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SOLVED PAPER OF COMPOSITION CE2012

Q.2. Make a precise of the following passage and suggest a suitable heading. (20)

One of the most ominous and discreditable symptoms of the want of candour in present-day sociology is the deliberate neglect of the population question. It is or should be transparently clear that if the State is resolved, on humanitarian grounds, to inhibit the operation of natural selection, some rational regulation of population, both as regards quantity and quality, is
imperatively necessary. There is no self-acting adjustment, apart from starvation, of numbers to the means of subsistence. If all natural checks are removed, a population in advance of the optimum number will be produced, and maintained at the cost of a reduction in the standard of living. When this pressure begins to be felt, that section of the population which is capable of reflection, and which has a standard of living which may be lost, will voluntarily restrict its numbers, even to the point of failing to replace deaths by an equivalent number of new births; while the underworld, which always exists in every civilised society the failures and misfits and derelicts, moral and physical will exercise no restraint, and will be a constantly increasing drain upon the national resources. The population will thus be recruited, in a very undue proportion, by those strata of society which do not possess the qualities of useful citizens.

The importance of the problem would seem to be sufficiently obvious. But politicians know that the subject is unpopular. The unborn have no votes. Employers like a surplus of labour, which can be drawn upon when trade is good. Militarists want as much food for powder as they can get. Revolutionists instinctively oppose any real remedy for social evils; they know that every unwanted child is a potential insurgent. All three can appeal to a quasi-religious prejudice, resting apparently on the ancient theory of natural rights, which were supposed to include the right of unlimited procreation. This objection is now chiefly urged by celibate or childless priests; but it is held with such fanatical vehemence that the fear of losing the votes which they control is a welcome excuse for the baser sort of politician to shelve the subject as inopportune. The Socialist calculation is probably erroneous; for experience has shown that it is aspiration, not desperation, that makes revolutions.
Precie:
Title: Unchecked Population and its Consequences.
Paying no heed to the population problem is a gloomy sign of paucity of honesty in sociology nowadays. The Government can alone tackle this problem. In the absence of natural control, population will be double day by day at the expense of standard of living. The sensible people will willingly control the population whereas the people who are already a burden on a society will take no action. Politicians consider every new-born baby as their possible vote. Militarists always search for more army men; and Revolutionists consider every undesirable child as rebellion. All three could take semi-religious notion that production of a baby is a natural right. Socialist mistakenly considers that increase in the population is an opportunity which brings the revolution. ( Words count: 122)

Q.3. Read the following passage and answer the questions that follow. Use your own language. (20)

Human beings are afraid of death just as children feel afraid of darkness. The fear of darkness of kids increased by the stories of the heard ghosts and thieves. In the same way, the fear of human being is increased by the stories which they heard about the agony of dying man. If a human being regards death as a kind of punishment for his sins he has committed and if he looks upon death as a means of making an entry into another world, he is certainly taking a religious and sacred view of death. But if a human being looks upon death as a law of nature and then feels afraid of it, his attitude is of cowardice. However, even in religious meditations about death there is sometimes a mixture of folly and superstition. Monks have written books in which they have described the painful experiences which they underwent by inflicting physical tortures upon themselves as a form of self purification. Thus, one may think that the pains of death must be indescribably agonizing. Such books and such thoughts increase a man's fear of death.

Seneca, the Roman Philosopher is of the view that the circumstances and ceremonies of death frighten people more than death itself would do. A dyeing man is heard uttering groans; his body is seen undergoing convulsions; his face appears to be absolutely bloodless and pale; at his death his friends begin to weep and his relations put on mourning clothes; various rituals are performed. All such facts make death appear more horrible than it would be otherwise.

Q.(1): What is the difference between human beings’ fear of death and children’s fear of darkness?
Ans: Human beings’ horror of death heightens when they read or hear the tale of severe pain of death whereas children’s horror of darkness heightens when they hear the stories of phantoms, sprits etc.
Q.(2) What is a religious and sacred view of death?
Ans: Religious-minded people consider death as a divine retribution for their bad deeds. They also think that death is a means of going into another world. This is a religious and sacred view of death.
Q.(3) What are the painful experiences described by the Monks in their books?
Ans: Monks, in their books, has shared the moments of their suffering when they tortured themselves in order to purify themselves.
Q.(4) What are the views of Seneca about death?
Ans: Seneca, a Roman Philosopher, was of the view that the rites and rituals of death seen by the people horrify them more than death itself.
Q.(5) What are the facts that make death appear more horrible than it would be otherwise?
Ans: A dying man is often seen in severe pain. The circumstances around the dying person and the obligation and rituals after death make people more dreadful.

Q.4 Write a comprehensive note (250 - 300) on any ONE of the following:
1. Self done is Well done
2. The Bough that bears most bend most
3. Nearer the Church, farther from God
4. Rich men have no fault
5. Cut your coat according to your cloth

Cut your coat according to your cloth.

There are many people who always try to spend beyond their means. For one thing, they desire the fame, prestige, and comfort. On account of these inclinations, they explore different ways to earn more and more money no matter the way of these earning is legal or otherwise.

Additionally, we are living in a society where so many extravagant Hindu rites and rituals have been adopted by the Muslims. The huge spending on traditional marriages is the case in point. Moreover, well-to-do people can easily afford these kinds of expenditure, but what about those people who can barely afford their sustenance. Sadly, they are still compelled to spend as much money on their daughter or near one’s marriages as others.

