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We never know the worth of water till the well is dry




One never realizes and feels importance of valuable things until these are lost. Life and world are changeable, they snatch things and make us aware about them. Flowers know value of spring in autumn, fish know value of water in dried land and men know importance of life in hospital ward. Freedom, time and dears are invaluable but one ignores and makes them valueless and comes out from dormant condition when these are flown.

A nation where freedom is not realized well is taken lightly and not protected, soon that nation is conquered by external force. That very nation knows its importance, craves and yearns for freedom. People of that nation shed blood tears when they lose their beloveds (Use either loved ones or beloved ones...beloved is an adjective, don't use it as a noun) in slavery life. They become slaves of unknown kings who keep whips in their hands for helpless and slaves. Then, people know the importance of Independence. As Boris Yeltsin says, "We don't appreciate what we have until it's gone."

Time is very precious but its preciousness is ever (always is the appropriate adverb here) avoided. Many people take time lightly and regret in old age (majority of us do not value the time and are regretful in old age) saying with sighs "if" and "would that". Time's worth is known when it is run out of hands. Time is the fastest thing, he who wastes it, gets nothing but repentance in end. As Benjamin Franklin says; "One today is worth than two tomorrows". Those nations or people who do not give value to time (do not value time) they feel its importance in destructions (there is no plural of destruction, the singular would suffice) and crises.

Current critical circumstances of Pakistan are because of negligence of time. People avoided it, and ignored its very importance. They did not justify themselves, and couldn't go parallel with time and time left them back. Now, time has left Pakistanis in sufferings which are insufferable. People of Pakistan should know the (Article is needed) worth of time and other essential things of life; otherwise they will have only repentance in the end.

Seniors, Please check it. Bilal, I have corrected sorted out mistakes. Please check further.

Dear this is a very much improved version, i appreciate your improvisation of knowledge of English grammar...you lack in sentence syntax, you must make succinct sentences that give professional impression. No doubt you have got flair in your expression which can be awe inspiring if these faults are removed...

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Dear this is a very much improved version, i appreciate your improvisation of knowledge of English grammar...you lack in sentence syntax, you must make succinct sentences that give professional impression. No doubt you have got flair in your expression which can be awe inspiring if these faults are removed...

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Thanks. How have I explained the topic and What marks would you give?

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Ignorance is bliss, knowledge worry

Knowledge is appreciated everywhere regardless of people, place, culture or tradition. Even in the court of Changaiz Khan and Halaku khan, knowledge was respected. Contrary, Ignorance is always discouraged everywhere. People do not like to tell others that they are unaware of any particular thing. However, there are the times when knowledge becomes a problem as staying in touch with the information may result in panic. The current situation of restlessness in Karachi is a truly represents (use either "truly represents" or "is a true reflection/representation") “knowledge is worry”. The more you are aware of current political and social situation of different cities in Pakistan the most depressed person you are. However, if you do not tune into any TV channel, do not read newspaper and pay heed to such news on social media; you may feel yourself in the bliss. But indeed, this bliss is the bliss of ignorance and you may be living in a fool’s paradise.

Therefore, even if the knowledge may panic you, it may depress you but this is what the truth is. This is how things are in real. On the other hand, even if the ignorance or unawareness may appear to you as heaven or bliss but it is not a reality, this is not how things are in real. You may escape for a while from truth but what you have to accept at the end is nothing else but truth or knowledge. Hence, search for the knowledge as ultimately you have to reach to knowledge; no matter what course you choose to get it.

seniors please check it ....

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Ignorance is bliss, knowledge worry

Knowledge is appreciated everywhere regardless of people, place, culture or tradition. Even in the court of Changaiz Khan and Halaku khan, knowledge was respected. Contrary, Ignorance is always discouraged everywhere. People do not like to tell others that they are unaware of any particular thing. However, there are the times when knowledge becomes a problem as staying in touch with the information may result in panic. The current situation of restlessness in Karachi is a truly represents “knowledge is worry”. The more you are aware of current political and social situation of different cities in Pakistan the most??? depressed person you are. However, if you do not tune into any TV channel, do not read newspaper and pay heed to such news on social media; you may feel yourself in the bliss. But indeed, this bliss is the bliss of ignorance and you may be living in a fool’s paradise.

Therefore, even if the knowledge may panic you, it may depress you but this is what the truth is. This is how things are in real. On the other hand, even if the ignorance or unawareness may appear to you as heaven or bliss but it is not a reality, this is not how things are in real. You may escape for a while from truth but what you have to accept at the end is nothing else but truth or knowledge. Hence, search for the knowledge as ultimately you have to reach to ?? knowledge; no matter what course you choose to get it.

seniors please check it ....
A good attempt.
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A good attempt.
Is this really a good attempt? How much good it is? Please mark it, I am worried about my English.
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Is this really a good attempt? How much good it is? Please mark it, I am worried about my English.
Your English has been well. I cannot mark it.
Don't be worried about it. Keep on practising to get prowess at English Language.
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Your English has been well. I cannot mark it.
Don't be worried about it. Keep on practising to get prowess at English Language.
Grammar is ok?
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Thanks. How have I explained the topic and What marks would you give?

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Dear all i can do is analyze, giving marks is a naive approach, my marking and the one done by FPSC examiner would definitely have difference, i will try to guide you as best as i can.....don't worry you will end well...
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yes it is a good attempt indeed.....forget marking, keep practicing
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I could find only three mistakes. Professional one can do better than me. It is Ok. Don't worry.
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I could find only three mistakes. Professional one can do better than me. It is Ok. Don't worry.
Oh there were highlighted mistakes These were hard to see in a glance

The more you are aware of current political and social situation of different cities in Pakistan the most??? depressed person you are.

the more depresses person you are. How is it?

Hence, search for the knowledge as ultimately you have to reach to ?? knowledge; no matter what course you choose to get it.

ultimately you have to come across knowledge. and hows this?
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