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Title: Manto’s rational approach towards human nature and sexism

Manto was targeted by his opponents, in the name of falsely claimed righteousness, who claimed non-ethical existence in his work. However, he was firm in his exploration of reality of life, against conservatism of the so-called purists. Like Freud, he uncovered sexual concerns above fantasy, in its real domain as a socio-economic ill of society. Manto adopted a central way in explaining the nature of man and his behaviour in diverse fields of society. Hence, this gained him laudable popularity amongst hai followers. While reflecting lackings of human nature, Manto used his artistic approach to maintain sophistication in his write-ups. His style allowed people to related themselves, as a self-reflection mechanism to Manto’s thoughts.
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The phrase " non-ethical existence in his work" doesn't make any sense. You can say 'unethical content', or 'ethically questionable' themes in his works.

This line : "he uncovered sexual concerns above fantasy" needs revision, because it suggests that he prioritized sexual 'concerns' over fantastical ones, and that doesn't sound right to me.

What do you mean by "central way"?

You've made up a new word: 'lackings'. You should replace it with something appropriate, like weaknesses perhaps.

It would be better to use 'stories/narratives/tales/fiction' instead of the word 'write-ups'.

"His style allowed people to related themselves, as a self-reflection mechanism to Manto’s thoughts." This line makes your meaning very ambiguous. I don't know what you're trying to convey here. People don't "relate themselves" or even "relate to themselves"! They relate to others.

From what I see, you need to use simpler words and achieve clarity in your language. There are grammatical problems, as well as usage of words without knowing their actual meaning or even knowing whether those words exist.
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The phrase " non-ethical existence in his work" doesn't make any sense. You can say 'unethical content', or 'ethically questionable' themes in his works.

This line : "he uncovered sexual concerns above fantasy" needs revision, because it suggests that he prioritized sexual 'concerns' over fantastical ones, and that doesn't sound right to me.

What do you mean by "central way"?

You've made up a new word: 'lackings'. You should replace it with something appropriate, like weaknesses perhaps.

It would be better to use 'stories/narratives/tales/fiction' instead of the word 'write-ups'.

"His style allowed people to related themselves, as a self-reflection mechanism to Manto’s thoughts." This line makes your meaning very ambiguous. I don't know what you're trying to convey here. People don't "relate themselves" or even "relate to themselves"! They relate to others.

From what I see, you need to use simpler words and achieve clarity in your language. There are grammatical problems, as well as usage of words without knowing their actual meaning or even knowing whether those words exist.

1. Yes I agree , I made an error. It should have been unethical (not non-ethical)
2. Uncovered sexual concerns above fantasy means the same as to prioritise sexual concerns in socio-economic sphere and not just mere romance.
3. Central way= moderate way
4. Lacking is a valid word (adjective). You may google it.
5. Write-up is like a original piece of one’s writing. And the words you suggest are synonymous to it.
6. Relate themselves to Manto’s thoughts (you may read the entire senstence).

However, I agree that the overall syntax seems complex. I appreciate your feedback. Thank you
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Lacking is an adjective, but you used it as a noun. Instead, lack should be used.
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Lacking is an adjective, but you used it as a noun. Instead, lack should be used.
Can you please also have a look at the psychology paper outlines I’ve uploaded in CE-2020 section 🙏🏻
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