contentment. (sentence doesn’t seem coherent ) Authoritarians believe that contentment is achievable, but people who desire for intoxicant(s) are pessimistic. (Pessimists desire for intoxicants)They can be made sure about (made sure of) the possibility of contentment. Drinkers usually feel pride of their discontentment and very less (few-use few with countable nouns) people, despite contentment, opt for discontentment. Nowadays there is a general perception that contented people have enjoyed their life and there is nothing new any more. This fact usually distracts the naïve people.



I have spotted a few grammatical mistakes. Please consider the following:

Psychological factors of discontentment are numerous.
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Originally Posted by seher bano

Well you have rightly pinpointed some of the points, but I disagree with the others. Actually this is a precis and we have to confined ourselves to the certain limits. That is why the structure of the sentence,at times, remains difficult to comprehend. Any ways if you did not study the original text then you should read that first.

Originally Posted by WaqasAhmed

Psychoses and neuroses are mental illnesses which make man unable to keep balance in his life. In psychoses, complete breakdown of ego takes place. When men become (are) fail (failed) to achieve (their goals) goal of his life, he (you used men- plural) cannot shift his energy (energies) towards another task. In strong emotional sickness, he behaves like (an) animal. (why full stop?) And in less severe emotional sickness, he may use excessively one of the four mental functions at the cost of other three. In emotional disorders, whatever the severity is, he become fail to maintain (a) proper balance in life. Such disorders do not cause cultural deviance rather t is deviance form himself. On the other hand (on the other hand is used when we are comparing two arguments), neurosis is strange behavior which may vary from culture to culture.

Originally Posted by Afshan Choudary

Precise 2005


Basically, psychoses and neuroses represent man’s inability to maintain a balanced or equated polarity in conducting his life. The ego becomes exclusively or decidedly one sided. In psychoses there is a complete collapse of the ego back into the inner recesses of the personal and collective unconsciousness. When he is repressed toward fulfilling some life goal and where he is further unable to sublimate himself toward another goal, man regresses into goal structures not actually acceptable to himself or to the society. Strong emotional sickness of the psychotic type is like having the shadow run wild. The entire psyche regresses to archaic, animal forms of behaviors. In less severe forms of emotional sickness there may be an accentuated and overpowering use of one of the four mental functions at the expense of the other three. Either thinking, feeling, intuiting or seeing may assume such a superior role as to render the other three inoperative. The persona may become so dominant as to create a totally one-sided ego, as in some forms of neurotic behavior. All in all, whatever the type of severity of the emotional disorder, it can be taken as a failure of the psyche to maintain a proper balance between the polarities of life. Essentially, psychoses and neuroses are an alienation of the self from its true goal of self-actualization. In this sense the culture is of no consequence. Emotional disorder is not a question of being out of tune with one’s culture so much as it is of being out of tune with one’s self. Consequently, neurosis is more than bizarre behavior, especially as it may be interpreted by contemporaries in the culture. This interpretation avoids the sociological question of what is a mental disorder, since form of behavior which is acceptable in one culture may be considered neurotic in other culture. To Jung, the deviation from cultural norms is not the point. The inability to balance out personal polarities is. (Total word count 324)

Psychoses and neuroses: mental disorders

Psychoses and neuroses are mental illnesses which make man unable to keep balance in his life. In psychoses, complete breakdown of ego takes place. When men become fail to achieve goal of his life, he cannot shift his energy towards another task. In strong emotional sickness, he behaves like animal. And in less severe emotional sickness, he may use excessively one of the four mental functions at the cost of other three. In emotional disorders, whatever the severity is, he become fail to maintain proper balance in life. Such disorders do not cause cultural deviance rather t is deviance form himself. On the other hand, neurosis is strange behavior which may vary from culture to culture. (Total word count 116)

Originally Posted by Afshan Choudary

thanks waqas for pointing out errors....i am doing grammatical errors..how i could overcome dis???? can u suggest sumthing???

Originally Posted by virgoan

.Make a precise of the following passage in about one third of its length and suggest a suitable heading. (20)

It was not from want of perceiving the beauty of external nature but from the different way of perceiving it, that the early Greeks did not turn their genius to portray, either in colour or in poetry, the outlines, the hues, and contrasts of all fair valley, and hold cliffs, and golden moons, and rosy lawns which their beautiful country affords in lavish abundance.

Primitive people never so far as I know, enjoy when is called the picturesque in nature, wild forests, beetling cliffs, reaches of Alpine snow are with them great hindrances to human intercourse, and difficulties in the way of agriculture. They are furthermore the homes of the enemies of mankind, of the eagle, the wolf, or the tiger, and are most dangerous in times of earthquake or tempest. Hence the grand and striking features of nature are at first looked upon with fear and dislike.

I do not suppose that Greeks different in the respect from other people, except that the frequent occurrence of mountains and forests made agriculture peculiarly difficult and intercourse scanty, thus increasing their dislike for the apparently reckless waste in nature. We have even in Homer a similar feeling as regards the sea, --- the sea that proved the source of all their wealth and the condition of most of their greatness. Before they had learned all this, they called it “the unvintagable sea” and looked upon its shore as merely so much waste land. We can, therefore, easily understand, how in the first beginning of Greek art, the representation of wild landscape would find no place, whereas, fruitful fields did not suggest themselves as more than the ordinary background. Art in those days was struggling with material nature to which it felt a certain antagonism.

There was nothing in the social circumstances of the Greeks to produce any revolution in this attitude during their greatest days. The Greek republics were small towns where the pressure of the city life was not felt. But as soon as the days of the Greeks republics were over, the men began to congregate for imperial purposes into Antioch, or Alexandria, or lastly into Rome, than we seek the effect of noise and dust and smoke and turmoil breaking out into the natural longing for rural rest and retirement so that from Alexander’s day …… We find all kinds of authors --- epic poets, lyricist, novelists and preachers --- agreeing in the precise of nature, its rich colours, and its varied sounds. Mohaffy: Rambles in Greece
Plz check my precis of the above passage.

Precis:
The early Greeks had different thaughts of nature, and that is why the disliked the vastness of nature.They were fear of animals, forests and seas. The fear was not unusual while the differnce of early men with the latter men was that the they started to consider beauty of nature mere wasteful. They did not enjoy by utilizing them, as a result they were ignorant of their worthy. in the latter case, men built great buildings, indeed they became tired of smoke.As a result they enjoy the nature and even adapt nature and produced great works.