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plz comment and critics ..

.my first attempt on forum to write any start
to me women had made sufficient rather they have made more progress than man in pakistan ...then i am not wrong...so status of women in pakistan is much more better and it is improving day by day....who could have imagined a girl fighting a war plane in pakistan and being trained in pakistan military academy....but these are real happenings....
.....on the other hAND this status have been achieved thru a series of sacrifices and bloodshed by the women in almost evey part of the country ...they still are but the amount has been reduced sufficiently..............to be continued

Overall your attempt is good.

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A very nice attempt. I have found clarity and coherence in your writing. Moreover, you have hit only the relevant and most crucial points. Your expression is also praiseworthy. Just keep it up.

There is no doubt that attitudes are changing and the rights of women are being given much more importance than ever before. But this does not negate the reality as to gender-based discrimination still lingers in our society; and would take a rigorous and extensive effort for being thwarted altogether.

plz luk it this way......
But unfortunately, women in Pakistan live in a world which is structured by strict religious, family and tribal customs. They are subjected to discrimination on a daily basis. They face various forms of violence in every aspect of life. The chief factor behind the brutality against women in Pakistan is the economic dependence of woman on man.
lines from ur start.....
now see u define the structure of the society and religion comes first.....then family and then tribal.....well discrimination is associated with every citizen of pakistan on a large scale.....violence ...brutality.....and the factor is economic dependence of women...let me tell u my brother ...economic dependence of woman is a ruin not only to the family but to the country overall.....they are supposed to go in the same way they are created....i am not agianst women rights ...but the presentation of the issue is not done in a good manner....the loyalty of pakistani women is undoudetley the best in the world...the need of the hour is to understand the demands and responibilites of relation of man and women.....

Definately,
you people are doing great job for all aspirant especially for new comer. I am pleased!

All respected members, especially aimen khakwani, Ahmed faisal, nosheen bukhari, sidra ameen, isha saeed are highly requested to check my attempt and to point out my mistakes. Your sincere efforts to highlight my shortcomings and give me useful suggestions are helping me to improve myself more than my expectations.

Energy crisis in Pakistan..

1-Introduction
a. Meaning of energy
b. Its relationship with progress of a country
c, Energy crisis in Pakistan

2-Energy crisis in Pakistan (present situation)
a. Acute shortage of energy
b. Low generation of electricity
c. Shortage of gas
d. Hike in oil prices
c. wide gape between supply and demand

3-Reasons of energy crisis
a. Lack of political will
b. Poor management of resources
c. Over-reliance upon renewable energy
d. Shortage of gases and oils
e. Economic hurdles
f. Circular debt
g. Rapid urbanization
h. Power theft
i. Distribution and transmission loses
j. Increase in demand
k. Lack of planning and research
l. Less work on exploration of new hidden energy reserves
m. Lack of accountability

4-Consequences of energy crises
a. Low and sluggish economic growth
b. Poor standards of living
c. Industrial stagnation
d. Transportation problems
e. Trade deficit
d. Inflation
e. Unrest and turmoil.
f. Increase in poverty and unemployment
g. Psychological collapse

5-Solutions/suggestions
a. Adequate management of resources
b. Recovery of circular debt
c. Installation of new power plants
d. Repairing of transmission and distribution units
e. More reliance on renewable resources of energy
f. Construction of new dams
g. Appropriate utilization of Thar coal
h. Exploration of new energy reserves
i. Crackdown on power theft
j. Political consensus
k. Check and balance in industries

6-Conclusion

Introduction
Energy is an engine of social and economic development of a country. No country can get success without it. It plays a pivotal role for industrial and many other processes. Hence, it goes without saying that all those nations are developed which have more energy resources and a technology to convert their resources into useful form. Sadly, in Pakistan we are suffering from worse crisis of energy. It has made our lives miserable and impeded the economic growth of country. This unfortunate reality notwithstanding, the energy crisis is completely a curable ailment. We do have all resources to deal with this ongoing challenge which has put the development of country on back burner. But what is lacking is rational, result-oriented and realistic policy which can enable those at the helm of affairs to manage the existing resources in the best possible manner. Someone in this regard has rightly said that 'Pakistan is not a poor country but poorly managed country'. Admittedly, all of this is not a result of mindless decision-making at the top, but a number of other genuine factors are also responsible for this sorry state of affairs. Lack of technology, corruption, unsystematic urbanization, political instability, lack of coordination among institutions are few of those causes which have pushed us in this current unrest. There is a dire need of realizing that the true prosperity and progress of country lies in having adequate energy.

First of all, your attempt is good brother.
secondly, after intro you start with energy crisis in pakistan which I don't like because it is topic of essay.
you wrote in causes of energy crisis, over reliance of renewable enery
and in suggestions you write more reliance on renewable energy sources, i couldn't get your point kindly elaborate this point. kindly tell me how energy shortage effect on transportation.
i think, gas and oil create problems in this regard.
how gas and oil are responsible of energy shortage?
Thank You.

