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Intro paragraph of my essay,comment pls
Obesity is the root cause of all diseases
modern technology has rendered great service to mankind.almost anything can be made available to man by just pressing a few button.but this blessing also has a negative effect on the health and well being of people,that is, obesity.with the passage of time everything has become automated , from industrial machinery to kitchen appliances .the lifestyle of modern day man is increasingly becoming sedentary which has made him obese.he has become a victim of a plethora of diseases.hypertension and muscular pain are commonly found in all age groups.however, through regular exercise and healthy diet this problem can be controlled. |
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"however, through regular exercise and healthy diet this problem can be controlled." The purpose of an introduction is to open the essay for the reader and lightly explain what the essay embodies all the while ensuring that there is enough mystery in the introduction for the reader to actually read your 2000 - 3000 word essay. I hope this helped. |
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Thank you for your analysis.can you point out my punctuation mistakes pls ?
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