Remember,every heading mentioned in your outline is a central idea of your sequential paragraph, mentioning ambiguous headings will impact badly on your reader.
Secondly,I don't know which style of writing you're following,but sometimes you commit blunders while joining subordinate and independent clauses. I'd suggest you to visit my correction of errors as already done on this forum. I'm optimistic that it will work for you.
Safeer has analyzed your essay excellently,though I had also pinpointed ,but didn't mention because too much criticism at the beginning is too depressive for writer.
If you don't mind than I would recommend you to make your essay bit diplomatic I.e. sense of neutrality is very important,which is even missing though;I mean don't be obssessed philosopher,instead brief intro of this kind is a good start, eventually tone the york little sophisticated with facts and figures:it will make your conclusive remarks more appealing. Even don't draw the rossy picture,just tell the real situation.I hope next time your essay would be better than this.
keep your efforts growing than trust on your abilities. This key is a short cut to success!
@safer khan and waqarAbbas
thanks for your contribution. I had written the essay one month earlier and I thought it was a good topic to discuss,that's why I shared. Once again sense of great gratitude from the side of mine.

Well, Safeer bro thank you for your critical and positive analysis. could you explain that why this is a descriptive essay; though i tried my best to give vivid arguments to support my central idea.
Furthermore, I did not know about that much-needed socio-psychological behaviour: Diffusion of responsibility. however, I have accumulated to put up the same idea into my thesis.
As far as your Voltaire's critic is concerned, let me ask you humbly was Voltaire's work only concerned or narrowed to free speech or it was multi-dimensional? of course, it was multi-dimensional i.e. Social behaviour, religious views, state and church and basic human rights.
This philosophical thought ' No snowflake in an Avalanche ever feels responsible' was coined by himself during the authoritarian rule in France. how could i miss his contribution! This quote is purely related to French Revolution and its predicted savage havoc.
I guess you are right in last part i should limit my knowledge, and must focus more on the topic. Thank you for appreciation for my English and Expressionary writing. My aim here is to learn and rejuvenate my writing style.

Thanks, brother I am overly joyed by your productive analysis and effective suggestions. yes I will surely work on to produce more simple and understandable outline phrases.
Kindly provide the link to that of your Correction of errors, so I could consolidate my writing more prudently.

Topic:Globalization is a form of colonization.
Put your scholarly light on the above topic.
Waqarabbasi,Safeer khan,faiza
Probably it was last topic before essay paper.

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All humans are born equal in dignity and rights but they are in shackles everywhere.

1-Introduction
2-dignity and rights of human
2.1-definition of rights
2.2-dignity and rights of humans in islam
2.3-Prophet's last sermon : An arab has no superiority over a non arab ,also white has no superiority over a black nor a black has any superiority over white except by piety and good action.
3-who are in shackles today in acquiring their rights
3.1-Gender inequality/role of male and female
3.2-Third gender is neglected and degraded still in todays society in acquiring their rights and dignity.
3.3-A poor strives hard to attain his rights politically,economically and socially
4-why are people in shackles?
4.1-Man is evil by nature
4.2-not following Islamic teachings of Holy Quran and sunnah
5-how can we take out people from these shackles?
5.1-to follow the teachings of Quran and sunnah
5.2-helping one another in attaining their rights
5.3-to stand up/raise voice against evil doers
6-Conclusion.