Originally Posted by waqarabbasi

I am posting this essay, although not the decided topic but as I completed it today I decided to post. please, analyse and evaluate it; I will post the democracy-related topic within 2 days inshAllah.


Are we ready for a genie age?



Introduction

Adaptability to technology and digital revolution is essential for human progress

1.Humans must adapt to evolution in socio-cultural life
2.Advancement of human intelligence to tackle the complexity and diversity created by genie age.


A.Genie age brings far-reaching consequences for humans

1.Replacement of human intelligence in offices, hospitals and education institutes.
2.Mass unemployment for millions of people.
3.New fields of employment and changed methods for making a living.
4.Improved systems of espionage and access to secret data anywhere in the world.
5. It broadens the base of services and tertiary economic sectors.

B.Genie age revolutionizes the nature of international relation


1.Improved digital and communication technology enhances connectivity in international relations
2.Enhanced connectivity results in the greater desire for world dominance and economic prosperity.
3.The availability of sophisticated technology makes it difficult for a single nation or block to dominate the world.

C.Are humans ready to adapt to changed nature of international relations?


1.Human’s ability to manage the imbalance power among nations.
2.Availability of sophisticated weapons and humanity’s level of success in averting hot confrontations.
3.Mankind’s readiness to tolerate differences to live in a much-connected world.


D.Is human intelligence ready to progress with the challenges presented by genie revolution?


1.Essential skills for working with artificial intelligence of machines.
2.Creation of jobs as a substitute to manual and industrial jobs.
3. Measures to tackle problems emanating from threats to privacy of individuals and nation
4.Readiness of human intelligence to use artificial intelligence as a servant not as a master.


E.Are humans trained to deal social effects of genie revolution?

1. Education in the digital age and humans’ adaptability.
2. Social contacts on the social forums; changed identities, emotional exploitation and how it affects social integration?
3. Mechanized nature of life resulting in indifference and world’s tools to fight it.


F.Adoptability to genie revolution is slow; the power of machines and artificial intelligence is confronting humanity instead of serving it.

Conclusion
The pace and nature of genie revolution is threatening the social fabric and cultural fabric. Humans are not yet ready to deal with the challenges created by genie revolution.

Originally Posted by safeer khan

First of all, what is the genie age?

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Originally Posted by waqarabbasi

Are we ready for a genie age?



Introduction

Adaptability to technology and digital revolution is essential for human progress

**** there's a question mark in the title. So answer must be in Yes or No. So, you've completely missed the point.


1.Humans must adapt to evolution in socio-cultural life

*** Acceptable

2.Advancement of human intelligence to tackle the complexity and diversity created by genie age.

***Acceptable if you will keep these two points confined to half a page.


A.Genie age brings far-reaching consequences for humans

***this essay is not about consequences, so you'll also have to keep the following in max one or two paragraphs. Moreover, much precious space would have been exhausted till this point. And you still have not answered the question posed.

1.Replacement of human intelligence in offices, hospitals and education institutes.
2.Mass unemployment for millions of people.
3.New fields of employment and changed methods for making a living.
4.Improved systems of espionage and access to secret data anywhere in the world.
5. It broadens the base of services and tertiary economic sectors.

B.Genie age revolutionizes the nature of international relation

*** this is also a kind of consequence, why would you treat it as a separate Main heading?


1.Improved digital and communication technology enhances connectivity in international relations
2.Enhanced connectivity results in the greater desire for world dominance and economic prosperity.
3.The availability of sophisticated technology makes it difficult for a single nation or block to dominate the world.

C.Are humans ready to adapt to changed nature of international relations?

*** now your essay is looking like a paper of IR. This heading is not directly contributing to the thesis statement. Instead it is only complementing the previous heading.

1.Human’s ability to manage the imbalance power among nations.
2.Availability of sophisticated weapons and humanity’s level of success in averting hot confrontations.
3.Mankind’s readiness to tolerate differences to live in a much-connected world.


D.Is human intelligence ready to progress with the challenges presented by genie revolution?

**** now this is the main issue. This should come first. Relevant part first. Remember, beginning is the most important part.


1.Essential skills for working with artificial intelligence of machines.
2.Creation of jobs as a substitute to manual and industrial jobs.
3. Measures to tackle problems emanating from threats to privacy of individuals and nation
4.Readiness of human intelligence to use artificial intelligence as a servant not as a master.


E.Are humans trained to deal social effects of genie revolution?

*** you can safely incorporate these ideas in the previous heading.


1. Education in the digital age and humans’ adaptability.
2. Social contacts on the social forums; changed identities, emotional exploitation and how it affects social integration?
3. Mechanized nature of life resulting in indifference and world’s tools to fight it.


F.Adoptability to genie revolution is slow; the power of machines and artificial intelligence is confronting humanity instead of serving it.

Conclusion
The pace and nature of genie revolution is threatening the social fabric and cultural fabric. Humans are not yet ready to deal with the challenges created by genie revolution.

*** I am not sure but I was told by someone not to write anything below conclusion. Conclusion is obvious--your thesis statement.

Originally Posted by Ambivalent

We have discussed this topic in detail. But before moving on to the next topic, I want to add one thing: aspirants who are appearing in essay paper 2016 should contribute to this forum and should check how they organize their content in an essay to remove their mistakes. Our friends here are doing great deal of work by correcting the organization and relevance of topics. So, for everyone's benefit contribute aspirants. I am also thankful to Safir, Bonaparte, Waqar, M Usman, and Other friends for their regular participation.

The next topic is

I Disapprove of what you say, but I defend to death your right to say

Key Words: 'Disapprove', 'what to say', 'Defend', 'Death', 'Right to Say' so the main idea is "'Freedom of speech"".
Theme of the essay: Freedom of speech is a right that has to be defended forever, as everyone expresses his/her views/opinions in a way they desire ; however, opinions can differ from person to person and one person can disapprove the opinion of others, thus in this regard there is no compulsion of keeping and agreeing to only one set of opinion.

Originally Posted by faiza rajput

Members I want to know that keeping this topic statement in mind, should we write essay in first person or as usual in third person?

Originally Posted by faiza rajput

I disapprove of what you say, but I defend to death your right to say

Introduction

There are approximately six billion people living on this earth. That implies six billion minds with hundreds of thoughts inside them. These thoughts are shaped by different factors like social network, environment, emotional attachments, different experience through subsequent stages of life etc. Therefore, they are similar to that of some and different from that of many. Based on these facts, I can disagree with someone about one’s thoughts but I certainly cannot obstruct someone from expressing his/her thoughts on the ground that I do not agree with him/her. Expressing oneself without any fear is right of every individual and there should be no obstacle in one’s way of exercising this right. Every civilized member of an educated, well-mannered and culturally groomed society acknowledge this right and always ready to defend to death this right of every single person regardless of social standing of person.

Originally Posted by safeer khan

Excellent start. Also add a relevant qoute.

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Originally Posted by faiza rajput

Is this introduction sufficient or should I add more stuff? Moreover, Please point out grammatical mistakes as well.