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zuhaib ahmed · #**221** Saturday, August 11, 2012

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Originally Posted by nabilach

Sweet are the uses of adversity.

This statement highlights the importance of adversity in human’s life. Adversity is any unfavourable condition faced by the man i.e poverty, illness, oppression, subjugation and vice versa. Man, the most cognizant creature on the earth, can learn more in the state of adversity. His abilities get polished and his covert qualities get explored. It is because, in these conditions, he becomes aware of the realities of life. He understands the importance of work more than he can in any time of comfort. Many great men, who are shining in the pages of history, were the good learner of their times of adversity. Zaheer-ud-din Babar, the founder of mughal sultanate in India, himself writes about his experiences of hardships in his early life in his memoir. He made the sweet use of his adversities. He calls adversities a good school to train up a man for getting a higher position in life. Madam Curie, the Nobel laureate, was such poor in her early life that she had to do a number of menial jobs to bear the expenses of her education. Hellen keller, the internationally known writer, was facing a number of physical handicaps, but she did not allow them to hinder her way to success. John Nash, another Nobel prize winner was suffering from a severe psychological disorder. Marx weber, a prestigious social researcher, faced very dangerous paralysis strokes but did not give up. Similarly, Abraham Lincoln, the famous president of America, belonged to a very poor family. He got that position by making the good of his hard times. There are hundreds of such examples that confirm the sweetness of adversities. In fact, adversity is a blessing in disguise. It serves as a teacher and trainer. Man gets the harsh lessons that prepare him for the time to come. Thus, obstacles and hardships do not come to hinder the way of progress but to train up a person to swim through the opposite waves. He who makes the best use of his difficult times can never fail to achieve his objectives.

Quite well done. You write beautifully.

nabilach · #**222** Saturday, August 11, 2012

thanx zuhaib, but there surely will be room for improvement as there were some mistakes in my last expansion but nobody corrected them. Please please all fellows read it carefully. i will be grateful.
while, the statement given by you to expand 'train up a child in the way he should go' has made me much confused. however, i am trying to do it.

Ravian575 · #**223** Saturday, August 11, 2012

Title: - Population growth and resource management
Modern sociology has paid a very little attention to the population rise. The function of modern polity is to regulate the population rise besides providing congenial atmosphere for competition. The neglect will result in hunger and famine besides draining the resources. The rabbit like growth of the population needs to be checked at all costs. Civilized people are quite prone to the change by restricting births unlike the lower strata which neither contribute nor put a restraint on child births. The issue if unaddressed will drain the resources. The government is well aware of the severity of the problem but it fears public anger because majority of the voters live in rural areas where clergy wields power. The religious scholars on the other hand advocate the theory of procreation. Even socialists view that it is hope not frustration that leads to unrest and revolution.
Nearer the church farther from the God
Nearer to the church farther from the God means that while practicing religion one needs not to divorce reason from life. God created people out of the same pair of Adam and Eve but church divided them in colors, creeds, sects and suppressed their rights to think freely and ponder over the bounties of the nature.
In Europe, church was very powerful from 10th to the end of 15th century and this age in European history is considered as the dark age of the history because church paralyzed free thinking among the people and made kingship divine. The church preached the people that if king is bad; it is because of their evil deeds that God has put His wrath for their sinful acts on them. History bears testimony to the fact that church has been very corrupt and cruel. The sale of indulgences by the church was one of such examples in history. Church during those days was wielding great power and prestige but it delivered nothing except atrocities to the people. It was only after renaissance, reformation and enlightenment era when Europe changes its outlook from medieval to modern. On the other hand God has created man as the crown creation and puts no restrain on his power to think and question. He taught him love, humbleness, knowledge, power of the pen and goodness but the clergy in the church reversed it to hatred,

nabilach · #**224** Saturday, August 11, 2012

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Originally Posted by Ravian575

Title: - Population growth and resource management
Modern sociology has paid a very little attention to the population rise. The function of modern polity is to regulate the population rise besides providing congenial atmosphere for competition. The neglect will result in hunger and famine besides draining the resources. The rabbit like growth of the population needs to be checked at all costs. Civilized people are quite prone to the change by restricting births unlike the lower strata which neither contribute nor put a restraint on child births. The issue if unaddressed will drain the resources. The government is well aware of the severity of the problem but it fears public anger because majority of the voters live in rural areas where clergy wields power. The religious scholars on the other hand advocate the theory of procreation. Even socialists view that it is hope not frustration that leads to unrest and revolution.
Nearer the church farther from the God
Nearer to the church farther from the God means that while practicing religion one needs not to divorce reason from life. God created people out of the same pair of Adam and Eve but church divided them in colors, creeds, sects and suppressed their rights to think freely and ponder over the bounties of the nature.
In Europe, church was very powerful from 10th to the end of 15th century and this age in European history is considered as the dark age of the history because church paralyzed free thinking among the people and made kingship divine. The church preached the people that if king is bad; it is because of their evil deeds that God has put His wrath for their sinful acts on them. History bears testimony to the fact that church has been very corrupt and cruel. The sale of indulgences by the church was one of such examples in history. Church during those days was wielding great power and prestige but it delivered nothing except atrocities to the people. It was only after renaissance, reformation and enlightenment era when Europe changes its outlook from medieval to modern. On the other hand God has created man as the crown creation and puts no restrain on his power to think and question. He taught him love, humbleness, knowledge, power of the pen and goodness but the clergy in the church reversed it to hatred,

i remember this paragraph 'POPULATION EXPLOSION AND RESOURCE MANAGEMENT' has been taken from the 2012 precis paper. it can be my own thinking.

