Thanks sis for comments. Ya I was missing that point. I will try to avoid it. Thanks again

Anthropologists referred human beings as tool makers not because they could express themselves rather they were doers, the were able to carve different tools out of stone and metals. So, in my opinion , the first sentence needs some adjustments. Few grammatical errors need little attention as well.

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precise (2012) please check and comment.
Original
One of the most ominous and discreditable symptoms of the want of candour in present-day sociology is the deliberate neglect of the population question. It is or should be transparently clear that if the State is resolved, on humanitarian grounds, to inhibit the operation of natural selection, some rational regulation of population, both as regards quantity and quality, is
imperatively necessary. There is no self-acting adjustment, apart from starvation, of numbers to the means of subsistence. If all natural checks are removed, a population in advance of the optimum number will be produced, and maintained at the cost of a reduction in the standard of living. When this pressure begins to be felt, that section of the population which is capable of reflection, and which has a standard of living which may be lost, will voluntarily restrict its numbers, even to the point of failing to replace deaths by an equivalent number of new births; while the underworld, which always exists in every civilised society the failures and misfits and derelicts, moral and physical will exercise no restraint, and will be a constantly increasing drain upon the national resources. The population will thus be recruited, in a very undue proportion, by those strata of society which do not possess the qualities of useful citizens.

The importance of the problem would seem to be sufficiently obvious. But politicians know that the subject is unpopular. The unborn have no votes. Employers like a surplus of labour, which can be drawn upon when trade is good. Militarists want as much food for powder as they can get. Revolutionists instinctively oppose any real remedy for social evils; they know that every unwanted child is a potential insurgent. All three can appeal to a quasi-religious prejudice, resting apparently on the ancient theory of natural rights, which were supposed to include the right of unlimited procreation. This objection is now chiefly urged by celibate or childless priests; but it is held with such fanatical vehemence that the fear of losing the votes which they control is a welcome excuse for the baser sort of politician to shelve the subject as inopportune. The Socialist calculation is probably erroneous; for experience has shown that it is aspiration, not desperation, that makes revolutions. (words count 374)
Precie:
Title: Unchecked Population and its Consequences.
Paying no heed to the population problem is a gloomy sign of paucity of honesty in sociology nowadays. The Government can alone tackle this problem. In the absence of natural control, population will be double day by day at the expense of standard of living. The sensible people will willingly control the population whereas the people who are already a burden on a society will take no action. Politicians consider every new-born baby as their possible vote. Militarists always search for more army men; and Revolutionists consider every undesirable child as rebellion. All three could take semi-religious notion that production of a baby is a natural right. Socialist mistakenly considers that increase in the population is an opportunity which brings the revolution. ( Words count: 122)

please check my precise.
original.
Of all the characteristics of ordinary human nature envy is the most unfortunate; not only does the envious person wish to inflict misfortune and do so whenever he can with impunity, but he is also himself rendered unhappy by envy. instead of deriving pleausre from what he has, he derives pain from what others have. if he can, he deprives others of their advantages, which to him is as desirable as as it would be to secure the same advantages himself. if this passion is allowed to run riot it becomes fatal to all excellence,and even the most useful exercise of exceptional skill. why should a medical man go to see his patients in a car when the labourer has to walk to his work? why should the scientifc investigator be allowed to spend his time in a warm room when others have to face the inclemency of the elements? why should a man who possesses some rare talent of great importance to the world be saved fromt he drudgery of his own housework? to such questions envy finds no answer. fortunately, however, there is in human nature a compensating passion, namely that of admiration. whosoever wishes to increase human happiness must wish to increase admiration and to diminish envy. what cure is there for envy? for the saint there is the cure of selflessness, though even in the case of saints envy of other saints is by no means impossible. but, leaving saints out of account, the only cure of envy in the case of ordinary men and women is happiness, and the difficulty is that envy is itself a terrible obstacle to happiness. but the envious man may say: 'what is the good of telling me that the cure of envy is happiness? i cannot find happiness while i continue to feel envy, and you tell me that i cannot cease to be envious until i find happiness.' but real life is never so logical as this. mereley to realize the cause of one's own envious feeling is to take a long step towards curing them.

precis title...envy;disastrous characteristic of human.
the most disastrous characteristic of human personality is envy.people who possess this character derive pain from other,s happiness and restrict their own happiness.this hinders the way of fruitful acts toward others and can be poison for adepts.however,sense of admiration can abate envy and keep oneself happy.further,by rational analysis of envious feeling this menace can be treated.

An excellent attempt I must say and thank you for posting it here for our guidance. Kindly check mine too.Comments and suggestions for improvement would be highly appreciated;

Population Bubble: Realities & Remedies

It’s high time for contemporary sociology to realize the menace of over-population and devise effective strategies to check the population growth apart from natural selection. An unbalanced population vis-à-vis natural resources equation will lead to poor life conditions and a willingly compromise on behalf of sensible and productive segment of society. In contrast, the social misfits will eventually dominate amidst no restrictions and continue to be a burden upon the resources. Despite seeing the writing on the wall, the politicians, militarists, employers, and revolutionaries have their own axes to grind since they are turning the population issue to good account. The criticism is countered by them with outdated political and religious arguments. Although, the claims of all stakeholders are baseless and flawed, yet every birth is viewed by them as a potential voter, revolutionary or insurgent.

