Originally Posted by waqarabbasi

I tried to build my outline around arguments.is there still a deficiency of arguments ?

Originally Posted by safeer khan

No..
See in early posts. I have pointed out its shortcomings in detail.

Like you took a stance of a pessimist.

Your wording was general and it appeared as if you're talking about democracy in general and not in the context of Pakistan.

Complicated your topic by stating arguments both positive and negative. Although it makes sense to me that the future of democracy is not a straight forward prediction, but again I would say that I had to put effort into it.

I wrote on this topic when I began my preparation five months ago. You would believe how bad was it. You've written much better.

I said that build your outline around arguments generally, only to remind you.

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Originally Posted by waqarabbasi

thank you! for this generous help

Originally Posted by safeer khan

Aristotle said that "to know, do. to understand, teach".

I'm just making my own understanding better.

The next topic?

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Originally Posted by waqarabbasi

The future of democracy in Pakistan
outline
as I posted above, but that was for 'value and future of democracy',for this topic I will write a new one.

1. Persistent nurturance of democracy to get its fruits in future.


a. America became the idol of democracy only after a revolution

b. French revolution reinforced the concept of democracy in Europe.

c. Pakistan needs a strong struggle to throw away the legacy of despotic type of democracy

2. How present glimpses the future of democracy in Pakistan

a. perplexed nature of security within the state and future insecurities of nation
b. increased taxes , unemployment and people’s demand for fair treatment
c. Low investment in the human development sector and people’s disregard for domestic policies.

d. No accomplishment on education front portends the continuation of the present failed democracy.

e. Failures of democracy can lead people to believe that democracy does not work in underdeveloped country.

3. What the future of democracy is uphill journey in Pakistan?

a. Democracy succeeds in a rising middle class society with fairly high level of education; which Pakistan lacks.

b. Culture of democracy is anti-feudal and power clout, whereas Pakistan suffers great influence of feudal lords, Sardars and Bradri culture.

c. The civil-military divide undermines the bright future of powerful democracy.

4. Endangered future of democracy can be protected.

a. Judiciary, media and human rights should play a vital role.

b. Democracy can never flourish without quality education; it enlightens people of the fruits of democracy.

c. Transparent election, and then the accountability of elected representatives.

d. Economic independence is essential for true democracy; poverty strengthens the hold of corrupt and powerful.

e. An efficient delivery mechanism lest people should lose faith in democracy.

Conclusion

please criticise whatever are the faults, also give your views on marks of this outline.

Originally Posted by Bonaparte

I think without these two points your outline is relevant now it says " The future of democracy in Pakistan "

a.America became the idol of democracy only after a revolution

b.French revolution reinforced the concept of democracy in Europe.

Overall, Good work

Originally Posted by safeer khan

TITLE: FUTURE OF DEMOCRACY IN PAKISTAN

Introduction:

Future of democracy is bright in Pakistan because she has already overcome many hurdles in her way to be a republic, and also has the capacity to deal with any obstacle in the future.

[A] WHY Future of Democracy is Bright in Pakistan

1- She has experienced her first democratic transition of government in 2013.

2- Voter turnout has increased gradually.
(43 percent in 1998 and 55 percent in 2013)

3- New political parties and leaders are emerging.

4- Educated youth has begun to take interest in politics.

5- Media is actively shaping the opinion of the people in favor of democracy.

6- Local Governments have been introduced first time in a democratic atmosphere.

7- Electoral Reforms are almost here.

8- Zarb-e-Azab has actively curbed militancy and anti-democratic elements.

9- A sensible military leadership has emerged.

10- Main political parties have a consensus on key issues and National Action Plan.

11- Judiciary is independent.

12- Democracies do not fight with each other. Thus, the world powers are making sure that "the nuclear Pakistan" is in the hands of public representatives.

[B] A Few Points of Caution:

1- Role of provinces has increased after 18th amendment in the constitution. They must build a capacity to perform their new duties.

2- Devolution of powers to grass root level will accelerate the democratic progress.

3- Spending on education must be increased to sustain the gained democratic benefits.

Conclusion:

Originally Posted by waqarabbasi

INTRODUCTION:-

It is undoubtedly true that democratic value serves as a pedestal for any state in which every nation flourish by empowering the citizen to express their opinion, freedom to move, right to assembly, practice their religion and exercise the power to vote independently devoid external pressure. avoid such a lengthy sentence Similarly, the value of democracy in Pakistan and its democratic system has not been ingenuous and infringed several occasions by confronting various military regimes; notwithstanding, Pakistan embraces and transformed drastically by arevitalizing democratic structure in the era of Globalization which can be clearly noticed when Honorable Chief Justice of Pakistan issued statement vis-a-vis government to enhance and strengthen the democratic structure by promoting social justice and eradication of social evils. Besides, ISPR statement to bolster governance and expedite the efficiency of institutions which has been open heartedly welcomed by government and depicts goodwill gesture which ultimately serves asan impetus to Pakistani Democratic system and relapsed government into introspection. As a result of this, government is now engaged in improving democratic structure by carrying out their tasks more effectively and swiftly in order to harness social injustice and ensure equality of law irrespective of social stratification. The matter of fact is that,'no need to place a comma' these events are unprecedented in the history of Pakistan where institutions exercise its 'their' opinion based on within the confinement of their institutional jurisdiction; hence, freedom to express, profess and debate conspicuously explicates that Pakistan is on the right path of democratic transformation.
Good work ,avoid making your sentences complex

Originally Posted by Bonaparte

Satisfactory outline, but it is inadequate. You should add few more points in your outline. Besides, I think you should replace this heading " A Few points of caution" with another suitable sentence so that it will look good. Moreover, your take off is very nice, however landing is bumpy. Make such a balancing outline which shows smooth transition of headings. Apart from this your work is fine but not fully completed. Nice effort anyway.

I will post my outline soon Inshallah. Your suggestions and correction will be highly appreciated.

Originally Posted by safeer khan

Where exactly is it bumpy or going imbalanced?

Suggest an alternative to the phrase "a few points of caution".

And I include only two headings, one for the arguments and one for the suggestions. I think more headings only unnecessarily complicate things.

And if you think that the inadequacy of this outline is because I have not put big words and big names in it, then actually I have saved them for the main body.



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