zuhaib ahmed · #**225** Sunday, August 12, 2012

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Originally Posted by nabilach

thanx zuhaib, but there surely will be room for improvement as there were some mistakes in my last expansion but nobody corrected them. Please please all fellows read it carefully. i will be grateful.
while, the statement given by you to expand 'train up a child in the way he should go' has made me much confused. however, i am trying to do it.

Indeed, there is always a room for improvement.

I have already said that you write very well but let me share my point of view.
Excess of everything is bad. You write examples 5 to 6. It gives quite good taste but make your example about 3 and give a relevant quotation. It shall beautify and strengthen your expansion.

Thanks.

Ravian575 · #**226** Sunday, August 12, 2012

Kindly suggest some tips for improvement. Yes the precis and expansion are from 2012 paper..............

nabilach · #**227** Sunday, August 12, 2012

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Originally Posted by zuhaib ahmed

Indeed, there is always a room for improvement.

I have already said that you write very well but let me share my point of view.
Excess of everything is bad. You write examples 5 to 6. It gives quite good taste but make your example about 3 and give a relevant quotation. It shall beautify and strengthen your expansion.

Thanks.

yes, you are very right. but the problem with me is that i cannot cram the quotations as they are and there is high probability of mistakes :-P

rashidrhb · #**228** Sunday, August 12, 2012

Growing population is been the burning issue of the 21st century. And the management of ever decreasing resources is quiet a challenging task. Wold population has increased rapidly in last 50 years, as some countries of the world are running out of their resources e.g Somalia, where people are dying of hunger. Pakistan is having his name at sixth position of list of most populous countries of the world, and encircled many issues regarding excessive population. While on contrary china despite having more than 1.5 billion people has managed to control the growth by adopting strict birth laws and made the most of his population by giving them opportunities to contribute in the growth of country. World countries must take steps in line with china in order to coup with the growing population.

My first attempt of expansion. I know it may be cluster of errors, suggestions and criticism will be welcomed

nabilach · #**229** Sunday, August 12, 2012

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Originally Posted by rashidrhb

Growing population is been the burning issue of the 21st century. And the management of ever decreasing resources is quiet a challenging task. Wold population has increased rapidly in last 50 years, as some countries of the world are running out of their resources e.g Somalia, where people are dying of hunger. Pakistan is having his name at sixth position of list of most populous countries of the world, and encircled many issues regarding excessive population. While on contrary china despite having more than 1.5 billion people has managed to control the growth by adopting strict birth laws and made the most of his population by giving them opportunities to contribute in the growth of country. World countries must take steps in line with china in order to coup with the growing population.

My first attempt of expansion. I know it may be cluster of errors, suggestions and criticism will be welcomed

in the very first line there should be 'has been' because 'is been' not makes any sense or just 'is' can be used here
2) not 'quiet' but 'quite' here
3) for country not 'his' is used but 'her'
4) either 'while' or 'on contrary' can be used, as the use of both does not seem appropriate
5) what is 'world countries' ? it can be countries of the world
dear all these mistakes are my point of view regarding your writing. you can consult any book or senior for further assurance..

nabilach · #**230** Sunday, August 12, 2012

All seniors and fellows are requested to check my this piece of expansion and pinpoint mistakes.

Peace hath her victories, no less renowned than the War

This statement signifies the benefits of peace. It does not deplore the process of war rather it describes the equality of advantages during the both. War brings the blessings of activism, solidarity and sacrifice among the nation. Ruksin, a renowned English writer highlights the importance of war for a slumbering nation. A long, uninterrupted peace process can make a nation pleasure-loving and lethargic. So, the outburst of war can ignite the dormant passion of the nation. It can make a nation aware of its hidden potential as during Second World War, the GDP ratio of some countries grew much higher than its earlier level. Whereas, peace provides its own benefits that can never be achieved during the war. All the progress in the fields of education and health is the direct or indirect outcome of peace process. People can concentrate on these aspects of life in spite of inventing modern weapons of war and getting the skills of warfare. The capital can be allocated liberally in these fields. Research and development flourishes. The economy gets boom. It is because, industry, agriculture and service sector keep on working without any interruption. New modes of farming and efficient machinery for industrial use are invented. Art, literature, music and all such fields bring forth the work of high order. The sectors of tourism and the infrastructure are developed. People feel the sense of liberty. All great personalities of the world are the staunch advocate of peace. The spiritual glory of man finds its way through the smooth road of peace. Even the notorious warriors accepts the significance of the peace process. Peace is the most valuable phenomena for human being. It is the destiny for which man is striving for since the day of his birth.