Dear, not to hurt you but for your future exams, you have written out of context essay. You are aberrant from the topic in your outline. Try to recall the topic and think with yourself what it was about, and what you have written.

your outline is somehow relevant to the topic.

Dear, I connected all points to the idea of how education is, is not, and should be a collective effort.

For example, in the history part I showed how 'education' only for a select few, under the supervision of an even selected few, divided society. Later on after the industrial revolution ~, when education was available for all, everyone had a say in the matter and soon enough education was a cohesive phenomena.

Futhermore, in the misuse of the power of education part, I argued how the cycle of misinformation starts when syllabi slip into the hands of a few policy makers who omit critical facts and feed misinformation to the ones who seek knowledge via education. Therefore it should be closely monitored by all sectors of society, instead of a select few; households, governments and other related bodies.

The outline I listed below did not contain every single word I had written in the paper, as I assumed any reader here would relate the points to the topic. In foresight, I should have been clearer.

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I made 4 tukkas in current affairs paper and all went well. Lolz
my outlines.

Introduction
types of education
a.formal
b.informal
sources for informal education
mother
peer pressure
community as a whole
function of informal education
transmission of cultral values
patriotism
means for subsistence
moralities etc etc
conclusion
indvidual is the product of society neither former nor the latter can supplant the importance of other.

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"Tough challenges reveal strengths and weaknesses" Challenges help us in knowing what we are and lead us to adversity. Hardship helps us to examine us and it recognizes that what is important in our life.

Synopsis

1-Introduction

2-Tough Challenges
a)example of Pakistan;
-socio-economic & political challenges
i-social challenges
-poverty
-illiteracy
-injustice
-unemployment
-crimes; extremism; terrorism etc..
ii-economic challenges
-lack in FDI
-overpopulation
-decline in growth rate
-imbalance in Forex
iii-Political challenges
-dearth of honest leadership
-incompetency of institutions

b) Challenges of an individual
-ranging from trifling issues to colossal problems

3-Challenges revel our strength
a) We incorporate our strength to achieve the challenges
b) Pakistan's strength to achieve the challenges
c) An individual's strength to attain the targets

4-Challenges reveal our weaknesses
a) Challenges become mountains to scale
b) Having fragility in achieving challenges our incompetency is exposed
c) We get weaker on account of the nature of challenges

5-Challenges disclose our reality
a) Bitter realities of Pakistan; dark & bright ages
i-Since inception to 1971; debacle of Dhaka
ii-Vulnerable picture of Pakistan before world since
iii-Indopak wars; 1948, 1965, 1971, 1999
iv-Are we really great in term of individuality? NO, NEVER!!! No one is perfect
b) Super natural truth of man

6-Challenges put us into the cold water
a) In the time of adverstity nearly no one is at our disposal
i-US was not at our disposal after disowning SEATO & CENTO
ii-US withdrew after decline of USSR
iii-Friends but not masters; Ayoub Khan
iii-Sino-Pak; Game of national interest
iv-Every body is selfish in the world-YES it is true!
b) Our beloved can leave us in the lurch--bitter truth!

7-Eventually Hardship recolonize our stance, reality & juncture
a) In hardship we come to know our our real stance
b) The hardship of Pakistan & ultimate realities to know our juncture
c) Man is born to face hardship bravely
d) Though it is hard to bear hardship, yet it can be tackled; the last message of father of nation

8-Finally we come to know what is important in our life!
a) Pakistan is a nuclear power
b) Abundant in natural resources
c) Human capital;
d) Brave protectors~world's first ranking agency
e) We need to no we are enough strong to achieve our challenges on our own
f) Existentialism finally tells us the aim of our life

9-Conclusion

Paragraphs-11
I left only last page unwritten
15 minutes for brainstorming & topic selection
1 hour in drafting rough outline
And I attempted 11 paraphrases within 1.1/2 hours

Please comment on my attempt. Thank You.

Sir can we include regional and global challenges as well..? Like extremism, refugee crisis,terrorism and global warming. And by supernatural forces you meant earthquake,tsunami and hurricane. ..?

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I am no expert but it looks great. However, don't you think you have put too much of Pak in it? Keeping in mind the topic and the baselines.

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Dear Exclusively,
If there is a touch of philosophy in your essay and some references from Plato, Socrates etc; then I give you 70 marks, otherwise, 50 is must Insha' Allah.
A good effort indeed!

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A borderlinne essay I must say. Your essay may either invoke great interest or be detested strongly for unnecessary length and over reliance on examples

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