Where is your attempt by the way?

A downward trend in
education standard today is
root cause of all social evils.
''Who they know, and who they don't
know, Can be equal?'' (Quran)
An illetrate and an educated person
can't be equal in anyway.All relegions
of words stress on getting education
because education is the key to
success.Being a muslim it is our duty to
get education and promote it as
well.History is burdened with muslim
scholars who contributed in different
feids.It is merely because of good
standard of eduation at that
time.Hazrat Muhammad SAW also
stressed to get education.In Ghazwa
Badr muslim caught some enimies,
They asked to educate muslims.Hazrat
Muhammad SAW rewarded teacher as a
father.Man can't recognise himself
without education.Hazrat Ali RA was a
great scholar, he also asked muslim to
get education.
Quad e Azam, the father of Pakistan
aslo advised muslims to get
education.He said to students, ''You
should devote yourself wholeheartedly
to your study because this is your first
obligation to your parents and your
state.''
He said, ''World is progressing very fast,
we have to educate our nation''
Iqbal said, ''Parapogation of western
civilization in sub-continent will shatter
the unity of muslim.''
Being a muslim we can't follow western
education system.They go in fo Co-
education while Islam ultimately
opposes it.Iqbal is also talking about
this difference in the above qoutation.
Education standard of Pakistan is not
defective.There is no proper syllabus
for subjects, no proper rules and
regulations.Educational institutions are
considered to reflectors of upcoming
days.Education is directly proportional
to success.Educational institutions of
Pakistan have failed to build a strong
nation.There are some salient
reasons.Academic books contains some
stories, in which a negative characters
are seem to be hero of the nation and
students prefer to become like that
character.This attempt creats decoits
and criminals.
Furthermore co-education also affects
students personality.The student who
used to live in prohibited enviroment
since his childhood, when enters in
University he fulfills his every wish
freely.
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I have to tried to find out mistakes according to my knowledge.
''Who they know, and who they don't know, Can be equal?'' (Quran) (I have heard "Are those who know equal to those who don't know?")
An illiterate and an educated person can't be equal in anyway.All religions of (the) world stress on getting education because education (it) is the key to success. Being a Muslim it is our duty to get education(equip ourselves with knowledge, avoid repeating same words) and promote it as well. History is burdened with Muslim scholars who contributed in different fields. It is merely because of good standard of education at that time. Hazrat Muhammad SAW also stressed to get education. In Ghazwa Badr Muslim caught some enemies. They asked to educate Muslims.(Instead write, Prisoners of Ghazwa e Badr were asked to teach Muslim children) Hazrat Muhammad SAW rewarded teacher as a father. Man can't recognize himself without education. Hazrat Ali RA was a great scholar, he also asked Muslim to get education.(You have used very basic level of English to express your thoughts which doesn't give a very good impression) Quad e Azam, the father of Pakistan also advised Muslims to get education. He said to students, ''You should devote yourself wholeheartedly to your study because this is your first obligation to your parents and your state.'' He said, ''World is progressing very fast, we have to educate our nation''. Iqbal said, ''Propagation of western civilization in sub-continent will shatter the unity of Muslim.'' Being a Muslim we can't follow western education system. (You should avoid such strong remarks)They go in for Co-education while Islam ultimately opposes it. Iqbal is also talking about this difference in the above quotation. (Too many examples of leaders and their quotes, it is merely increasing the length of your note)

Education standard of Pakistan is not defective (You should say is not effective or only defective).There is no proper syllabus for subjects (proper syllabus would be enough), no proper rules and regulations (which rules and regulations). Educational institutions are considered to (be) reflectors of upcoming days (it should be future). Education is directly proportional to success. Educational institutions of Pakistan have failed to build a strong nation.There are some salient reasons. Academic books contains some stories, in which a negative characters are seem to be hero of the nation and students prefer to become like that character.This attempt creates decoits and criminals.

Furthermore co-education also affects students personality.The student who used to live in prohibited environment since his childhood, when enters in University he fulfills his every wish freely.(Not a satisfactory Conclusion)

You should rectify mistakes in these areas:
1. Long paragraph.
2. Lack of coherence in ideas.
3. Lack of a good expression, you should practice more and more on this.
4. Too harsh comments should be avoided, that don't have to be very decisive.

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@ Ayaz Goraya

Go to following link and read it carefully. And follow it.

How to Use Quote/Multi-Quote?

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Main tu aik Baab hn Tareekh mein Likha jaon ga

If winter comes, can spring be far behind.

If winter comes, can spring be far behind.

i am writing english after 1.5 years.This is my very first attempt.I know it will take time as well as practice.
Can you suggest me some ways how to resume and improve my writing skill?

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[QUOTE=Bilal Hassan;657436]Rayma you are right, it was my mistake, Apposite was correctly used, I condoned the context in which it was used. However, your other mistakes betoken that you must endeavor to use advanced words aptly because you have made mistakes. Like beside the mistakes I pointed out, you have a mistake in your signature, I Believe in Allah and he is mere one who can help me. Mere is an adjective which means only, but dear in your signature you need to insert Only one because you need a determiner here not an adjective.....and mere can never be followed or preceded by one, it is sole characteristic of ONLY.

Best of Luck.

thanx sir yes vocabulary is my weakness
but thanx again surely i would search out for MERE!

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i believe in Allah and he is the mere one who can help me...

Your flow of thought is not up to the mark. Apart from that your attempt is good one. I think you lack in reading, that is why you are committing such mistakes. In simple words I would say "maza nahi aya".... Your attempt must be interesting, effective and attractive. Overall a it is a good attempt. Keep going on.

[QUOTE=rayma qaiser;657717] Being verbose (and trying to use Gulabi English = the one which shows the vocabulary bank) in English papers can cost you your merit if not your CSS Dream! We (the people of the subcontinent in general) need to appreciate that vocabulary may determine our command over this language but simplicity has it's own beauty I would suggest to write only simple, plain and error-free English.

Throughout my 3 Attempts and 12x3 papers i never used the words: condoned, apposite, betoken because we have simpler and much widely used and understood alternatives for them Simplicity, Flow, Relevance, and Uniqueness of Ideas may however fetch you good marks

P.S: It is a personal opinion and the readers are free to disagree

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