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Growing Population is a threat to stable and prosperous Pakistan.

1- Introduction.

2- Facts about population explosion
a- Global Facts
b- Regional Facts
c- Local Facts.

3- Causes of Growth in Population:
a- Lack of seriousness of politicians to address the sensitive issue.
b- Desire of male child.
c- Misrepresentation of Islamic teachings.
d- Illiteracy.
e-Increase in birth rate and decrease in death rate due to advacement in science.
f- Conservative attitude towards Contraceptives.

4- Implications of Population bomb :-
a-Pressure on land.
b-Double digit Inflation rate.
c- Unemployment.
d- Sub standard of living.
e- Poor management.
f- Increase in illiteracy rate.
g- Increase in Crime rates.
h- Environmental degradation.

5- Suggestions to Cope the hazards of population explosion:-

a- Govt should make efforts to control population.
b- Ulemas should issue fatwas that family planning programs are not against Islam.
c- Campaigns should be arranged to aware the common man.
d- Encourage the woman to use birth control pills.

6- Conclusion.

Introduction :-

Population Explosion is nothing but a curse which is damaging the development of a country. Rapid Growth in population is a threat to a stable and a prosperous Pakistan. Population is considered as an asset but it tends to be a burden when it increases exponentially. Population in Pakistan is increasing at a rate of 2.57 percent per annum. Pakistan is experiencing an unwanted growth. The chief factor behind population explosion is the non seriousness of politicians to comprehend the serious implications of growing population. The desire of a male child,misrepresentation of Islamic teachings and lack of awareness among society are important factors that are leading towards explosion of population bomb. There are serious implications of rapid growth of population. It affects the socioeconomic conditions of the country. Unemployment,inflation,sub-substandard of living and environmental degradation are the outcomes of exponential growth of population. It is the need of hour that govt should take concrete steps to address the serious threat that is hurdle in the growth of a country. Only sincere and dedicated efforts are needed to overcome the dragon of overpopulation.


Please members give me marks. And Shakeel bhai I want to be a part of this group . This will INshaa ALLAh leads us to the roads of success. Please mark my mistakes specially the grammatical one. Please comment on the relevancy, sequence as well as on the clarity of my essay because credit will be given on these parameters. Thanks for starting this thread.
You are welcome dear in this group. Indeed, it will be a highly beneficial and effective exercise.

Your attempt is commendable. As per my knowledge, there is no grammatical mistake. Sequence is quite well. And you have tried to write to the point. This is good. All points which you mentioned in 'consequences of the population explosion' are relevant. Overall a nice effort. Just keep it up. I am giving you 55/100

Please do check my outline and highlight the shortcomings. Besides, all members are requested to send their attempts. InshAllah, very soon we shall be dealing with another topic.

Dear Aliahashmat, I want you to attempt this essay. We genuinely need you here in this group to be an inspiration for us.

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Growing Population is a threat to stable and prosperous Pakistan.

1- Introduction.

2- Facts about population explosion
a- Global Facts
b- Regional Facts
c- Local Facts.

3- Causes of Growth in Population:
a- Lack of seriousness of politicians to address the sensitive issue.
b- Desire of male child.
c- Misrepresentation of Islamic teachings.
d- Illiteracy.
e-Increase in birth rate and decrease in death rate due to advacement in science.
f- Conservative attitude towards Contraceptives.

4- Implications of Population bomb :-
a-Pressure on land.
b-Double digit Inflation rate.
c- Unemployment.
d- Sub standard of living.
e- Poor management.
f- Increase in illiteracy rate.
g- Increase in Crime rates.
h- Environmental degradation.

5- Suggestions to Cope the hazards of population explosion:-

a- Govt should make efforts to control population.
b- Ulemas should issue fatwas that family planning programs are not against Islam.
c- Campaigns should be arranged to aware the common man.
d- Encourage the woman to use birth control pills.

6- Conclusion.