Dear I said that there should be adequate management of resources which simply means both renewable and non-renewable resources. Moreover, this is only the one point of my suggestions portion. There are many other points which I mentioned as a part of solution to deal with this problem.

Energy shortage certainly effect transportation as it effects other aspects of life. Energy crisis does not mean the crisis of electricity. It contains a number of other aspects as well such as shortage of gas and other fuels. And indeed transportation relies on fuel. Don't you see the long queues of vehicles waiting for their number on cng stations??

Gas and oils are the sources of energy. And their shortage is clearly the cause of energy crisis..

Dear I said that there should be adequate management of resources which simply means both renewable and non-renewable resources. Moreover, this is only the one point of my suggestions portion. There are many other points which I mentioned as a part of solution to deal with this problem.

Energy shortage certainly effect transportation as it effects other aspects of life. Energy crisis does not only mean the crisis of electricity, but it also contains a number of other aspects as well such as shortage of gas and other fuels. And indeed transportation relies on fuel. Don't you see the long queues of vehicles waiting for their number on cng stations??

Gas and oils are the sources of energy. And their shortage is clearly the cause of energy crisis..

nice effort sir
shakeel brother would you plesae mention your thesis statement in your introduction

kindly seniors and all members chk my essay outline and introduction and provide recommendatiosn..thnks
1. Power of media in 21st century
2. Powerful weapon of the modern world.
3. Backbone of social, political and cultural changes.
4. Commendable role in war on terror
5. Constitutional provisions and guarantees.
6. Constituents of freedom of press.
7. Functions of media/ Contribution of strong media towards society:
 Education for the masses
 Awareness about world scenario, fundamental rights and duties.
 Opinion formation related to social, political, economic & religious issues
 Companies Advertisement and Campaign
 Ensures public participation in government's policies.
 Freedom of expression
 Promotion of democracy by inculcating political awareness in masses.
 Instrumental in promoting national integration
 A great source of entertainment

8. Factors contributing to the emergence of a vibrant media
 Sustained struggle by journalistic community.
 Vehement support of civil society.
 Sound financial position of media groups.
 Tremendous advancements in technological sphere

9. Unjustified use of power by media.
 Sentimental approach on sensitive issues
 Preference to commercial interests over national ones.
 Partisan role of media houses
 Making wedge between Islam and the west wide

10. Freedom of press in Pakistan
 Semi-independent press owing to punctuated democracy
 Role of military regimes from Ayub Khan to Zia Ul Haq
11. Current scenario in Pakistan over the last decade
 PEMRA 2001...martial law regime 2001
 Mushroom growth of private TV channels
 Role of media in promulgation of emergency...3rd November 2007
 PRO, under emergency

12. Challenges / hurdles before Pakistan's media

 Illiterate population...Lack of interest/ awareness
 Political instability
 Indifferent attitude of the masses towards the policies of the government.
 Shortage of funds/ resources
 Political interference

13. Suggestions for desirable use of power of media.
 A well thought out self made code of conduct by media organizations
 Enhanced role of the editorship
 Recruitment of only properly trained journalists
 Ethics of journalism/ press to be followed.
 Strive for national integration
 Impartial / unbiased analysis
 Avoid exaggeration
 Avoid obscenity / vulgarity
 Depiction of Pakistan's true culture and history
 Promotion of social, ethical and moral values
 Projection of softer image of government's policies
 Maintenance of public confidence
 Promotion of Quaid's vision and ideology of Pakistan
Napoleon said:”Even a single newspaper is stronger than thousand of guns” The twentieth century is the dawn of media. Basically there are two types of media, Electronic Media and Print Media. Both have their own areas of exercise. Before the monopoly of electronic media, print media had the same monopoly which it has lost now. Newspapers had been around for a long time, but cannot deliver as powerful a message as photography, radio and film. With photography, people finally got to see what others across the world looked like. With few means of communication, everyone assumed the rest of the world was all the same. In Electronic Media there are different types like Television, Radio, VCR, Tape Recorder and the Internet. Media enjoys a tremendous power in modern world and its role in the dispensation of its duties largely remains admirable. Sustained struggle by journalistic community, financial position of media groups, tremendous advancements in technological sphere, support for civil society, political analysis, economic debate, social awareness and religious clarification build its importance multifold. Media become custodian(guardian) of fundamental human right, Influential in policy making process by governmental authorities, promotion of democracy by inculcating political awareness in masses, commendable role in war on terror, instrumental in promoting national integration, great source of entertainment.+(Suggestion) A well thought out self made code of conduct by media organizations, enhanced role of the editorship, recruitment of only properly trained journalists would make it more powerful. Media is regarded as the most powerful weapon of 21st century. It is often said that world has become a global village. It is power of media that has shrunk the distances between different parts of the world

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