As far as this matter of thesis statement is concerned, it is quite complicated due to many factors in the situation we are discussing. The essays we write for CSS are not meant to be a professional piece of writing. It should be considered an amateur piece of writing as no one is expecting you to be a master of writing professional essays or professional piece of writing. Of course if you have the skill, it will yield you very good marks.
Secondly this essay that we are supposed to write is not a piece of research. You cannot reference each and everything. You are not talking about methodologies. You are not reviewing the literature. You are not distributing questionnaires nor you are taking interviews.
Another thing to take notice of is, the style of your writing. Style of your writing determines the place where you should put your thesis statement. I would again say that you should determine this yourself. I myself would like to start my introduction paragraph with a dynamic and strong sentence rather than keeping it to the end of the paragraph. But in some situations you really cannot do it. Like I had to submit an assignment a month ago. I couldn't start it with a dynamic and detailed sentence that could qualify for a thesis statement. Naturally I had to write the thesis statement in the end. So the situation matters a lot. Normally it is easier task to put a thesis statement in the end rather than beginning.

Tesco PLC was founded by Jack Cohen in 1919 when he opened a market stall in east end of London. After that in 1934 he bought a plot of land at Edmonton in the North London. This plot was used to build a new headquarters and warehouse which became the basis for modern Tesco which we currently see everywhere around us. Currently Tesco PLC is established in 14 markets and operates across North America, Europe and Asia. Currently it is world’s third largest retailer and UK’s number one. Tesco is a company that is working in UK on a very large scale. It is in FTSE top 100 and currently ranked at 18th position. It is quite popular and it is successful in earning the loyalty of customers. Everyone can feel its presence around them. Tesco has more than 2700 stores and 293,676 employees in UK only as mentioned in their annual report 2011. Managing such huge number of stores, employees and customers is not an easy job. Tesco functions in the retail market. It is competing on basis of prices with its top competitors like ASDA, Morrison and Sainsburys. It is ahead of these companies in competition and it is growing steadily. All this poses huge corporate governance responsibilities upon Tesco let it be the board of directors, shareholders, customers, employees, suppliers, government or community, so it would be worth having a critical overview of Tesco PLC to find out clues about ethical or unethical leadership, governance issues and arrangements made for their improvement, corporate social responsibility and sustainability and this is what this report intends to do so.

dear may be zohaib was not thinking the way you and me
but i want to ad something , that you defined thesis statement and hook on the rocks (100% agreed) .
Here is another view , use thesis statement in outline's intro because you have to write thesis statement to get checkers attention and to assure him that you have what he wants This is what i have learnt when i was in kingdom and tried it in css and believe me mehwish it is like macdonald's apple pie in css got good score with this method in CE2011 and many others too

This is the point to be considered. Normally examiner wouldn't take all the pain for you. You have to catch his attention right away. If he loses interest it means you sure lost some marks.

It is not always. I assure you; give Thesis statement in your Introduction where ever you want. It doesn't matter. What matters, how you give and deal with thesis statement.

If one gives statement in the start and doesn't go well with it, one may get fail and If one gives statement in the end and doesn't go well with it, he may also get fail. So, start and end won't save one. What shall be helpful how one beautifies and impresses the reader.

Most CSPs give thesis statement in start and others in End. So, it is not the big issue. Believe me. I have written dozens of Essays but never thought to give thesis in start or end. I gave where it was suitable.

Most important thing for Thesis Statement is how you give and deal with it.

Regards,

@ Zuhaib, Mehwish and Shah
I think so we all are not clear about thesis statement. Well thesis statement is type of summary of whole essay and this is what i learnt in pakistan..... Now this is again a question mark for me to digest how this thesis statement (a type of summary at the start of ur essay) will be put at the start of introduction?
@ all
plz if u have a relevant example of written essay with start of thesis statement, share over here. I will be indebted

Thesis statement in the outline, u mran to say give the reference of thesis statement in outline like this
Introduction
1. Muslim population comprising 2/3rd of world's total population.
2. Despite enormous potential — Muslim world lags behind in all spheres of life.
3. Thesis statement leading to conclusion.

Overview of the economic potential of the Muslim World.
and so on

@ umer, shah, zuhaib mehwish and all
is it recommended to start an essay with abrupt style? As we always read about start that it must be catchy and attention grabber. it is better to start from a quotation etc.. here i want to ask if i will give the start with elaborating some incidence then will it be ok? for example if i am writing an essay on terrorism then may i go for such start which is giving the picture of worse situation of a place and people who are the victims of a suicide attack on the spot.
e.g.
People were sceaming. Some of them were carrying others. there were ambulances everywhere. the whole scene was bleeding etc etc etc
so may i go for such abrupt start as I guess this is somewhat very catchy than to go for quotation or thesis statement.
what do you people say???

