Originally Posted by sidraaslam

Don't you think so that the way you drafted outline it seems more to do with water crisis and exhibits little link of the water scarcity with national unity?

Mean hereby, 'water scarcity' and 'national unity' are keywords so that one should construct the outline by explicitly revealing their intrinsic link which is so critical, as water scarcity endangers and threatens national unity and integrity. Afterward, one can mention the causes of the crisis and relevant solutions.

Originally Posted by SikanderAbbasi

I consider that lack of federal-provincial coordination, coupled with animous water policy and mismanagement, all threaten national unity. Other causes I mentioned related to natural calamities. I appreciate your suggestion though.

Originally Posted by Faiza Rajput

Dear Aspirants of CSS-19, I am starting this thread with the intention to share my daily writing for essay paper during whole month of October. All of you would be highly appreciated to contribute not just in terms of analyzing the write up but also for sharing your own essay outline or body if you may, thereby, polishing your skill as well.

Originally Posted by faiza saher

Is it necessary to also write the outline before we start the essay?

Sent from my HTC Desire 530 using Tapatalk

Originally Posted by sidraaslam

Faiza it is a good initiative, I will love to participate in this activity because more you have healthy interaction more the scope of expanding one's views.

Water crisis and national unity

how water crisis endanger national unity?

• a threat to the economy(as water security, food security, and energy security inextricably linked).
• breed social unrest and health hazards (unemployment, poor socio-economic indicators etc)
• threat to the national integrity and security (internecine conflict among federating units and political exploitation of water share )

what are causes behind water crisis?
cross-border water resources

• climate change
• water management
• interprovincial hydro-politics
• changing the demography of the country

Measures to mitigate the water crisis
the solution should be three legs table.

• legal framework
• improved institutional structure
• adaptation of new technologies

conclusion

Originally Posted by Faiza Rajput

Its good to see you here..... I will share my outline on this topic shortly...... would love to see your outline on the topic shared by me.....

Originally Posted by SikanderAbbasi

Water Scarcity and National Unity
1. Introduction (Opening and Thesis Statement)
2. Retrospection of water mismanagement
2.1. Indus Water Treaty and subsequent emergence of water scarcity
2.2. Civilian governments' ineptness to render water conservation strategies
2.3. Lack of unanimous national water policy
2.4. Interminable animosity between federal and provincial governments
3. The present natural calamities
3.1. Unpredictable climate extremes
3.2. Melting of glaciers and resultant flood crisis
3.3. Volcanic eruptions and eventual soil erosion
4. Agricultural issues
4.1. Waterlogging
4.2. Low crop yield and ultimate food insecurity
4.3. Lack of techniques to preserve surplus water flow
5. Industrial issues
5.1. Profuse wastage of groundwater for production/manufacturing
5.2. Huge profits of bottled water/water distributing companies
6. Other issues
6.1. Prevalence of diseases from importable water consumption
6.2. Scarcity of dams
6.3. Overpopulation
6.4 A long-simmering issues of Kalabagh dam
6.5 Lethargy of public to consume only required water
6.6 Unequal share of water for provinces and its diversion
7. How can national unity be achieved?
7.1. accountability of industrial (public and privately owned) companies
7.2. Construction of more dams
7.3. Plantation of more trees to reduce GHG emissions
7.4 Imposition of company tax for privately-owned companies
7.5. Installation of modern agricultural equipment
7.6. Voluntary family planning programs to prevent population growth
8. Conclusion

Originally Posted by Leo KIng

I appreciate your outline. But, in my perception you have paid undue attention to causes and measures which is not the requirement of this topic. As the topic suggests "Water crisis and national unity", we have to only provide arguments that how water crisis can have impact on national unity. Further, Can you please elaborate that how you have related unemployment and health issues with water crisis and national unity?

Originally Posted by sidraaslam

Actually, here, I mentioned shortly outline on that topic otherwise I wrote it comprehensively (specifically to reveal link of national unity and water shortage) I will share original one.

Second, this is a problematic statement so examiner assumed you find some causes and remedy to solve the problem. I gave due weight to given statement while writing that is 70% to the problem (national unity and water shortage),15% to causes and 15% to remedies.

As far as your third query:

• agriculture took 80% of water and it amounts 40% of employment and 70% of export so shortage of water mean socioeconomic conflict which in turn endanger national unity
  
• no country economy is water incentive than Pakistan and being developing nation Pakistan need more water such as the number of CPEC projects in grip of water shortage
• changing demography (exploding population and urbanization) need more and more water both quantitatively and qualitatively (40% child died because of water born diseases in Pakistan), and so on.

Originally Posted by Leo KIng

Your first part of outline is relevant. I just needed its little elaboration. Regarding causes and solutions, you are right this is a problematic essay but this problematic essay has certain direction. If the essay was simply water crisis, we could write causes and solutions as there is no certain direction to follow. But what I have learnt from different sources that when essay topic is given in certain direction you have only to follow that. This is my assumption though I could be wrong. Moreover, we can only give solutions in 2-3 paragraphs but not causes. Apart from this, I think that in addition to your above points, some more points should be added. As we have to right essay comprising of 2500-3000 words. This is what I have learnt and shared.