Similarly, despite the fact that we are undergoing the miserable circumstances, many politician of our country are enjoying a luxurious lifestyle. Pakistan, at the moment, is under a big threat of around $ 60 billion debt, but in spite of these debts. They are not ready to give up their extravagant lifestyle; and the concerned authorities are not ready to pay heed to these maladies. Not workable dignitaries’ visits, massive spending on dinners, huge spending on election campaign are obvious. Unequivocally, we are not cutting our coat according to our cloths.

No wonder, one who does not care about the future often find him in a gloomy state of affairs. He virtually remains at the mercy of others. This proverb has a true message which applies on almost every one. It is a naturally phenomenon that man always try to get more and more, but remains unsatisfied. So, it is wise to cut our coat according to our cloth. ( Words 279)

Q.5 Use ONLY FIVE of the following in sentences which illustrate their meaning. Extra attempt shall not be considered.
1. Wool gathering
2. Under the harrow
3. Cold comfort
4. A gold digger
5. Walk with God
6. On the thin ice
7. A queer fish
8. Unearthly hour

1. Cold Comfort: Comfort that is very small
The drop in the unemployment figure is cold comfort to those still looking for work.

2. On the Think ice: to be in a situation in which you are likely to upset smo or cause trouble.
I was on thin ice, and I knew it.

3. Odd/ Queer fish; smo who is slightly crazy.
After what has happened to the party last night, I must say you are a queer fish.

4. Unearthly hour: Very early or Very late and therefore extremely in convenient.
He suggested a meeting at some unearthly hour of the morning.
5. a gold digger: a woman who known for her material gain from man.
Being a elder, I must say you should stay away from a god diggers.

Q.6 (a) Correct ONLY FIVE of the following: Extra attempt shall not be considered.
1. A ten feet long snake made people run here and there
2. We are going to the concert, and so they are.
3. Enclosed with this letter was a signed Affidavit and a carbon copy of his request to our main office.
4. Fear from God.
5. Pakistan has and will support the Kashmiris.
6. He has come yesterday.
7. Arshad's down fall was due to nothing else than pride.
8. Do not avoid to consult a doctor.

1. A ten foot long snake made people run here and there.
2. We are going to the concert, and so are they.
3. Enclosed with this letter were a signed affidavit and a carbon copy of his request to our main office.
4. Fear God
5. Pakistan has supported and will support the Kashmirs.
6. He came yesterday.
7. Arshad down fall was due to nothing else other than pride
8. Do not avoid consulting a doctor.

(b) Change the narration from direct to indirect or indirect to direct speech (DO ONLY FIVE). Extra attempt shall not be considered.
1. He said to us, "You cannot do this problem alone".
2. The beggar asked the rich lady if she could not pity the sufferings of an old and miserable man and help him with a rupee or two.
3. The Commander said to the soldiers, "March on".
4. He entreated his master respectfully to pardon him as it was his first fault.
5. "Do you really come from America? How do you feel in Pakistan?" Said I the stranger.
6. The officer threatened the peon to come in time otherwise he would be turned out.
7. People wished that the Quaid e Azam had been alive those days to their fate.
8. They said, "Brave! Imran, what a shot".
Answers:
1. He told us that we could not do that problem alone.
2. The beggar said to the lady, “Will you not pity the sufferings of an old and miserable man and help me with a rupee or two?”
3. The commander ordered the soldiers to march on.
4. He begged his master respectfully, “Please, pardon me as it is my first fault.”
5. I asked the stranger whether he really came from America and how he felt in Pakistan.
6. The officer warned the peon, “Come in time otherwise you will be turned out.”
7. People desired, “Quaid-i-Azam has been alive these days to see our fate.”( not confirmed)
8. They admired Imran that what a shot it was.

I just read your precise portion. Your effort is good but try to improve your vocabulary and words expression. Besides, you have also quoted examples from the original passage. Such mistakes are strickly not allowed and highly penalized.

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Thanks for your consideration, but could you mention the quoted examples from the original?

The words, politicians, militarists and revolutionists, all of these are a sort of repetition. If they all support overpopulation; u could mention it in one sentence. You should not reproduce anything from the original passage. Just develop your own points and write it. Besides, you used there a sentence: " the population will be double". This is a loose sentence replace it with good one.

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Which words should i use in place of politician, militarists and revolutionists and how can i mention these in one sentence. Further, i could not get your point that how " The population will be double" is a loose sentence???

The deliberate negligence of population check will result in an enormous growth of population.

For your 2nd query, carefully study the rules for precise writing from exploring the world of english. You will, then, be able to eliminate unncessary information from ur precise.

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Your last few sentences may be replaced by the following sentence. The vested interests like militarists,politicians,and revolutionaries oppose population control to serve their vested interests of soldiers,votes and rebels by invoking quasi-religious principle.

Brother you have suggested fourteen words in place of five words put down by
seher bano in a precis paragraph! You should have suggested her the words that would commensurate with those of her both in number and meaning.

app me se koi is ki phir se precis bana sakta hai so that we can compare...

Lack of population control awareness results in the inhibition of growth rate below equilibrium in some cases and in the proliferation of criminals in others and it requires some rational regulations on society in pursuance of candor. Politicians have got some valid ground of no vote incentive but revolutionists, employers and military have the illusion of explosion being beneficial in the form of labour supply and revolutionists although this may prove disastrous for them in the long run.


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