do have a look at essay written by me..need critical evaluation by you..

http://www.cssforum.com.pk/css-compu...dly-check.html

Thanks

Dear, you have to memorize quotations by heart. You will have to remember quotations for Pakistan Affairs, Current Affairs, Islamiat, Essay, your optionals etc. Quotations are ornaments of writing. You should start by now or these will create hurdles for you. Hope you understand it.

Dear, you have written only 135 words. Word limit of an expansion in CSS is 250-300. Please, take your word count up to 250.
A few mistakes are told by Nabilach. And, write your expansion on an QUOTATION OR PROVERB. The topics of expansion in CSS are proverbial statements and quotations.

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@ zuhaib : just skimmed your 15 expansions, really you have made a very impressing use of quotations. very well done!!
if you have compiled some useful quotations kindly share these as uptill now i have not made any effort in this regard.

@zuhaib.

you sir are doing an excellent job .. thumbs up to you.

I had noticed the mistakes highlited by you, as I mentioned it was my maiden attempt.

Yes I meant countries of world by placing "wold countries"
I am looking forward for seeking guidlines by U in coming days !

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"Never bend your head.Always hold it high.Look the world right in the eye."

Here is my very first attempt at expansion. It is kind of very rough and I think I have deviated from main theme. Need suggestions specially stressing sentence structure and grammar.

Thank you.

Adopting unchecked Western life styles.

Expansion:

Western lifestyle is a set of norms and values which is followed by people in west. It is a liberal, non-traditional and popular culture which is in complete conflict with our eastern Islamic culture. Due to increasing globalization, economies of many countries are greatly weaved together and are extremely dependent on western economies due to their great economic might. With this increasing trade, cultural exchange and modernization is rampant. As western countries are dominating in economics sphere, we tend to adopt their cultures too. Because it is evident in history that countries which are powerful in economic terms its culture is influenced on developing countries. This increasing infusion of western cultures is being adopting without any hindrance or objection by the masses. Pre-marital sex, western immodest dresses, alcoholism, drug culture and vulgarity are a few of the many evils of western culture which have infiltrated our society completely at various levels. This has led to numerous problems for our culture, our society and for nation as a whole. The western trend has presently grown deep roots in our society; it is difficult or nearly impossible to eradicate values completely from our culture in short term. What can be done is to create awareness and affection for our own culture and values. We should market our own culture and beliefs to people. Our Islamic values and eastern traditions should be encouraged at school level with the collaboration of parents. There is a lot that can be done to promote our culture and to curb the growing strength of westernization but the fact is, in reality, no matter how hard we try, it will not produce desired results until and unless we do not work on economic influence. As long as we are developing country and westerners are developed and rich, we will always tend to be influenced by their culture, it’s in human nature.

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1) This increasing infusion of western cultures is being "adopted" , not adopting
2) completely at various levels?,,if something is completely infiltrated then there are not levels. however, there can bu used 'various aspects', various sectors etc..

overall, a very good effort, but try to write on proverbial statements...

thanx alot Zohaib bro. I'll try to memorize idioms and phrases as well as increase the length upto mendatory number of words as detected by you....

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"Never bend your head.Always hold it high.Look the world right in the eye."

Thanks, Dear. This is very useful thread of quotations. You can find out-standing quotations.

http://www.cssforum.com.pk/off-topic...uotations.html

and unless we do not work"

Dear, unless shows negative sense so no need to give NOT.
Write it; 'Unless we do work.'
A few mistakes are sorted out by Nabilach.

Well, dear. As you say that you are derailed. Yes, you are.

You have good expressions. Write on a proverbial statement or Quotation.
I await your next attempt to check comprehensively.