Originally Posted by princeling

introduction : Progress and development of a state is directly linked to the level of appreciation they offer to the brains . brains flocked to countries where they are welcomed with privileges, high pays, respect and expanded opportunities. brains and hearts have same tendencies of preferring the atmosphere and system where they can have the lives of comfort and enjoy all sorts of social securities. brains in broader perspective refers to intellectuals, engineers, writers , scientists and sundry artists. As hearts always seek places which are resourceful and replete with facilities ,so do brains .Great minds go to countries where their contributions and capabilities are fully recognized and welcomed. scientists will reside in countries where they can receive full funds for their research work as well as states continue to provide them avenues for their inventive and scientific endeavors. graduates will rush for visas of those states which can offer them good job opportunities. conversely , Brains leave their home lands when they are fraught with favoritism, job discrimination ,negligence towards employment policies and devoid of appreciation. In essence, brains and hearts need privileges , appreciation and state cum societal support for their grooming and well being.

brains aspire to go where atmosphere is rich for their personal grooming and career growth
1.where competence is preferred over favoritism
2.where meritocracy is the hallmark of recruitment process
3.where hard work is equally rewarded and appreciated
4.where promotions are not based on political favors

brains go where not only state policies but societies are also appreciative and supportive to their contributions
1.writers and intellectuals prefer to live where their ideas are eagerly read and appreciated
2.where brains belonging to different ethnicities and religions are not discriminated and persecuted

brain like hearts rush to those countries where they are given same equitable treatment as those of powerful political and military officials
1.where teachers have same respect and privileges as those in other powerful institutions
2.where they don't require to knock doors of powerful for help
3.where their services are free from political muddling

brains prefer states where they feel secure
1.job securities
2.state laws are not limiting their civic rights
3.their families are secured

brains like hearts go where they receive all comforts of life
1.brains need substantial money
2.brains need status
3.brains need privileges

what forces brains to leave for another countries
1.low incomes
2.lack of employment opportunities
3 instabilities
4.poor law and order

conclusion


kindly evaluate it , are there any irrelevancy anywhere among points ??

Originally Posted by princeling

introduction : Progress and development of a state is directly linked to the level of appreciation they offer to the brains . brains flocked
((past tense))

to countries where they are ((present tense within the same tense))

welcomed with privileges, high pays, respect and expanded opportunities. brains and hearts have same tendencies of preferring the atmosphere and system where they can have the lives of comfort and enjoy all sorts of social securities. brains in broader perspective refers to intellectuals, engineers, writers , scientists and sundry artists. As hearts always seek places which are resourceful and replete with facilities ,so do brains .Great minds go to countries where their contributions and capabilities are fully recognized and welcomed. scientists will reside in countries where they can receive full funds for their research work as well as states continue to provide them avenues for their inventive and scientific endeavors. graduates will rush for visas of those states which can offer them good job opportunities. conversely , Brains leave their home lands when they are fraught with favoritism, job discrimination ,negligence towards employment policies and devoid of appreciation. In essence, brains and hearts need privileges , appreciation and state cum societal support for their grooming and well being.

brains aspire to go where atmosphere is rich for their personal grooming and career growth

((Here you've used the word "atmosphere"

In the next heading you said "not only state but also Society"

So isn't it better to use the word "state in this heading? ))


1.where competence is preferred over favoritism
2.where meritocracy is the hallmark of recruitment process
3.where hard work is equally rewarded and appreciated
4.where promotions are not based on political favors

brains go where not only state policies but societies are also appreciative and supportive to their contributions
1.writers and intellectuals prefer to live where their ideas are eagerly read and appreciated
2.where brains belonging to different ethnicities and religions are not discriminated and persecuted

brain like hearts rush to those countries where they are given same equitable treatment as those of powerful political and military officials
1.where teachers have same respect and privileges as those in other powerful institutions
2.where they don't require to knock doors of powerful for help
3.where their services are free from political muddling

brains prefer states where they feel secure
1.job securities
2.state laws are not limiting their civic rights
3.their families are secured

brains like hearts go where they receive all comforts of life

((how this point is different from your previous points?

Here you used the word "all comforts of life", which means that all the previous point could be written under this heading or you could write this heading's sub points under previous headings.))

1.brains need substantial money
2.brains need status
3.brains need privileges

what forces brains to leave for another countries
1.low incomes
2.lack of employment opportunities
3 instabilities
4.poor law and order

conclusion


kindly evaluate it , are there any irrelevancy anywhere among points ??

Originally Posted by safeer khan

Nice. Nothing is irrelevant. (Y)

But it could be a lot better by reducing the length of the main headings.

And more importantly, I don't find any reflection of sequence of thought in the outline. I mean the next heading does not derive its purpose from the previous one.

And try to use consistent tense. See above I have pointed out where you mixed two tenses in one sentence and other suggestions.

And I'm just trying to be over critical. Overall a nice write-up.

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Originally Posted by musmanhussain

Topic:Violence is the last refuge of incompetence.
All of Waqarabbasi,safeer khan,princiling,mustansar hussain,faiza write on the above topic.If you people already attempt this topic than share your write up here or link.

Originally Posted by musmanhussain

Topic:Violence is the last refuge of incompetence.
All of Waqarabbasi,safeer khan,princiling,mustansar hussain,faiza write on the above topic.If you people have already attempted this topic then share your write up here or link.

Originally Posted by safeer khan

Introduction:

Only the incompetent turns to violence and aggression to make the two ends meet or to falsely have a sense of accomplishment.


A) Why the incompetent resort to violence:

1- An incompetent person misjudges the consequences of aggression.

(Iraq invaded Kuwait without anticipating the response of global community in Gulf War of 1990s)

2- An incompetent person, owing to his inability to be productive, has limited options.

(Majority of the criminals are illiterate and don't have any skill)

3- Incompetency comes along jealousy and vengeance, and translates into violence.

(Boko Haram's kidnapping of young school going girls)

4- An incompetent person seeks attention of others by committing violence.

(ISIS for gaining publicity posts violent videos online)

5- An incompetent person, being himself worthless, does not regard for the value of peace and humanity.

(APS massacre by TTP)

6- An incompetent person cannot differentiate between right and wrong and considers violence legitimate.

(Domestic violence is often done by those who have failed in their careers and in life overall)

7- An incompetent person is short sighted and finds quick solutions in violence.


B) Tackling violence of the incompetent:

1- Immediate response: Building capacity to safeguard against the aggression of the incompetent
1.1- Standing armies
1.1- Professional law enforcement agencies

2- Sustainable solution: Investing in Human Development
2.1- Education (technical and traditional)
2.2- Rehabilitation centers

Conclusion:


I don't know how many words shall this outline consume...

Please review everyone!


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