Originally Posted by 7ali

the contemporary scenario of pakistan has vastly impacted upon children,whose naivety and buoyancy(?) are taken away by(a) plethora of problems which the country is facing today.paroxysms of violence,penury and illiteracy have(has) marred their innocent mind.their memories are blotted by terrorism and hunger; their time spends in a garage,working as an assistant or as a scavenger, searching their livelihood through the piles of garbage.(there seem no coherence between statement before and after colon)
A pakistani juvenile has to face a(space needed)lot of psychological traumas,some of which are due to domestic reasons (i guess putting in a full stop and starting a new sentence would be a much better idea.)but the most important one is due to the barbarism that is prevailing in the society. acts of violence like target killings, riots and bomb blasts have (has)suppressed the mental capabilities of of children.
poverty has, perhaps, the biggest role in their miseries. not only(comma) that they face starvation on daily basis but(comma) also they are compelled to indulge in labour or ,sometimes, criminal activities to earn some bread for their family. they are negated (denied is a better option) the basic right of food, shelter and clothing. some of the children even are sexually abused while others get addicted to several forms of drugs.thus, destroying their health and future simultaneously.
the illiteracy ratio(rate) in pakistan is (the)highest in the south asian region. the gravity of the situation can be gauged by the statistics revealed by a survey which shows that approximately 25(percent?) children lack classroom access in the country.as education is the essential tool for a successful future, these children are never provided the chance to strive for a prosperous career.today, the eyes of these children are dry,their faces are stolid and personality lacks self-confidence.(the)children in pakistan have of (?)suppressed emotions and they seriously lack the joyfulness of youth and the zeal to move forward.in other countries, new generation is regarded as a great asset while in pakistan they are nothing but victims of society.

Originally Posted by sadafnoorelahi

Evolution versus revolution
Change is inevitable. Basically,there are two types of change: evolutionary and revolutionary. evolutionary change is the change in increment that takes place gradually, over time. the slow,gradual changes ensures the survival of an organization. Generally, evolution is induced by an external force to keep up with the technology, or to address the needs of the stake holders for e.g people were not coerced,they themselves chose, to use modern gadgets. As it is rightly said, ” evolution is not something that applies simply to life here on earth, it is universal”
On the other hand, revolution is a catalyst of change- sudden deviation from stagnation.it defies the existing patterns and sets new patterns and disrupts the balance. As J.F kennedy said,”those who make peaceful revolution impossible, make violent revolution inevitable”.nothing in digital media has been immediately life changing. therefore,it is more evolutionary than revolutionary.Another difference between evolution and revolution is the agency.evolutionary change best serve the individuals needs whereas,revolutionary change occurs by individuals to comply to certain standards.The basic difference however,between evolutionary change and revolutionary change is the rate of progress and not the time.the question arises: what is better? evolutionary change or revolutionary.this depends upon the individuals.if they have deep pockets and a vision than revolutionary change is the viable option.never the less,if some one can wait for a few generations,than evolutionary change is the correct choice.
kindly,someone check my expansion and do tell me if it satisfies the need of the topic at hand.

Originally Posted by 7ali

it seems that you have not quite grasped the appropriate usage of comma.secondly,it would have been much better if you had given example of democratic process.nevertheless, a good attempt indeed.


religion is the greatest benefactor of human race

the essential message of every religion is peace, kindness, compassion and brotherhood.for thousands of years, mankind has adopted religious codes as guiding principles for living and as an immediate law of society.as every religion urges man to be pious, the society it culminates,then,becomes the most civilized and peaceful one.
if one looks in (into)the history, he will find that all religions brought(a) revolution in the nations, both politically and socially.before the advent of any religion,we see that the culture and norms of that era were savage,inhumane and hideous.the nations had plunged in the abyss of darkness and vulgarity; the elite had conferred themselves the title of omnipotent.however,after the advent of religion,the society of vices transforms into an exemplary one.
for example: before islam, arabs used to slit each other throats and bury their female child.but, the impact of islam was so astonishing that the same people who were scattered and cruel became rulers of the whole world.moreover,their barbarism was dispersed and they became the epitome of human civilization.
in addition to that, the prophet of any religion had the most amazing reputation in the masses.they were the most honest, honorable and suitable people.their whole lives were a living example of truthfulness,generosity,simplicity and perfection.
all religions,whether judaism or islam or any other, have preached for the betterment of human beings.they have worked as a rallying point for the unorganized, agitated, belligerent masses.they have provided the code for progress and prosperity of man.without religion,there will be no conscience, no fear of judgement and no logical reason for(the existence of human) human existence.the society will regress into the pre-historic era with animal instincts and savagery as the basic human tools.