Introduction :-

Population Explosion is nothing but a curse which is damaging the development of a country. Rapid Growth in population is a threat to a stable and a prosperous Pakistan. Population is considered as an asset but it tends to be a burden when it increases exponentially. Population in Pakistan is increasing at a rate of 2.57 percent per annum. Pakistan is experiencing an unwanted growth. The chief factor behind population explosion is the non seriousness of politicians to comprehend the serious implications of growing population. The desire of a male child,misrepresentation of Islamic teachings and lack of awareness among society are important factors that are leading towards explosion of population bomb. There are serious implications of rapid growth of population. It affects the socioeconomic conditions of the country. Unemployment,inflation,sub-substandard of living and environmental degradation are the outcomes of exponential growth of population. It is the need of hour that govt should take concrete steps to address the serious threat that is hurdle in the growth of a country. Only sincere and dedicated efforts are needed to overcome the dragon of overpopulation.


Please members give me marks. And Shakeel bhai I want to be a part of this group . This will INshaa ALLAh leads us to the roads of success. Please mark my mistakes specially the grammatical one. Please comment on the relevancy, sequence as well as on the clarity of my essay because credit will be given on these parameters. Thanks for starting this thread.
You are welcome dear in this group. Indeed, it will be a highly beneficial and effective exercise.

Your attempt is commendable. As per my knowledge, there is no grammatical mistake. Sequence is quite well. And you have tried to write to the point. This is good. All points which you mentioned in 'consequences of the population explosion' are relevant. Overall a nice effort. I am giving you 55/100

Please do check my outline and highlight the shortcomings. Besides, all members are requested to send their attempts. InshAllah, very soon we shall be dealing with another topic.

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Introduction
(a) definition of population
(b) population growth/ over population

Population growth inpakistan
(a) birth rate
(b) death rate
(c) annual growth rate
(d) Urbanisation

causes of rapid growth of population
(a) Illiteracy
(b) Early marriages
(c) Religious Beliefs
(d) Strong desire for sons
(e) Lack of awareness
(f) Customs and traditions

Growing population and economic stability
1. Meaning of stability and prosperity

2. Factors responsible for economic stability and development
(a) Education facility
(b) Human resources
(c) Better living standard
(d) basic health and educational facilities

3.Impact of over population on prosperity
(a) Unemployment
(b) Lack of basic facilities
(c) poverty
(d) low per capita income
(e) inflation
(f) Voilation of rules and regulations
(g) low living standard

Remidies
(a) Awareness of family planning
(b) launch population welfare programs
(c) Education
(d) rise marriage age

Conclusion

kindly check my outline and point out weaknesses
Nice attempt. You have mentioned almost relevant points; and tried to maintain a balance. However, I think the definition of population is not necessary as a heading to mention in introduction. Moreover, you should also write introduction of essay so that we can justify to some extent your stance on the issue. You deserve 50/100. Just keep it up. We shall soon send another essay topic. I think that it is good if you check others' essays as well and point out mistakes and suggest them useful things.

Besides, all members who are taking part in this endeavor should give their useful suggestions so that we can achieve best out of our efforts.

Why seniors and other prestigious members are not guiding us in this effort and encouraging us by taking part in it? Are we doing something which is but a waste of time having no appreciable outcome?