@Shahzad

I actually like your writing style but if i were you, i would have avoided using idioms and phrasal verbs in precis. I may be wrong but my concept of precis writing is to write it in a simple, concise and lucid manner so that anybody who reads your precis could get the crux of the passage.

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Paragraph for precise writing from 2003 ppr


If then a practical end must be assigned to a University course, I say it is that of training good members of a society. Its art is the art of social life, and its end is fitness for the world. It neither confines its views to particular professions on the one hand, not creates heroes nor inspires genius on the other. Works indeed of genius fall under no art; heroic minds come under no rule; a University is not a birthplace of poets or of immortal authors, of founders of schools, leaders of colonies, or conquerors of nations. It does not promise a generation of Aristotle or Newtons of Napoleons or Washingtons of Raphaels or Shakespeares though such miracles of nature it has before now contained within its precincts. Nor is it content on the other hand with forming the critic or the experimentalist, the economist or the engineer, through such too it includes within its scope. But a University training is the great ordinary means to a great ordinary end; it aims at raising the intellectual tone of society, at cultivating the public mind, at purifying the national taste, at supplying true principles to popular aspirations. It is the education which gives a man a clear conscious view of his own opinions and judgments, a truth in developing them, an eloquence in expressing them, and a force in urging them, ft teaches him to see things as they are, to go right to the point, to disentangle a skein of thought, to detect what is sophistical and to - discard what is irrelevant. It prepares him to fill any post with credit, and to master any subject with facility. (John H. Newman) (word count:280)

Title: Education creates personality not university

University is producing good members of society. However, it is not a birthplace of national leaders nor creates intellectuals of society. It does not produce professionals of specific fields; rather it nourishes the mind and teaches principles of life. But, education is a tool which provides ability to discrete and to distinguish between right and wrong. Also, it provides scope to impart particular subject to occupy honorable post. (word count:68)

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However, it is not a birthplace of national leaders nor creates intellectuals of society--- it is neither a birthplace of national leaders nor creates intellectuals.

we generally use 'rather' to communicate something negative. For Example, the bed was not comfortable rather it was very hard.


Also, it provides scope to impart particular subject to occupy honorable post. --this sentence made no sense to me

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here it is....sorry for c0nfusion....

Also, it provides scope to learn particular subject to occupy honorable post.

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“Living is too hard right now. Dying is easy. Let me die.”
Kristin Cashore

One of the most ominous and discreditable symptoms of the want of candour in present-day sociology is the deliberate neglect of the population question. It is or should be transparently clear that if the State is resolved, on humanitarian grounds, to inhibit the operation of natural selection, some rational regulation of population, both as regards quantity and quality, is
imperatively necessary. There is no self-acting adjustment, apart from starvation, of numbers to the means of subsistence. If all natural checks are removed, a population in advance of the optimum number will be produced, and maintained at the cost of a reduction in the standard of living. When this pressure begins to be felt, that section of the population which is capable of reflection, and which has a standard of living which may be lost, will voluntarily restrict its numbers, even to the point of failing to replace deaths by an equivalent number of new births; while the underworld, which always exists in every civilised society the failures and misfits and derelicts, moral and physical will exercise no restraint, and will be a constantly increasing drain upon the national resources. The population will thus be recruited, in a very undue proportion, by those strata of society which do not possess the qualities of useful citizens.

The importance of the problem would seem to be sufficiently obvious. But politicians know that the subject is unpopular. The unborn have no votes. Employers like a surplus of labour, which can be drawn upon when trade is good. Militarists want as much food for powder as they can get. Revolutionists instinctively oppose any real remedy for social evils; they know that every unwanted child is a potential insurgent. All three can appeal to a quasi-religious prejudice, resting apparently on the ancient theory of natural rights, which were supposed to include the right of unlimited procreation. This objection is now chiefly urged by celibate or childless priests; but it is held with such fanatical vehemence that the fear of losing the votes which they control is a welcome excuse for the baser sort of politician to shelve the subject as inopportune. The Socialist calculation is probably erroneous; for experience has shown that it is aspiration, not desperation, that makes revolutions. (375 words)

POPULATON EXPLOSION & ITS IMPACTS
The undermining of ‘population explosion’ problem in sociology is unfortunate. If state is to take some steps to address the issue it should focus both upon its quality & quantity aspects. For if nothing is done, starvation is destined & quality of living will be reduced. At such instance more prosper part of society would try to maintain its standard of living by largely restricting its number, while less fortunate would continue unhindered resulting in incompetent human resource & further increasing the burden upon national resources.
The problem is very much understood but a politician desire of larger voter base, employers want for cheap labor and obsession for larger armies have weakened the issue. Experience shows that its was motivation not the numbers that created wonders. (126 words)

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