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Originally Posted by samia fakhar @ Zuhaib, Mehwish and Shah I think so we all are not clear about thesis statement. Well thesis statement is type of summary of whole essay and this is what i learnt in pakistan..... Now this is again a question mark for me to digest how this thesis statement (a type of summary at the start of ur essay) will be put at the start of introduction? @ all plz if u have a relevant example of written essay with start of thesis statement, share over here. I will be indebted

I had shared a link of 15 Essays of CSPs. Scroll back.

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is it recommended to start an essay with abrupt style? As we always read about start that it must be catchy and attention grabber. it is better to start from a quotation etc.. here i want to ask if i will give the start with elaborating some incidence then will it be ok? for example if i am writing an essay on terrorism then may i go for such start which is giving the picture of worse situation of a place and people who are the victims of a suicide attack on the spot. e.g. People were sceaming. Some of them were carrying others. there were ambulances everywhere. the whole scene was bleeding etc etc etc so may i go for such abrupt start as I guess this is somewhat very catchy than to go for quotation or thesis statement. what do you people say???

No, I should say NO for this. It is descriptive style which you can make in other paragraph not in Introduction.

You can make it like;

People scream, cry, bleed and undergo tortures, tragedies, torments and tensions. Terrorism has been more terrifying than the King of Terrors.

These words give overview of the situation in our country, not exactly about a exact spot which you have seen, hope, you understand.

After this, you can easily speak about TERRORISM and give a thesis statement.

But, if you fully speak about the situation, it may not help you to make a good introduction and you will not be able to jot down the gist of Essay.


It is quite better to start with a verse or quotation. After that; you can make your introduction a bit catchy. You can give a literary taste too but in a technical way.

I am a poor writer but see two introductions of mine.

Suffering Soul In scientific Age

Soul’s sufferings go on and on if it is trapped in materialistic and earthly desires. As, roses are withered and burnt if thrown into fires. Soul is the purest like sunny-sun-shine. Sweet sorrowful soul’s sufferings are in scientific age. Furthermore, Impurity and purity can’t live together. If fish is gotten out of water and thrown on dried and burning ground, it will feel panic and die. Same, if soul is chained and shackled in a cage of worldly desires, it shall weep and suffer a lot. Lilly blooms up in spring, and gets withered in autumn. Spring for soul is spirituality and autumn for soul is materialistic desires, which are found most in scientific age.


Miserable condition of Woman

The woman is practised like sole of shoe since the time, she is ever limited till ceilings, caged in four walls, murdered for sake of honor, deprived of education, bereaved of due rights, victim of acid spree. Brides are burnt, enslaved, engraved, chocked, banned, chained, sold in dark of nights, for rapist and lusty men she is like an innocent sheep among dogs, foxes and wolves and she has ever bore and tolerated torments, tensions, tragedies and tortures. Is the woman born for miseries?


I am not professional writer but many CSPs and Seniors have given quite good remarks.

You can understand a lot by these two Introductions.

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Thesis statement in the outline, u mran to say give the reference of thesis statement in outline like this Introduction 1. Muslim population comprising 2/3rd of world's total population. 2. Despite enormous potential — Muslim world lags behind in all spheres of life. 3. Thesis statement leading to conclusion.

It is a good way, indeed.

hey samia here is example i can't write same thing again you can open this link for example
http://www.cssforum.com.pk/css-compu...tml#post467399
and again thesis statement is written just to give an expression after outline when you will start your essay then can put anywhere you like it to be i tried it and got good score and my friends too . Zohaib was right all matters is how you deal with it you can put it any where but my point was to write it in outline but in main body you can twist it and can write it where you want to and again all buddies this thesis statement might not be digestive to few as we always have 3-4-5 theories regarding everything even a person without outline got 62 and a person with outline got 36 so it all depends on expression , vocab , symmetry , punctuation , simplicity and relevance .
samia zohaib is right avoid such kind of things in the start stay to the point in the start and then can divert to other things by linking them just don't jump from one point to another without making a connection stay blessed

@ Shah and zuhaib
thanx a lot. well I was thinking to go for some creativity but if this is risky ofcourse one has to avoid it.
@ all
is it important to have the correlation between the lenght of introduction and conclusion? e.g if my introduction is about one and a half page then conclusion should be of this much length or there is no hard and fast rule?
Moreover, conclusion can be closed with a quotation??

yes there is no hard and fast rule you can conclude your easy in 2 to 3 paragraphs , but it's a suggestion don't conclude in just one paragraph of 4-5 lines no correlation is needed between intro and conclusion
and yes you can conclude on quotation thumbs up from my side

ok one another thing:
I practiced some essays for c.e 2012 but topics were selected randomly and now i want to focus on practice of about 10 to 15 essays which all must be systematic in nature. means i want such broad areas for essays whose practice make me able to write in paper with relevant qoutations, verses etc.