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Why seniors and other prestigious members are not guiding us in this effort and encouraging us by taking part in it? Are we doing something which is but a waste of time having no appreciable outcome?
I really appreciate your effort.
but you didn't reply when I told you my opinion?
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In 'effects of discipline', I tried to explain how good discipline can be a source of prosperity for a nation that is why I confined myself to describe its effects on national level. And indeed, effects of discipline are always positive. In the very next heading I mentioned how the lack of discipline can lead a nation towards disaster. I may be wrong.. Thanx for your generous attempt to highlight flaws in my outline.
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In 'effects of discipline', I tried to explain how good discipline can be a source of prosperity for a nation that is why I confined myself to describe its effects on national level. And indeed, effects of discipline are always positive. In the very next heading I mentioned how the lack of discipline can lead a nation towards disaster. I may be wrong.. Thanx for your generous attempt to highlight flaws in my outline.
Effects always negative and positive.
every picture is not good, many people say good and many negate
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Effects always negative and positive.
every picture is not good, many people say good and many negate
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I am not able to assess your essay but, I'll put my thoughts in your thread to assess my abilities.
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sir your introduction is brilliant, but outline is tipsy-and-curvy.if you put your outline accordingly, you will be credited... i hope you understand. And I'll upload my essay and outline sooner or later.........
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Dear introduction is the most important part of essay. It provides reader with a window through which he can peep into your entire essay and foresee its worthiness . This is not to say that other parts of essay do not have any importance. Indeed, they have. But the introduction holds a special position in your entire essay. If it is balanced, fascinating and thought-provoking; it will possibly leave a good impression on the mind of reader, and he will possibly feel an urge to read your entire attempt. If it is below average, something contrary to the preceding line would be a case. Now, question arises as to how one can write an appropriate introduction? You can write an introduction starting with thesis statement and later on including gist of all the important points which you are going to mention in detail in the body of essay.

Another way of writing an introduction is to make thesis statement which will be followed by all the important points which you deem necessary. In my above attempt I have adopted this method. First, I made a thesis statement: 'Population is growing and it is a threat to our prosperity'. In later lines of my introduction I tried to just throw light on this statement.

Thesis statement is the central point around which your whole essay revolves. It reflects your point of view regarding an issue and You have to make this statement in the beginning of your essay. In the later part of your essay, you just have to put arguments and examples in order to support you point of view. For example, if you are going to write an essay on the war on terror. Your thesis statement will be one of two categories. If you are in favor of this war you would probably make a statement in the very beginning of your essay which will show your point of view regarding that issue. If you are oppose to this you will make thesis statement accordingly. In both cases you will have to put forward the arguments in the later part of your essay that could support your standpoint on the issue.

What to be written after introduction depends largely on the nature of essay. Most of the essays are written in the same order i.e after introduction one has to highlight current scenario, causes, consequences, suggestions and conclusion. In few others, it is necessary to adopt a different course. The skills of how to justify that there is a need of adopting that 'other way' are acquired largely as a result of practice and determined efforts. We are making an effort here to improve our essay skills and acquire useful knowledge of essay writing. You will be cordially welcomed, if you join our group.
Excellent answer sir, thanx for helping me.
Sir I shall be highly obliged to you if you are not frustrated by my questions. Believe me , I am not challenging you , I am a beginner, I want to clear my ambiguities.
Dear you mentioned that thesis statement should be written in beginning of the introduction. Does It mean that essay should be started with the thesis statement?
I want to know that thesis statement could be written at the end of introduction?
Moreover is it appropriate to define a topic in introduction?
If not ,where it should be defined?
Is it appropriate to define it in current scenario
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Excellent answer sir, thanx for helping me.
Sir I shall be highly obliged to you if you are not frustrated by my questions. Believe me , I am not challenging you , I am a beginner, I want to clear my ambiguities.
Dear you mentioned that thesis statement should be written in beginning of the introduction. Does It mean that essay should be started with the thesis statement?
I want to know that thesis statement could be written at the end of introduction?
Moreover is it appropriate to define a topic in introduction?
If not ,where it should be defined?
Is it appropriate to define it in current scenario
As I said that thesis statement reflects your point of view regarding that issue, so according to me it is necessary to write it in the very beginning of essay. However, your entire introduction can be considered as a thesis statement if it depicts a clear notion of what stance would you adapt in the later part of your essay. So, one should not worry much about thesis statement if he knows how to start an essay.
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You are welcome. We shall certainly benefit from your contributions here.

This is the topic for essay. Seniors and other members are requested to take part in this practice.

Plight of women and moves for their “empowerment”.

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