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Extremism and militancy in our society-Its Causes And Remedies
1.Introduction
1.Historical background
2.Kinds of extremism
*religious
*political
*ethnical
*econmical What kind of extremism is this? if you are linking it with materializm then , thats totally irrelevant)
3.Incidents Of Violent Extremism
*Malala yousufzai shooting attack
*gruesome attacks at public venues and holy places
*violence for polio vaccination
*violence at political rallies
4.Causes
*brain washing
*feudalism
*involvement of foreign powers
*proliferation of military operation
*misconception of jihad
*unemployment and poverty
*illiteracy and social injustice
5.Pragmatic Measures
*Implication of UNO resolution
*religion-science based madrassas
*To provide national security and good governance
*Flourish social justice
6.Militancy Groups
7.Causes Of Rise Of Militancy
*excess use of nuclear weapon
*religious tool
*vacant of Government security
*proliferation of militant groups
*bad governance*social unrest
8.Remedies
*impose law and order
*investigate allegations and power and arrest of militant
*enhance national security
*Intelligence agencies should play vital role
9.Conclusion
Pakistan is now regarded as the country of blood stream and violence. Pakistan is condemned as barbaric act of extremism and militancy(Grammatically wrong, I did not get it, so unable to correct it) . Extremism got power in the time of(not needed, regime and time , both are same thing) General Zia-ul-Haq regime. The biggest threat in our society is Religious Extremism. The scourage of extremism and militancy has bite (and what does that mean? grammatically wrong,did no't get the meaning so unable to correct)during Ashura and the Malala yousuf zai attack respectively. During election days(coma, because there are two parts of sentences like" during election and militants group create........ so put coma to make them apart.) militant groups create violence and fear by exploding at political rallies and election offices. The rise of extremism and militancy are especially in the name of Islam.(?) The root causes are involvement of foreign power, brain washing(whom brain washing? specify it, reader might not be pakistani), bad governance, misconception of jihad and iliteracy. As Salman Rushdie quotes, "Fundamentalism isn't about religion, it's about power". They promotes (promote)extremism; used religion as a tool to gain power through military. To eradicate such violence and fear in our society to lead out from domsday.(uffff very confusing, as well as grammatically wrong) There must be some pragmatic steps need;(needed) awareness of religious knowledge, remove iliteracy(illiteracy) which aggravates( its a negative word and its more than likely that reader will link this negative word to all other good points you mentioned as a suggestion. so use positive word with suggestions only) social unrest and violence. There must be special training for Talibans to remove brain washing of miserable people in the Religious Institutes.(confusing sentence, unable to digest) UNO should implicates resolution of International affairs and disputes. Government (must)also play their due role by providing national security; impose law and order for militant groups.
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Outlines are good, but ........... the introduction was very very confusing, again, every piece of sentence was wandering here and there, and to the major extent, i was unable to understand it. Here are few examples

There must be special training for Talibans [B][COLOR="Black"]to remove brain washing of miserable people in the Religious Institutes.

Pakistan is condemned as barbaric act of extremism and militancy

To eradicate such violence and fear in our society to lead out from domsday.

now almost in all of above mentioned sentences, there is no proper linkage between parts of sentence. No punctuation.

Again i will strongly suggest you , do not use difficult words. Just write your thoughts in simple plane English. Sooner you will be able to handle complex sentences.

Remember simple but correct essay can satisfy reader about 50% but complex but confusing essay will make the mater even more worse.

Just write simple, donot copy other members style as you are making your writing even more worse by doing so.

I will be waiting for your next attempt. I hope i will be facing simple but logical attempt from you .. Best of luck
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Extremism and militancy in our society-Its Causes And Remedies

1-INTRODUCTION

2-WHAT IS EXTREMISM (simply I will have to define it that extremism are the people who are anti-state elements and working for their wasted interests)

3-ISLAM'S RESPONSE TO EXTREMISM (Islam does not support extremism; according to Holdy Qur'an, Hadith and Ulemas Extremism is not allowed in Islam)

4-WHAT DOES DO EXTREMIST & WHO ARE THEY?
a-They destroy wealth and lives for their own wrested interests
b-Different ways to cause terror as bombing, killing
c-Gaining political motives
d-To escalate religious and ethnic differences
f-Extremist may be national and international

5-CAUSES OF EXTREMISM & MILITANCY
I-I. Internal Causes
a) Socio-Economic Causes
i) Injustice:
ii) Illiteracy:
iii) Poverty And Unemployment:
iv) Food Insecurity:
v) Dissatisfaction:

b) Political Causes:
i) Non-Democratic Set-Up:
ii) Improper Government Set-Up
iii) Absence Of Law And Failure Of Law Enforcement Agencies:

c) Religious Causes:
i) Role Of Madrassahs:
ii) Religious Intolerance:

II. External Causes
a) Afghan War: 1979
b) Iranian Revolution:
c) War on Terrorism: 9/11

6- FACTORS BOOSTING EXTREMISM:
a) Anti-Terrorism Campaign And Drone Strikes:
b) Negligence of Government:
c) Persecution of Innocent Muslims in Kashmir and Palestine:

7- Steps Taken By Pakistan:
a) Ban On Terrorist Organizations
b) Operation Rah-E-Nijat
c) Operation Rah-E-Rast

8- SEVERE IMPACT OF EXTREMISM :


a) Civilian Loss

b) Economic Cost Of Terrorism:
i) Agriculture Loss:
ii) Manufacturing Cost:
iii) Declining Foreign Direct Investment:
iv) Diminishing Tourism:
v) Internally Displaced People/internal Migration

c) Social Unrest: (Social problems increase i.e. theft, target kiling etc

d) Political Impacts: (derailing democracy

e) Far reaching Psychological Impacts: (suicide, people are becoming psychological patients

f) Religious Impacts: (Molvi sahibans palying a pivotal role in it


9-SUGGESTIONS
a)Peaceful resolution of political disputes: Kashmir and Palestine and Afghanistan
b) Stop state extremism
c) Deterring states from sponsoring extremism
d) End of USA double standard
e) Un should be reinforced and strengthen
f) IMF, WB , ABD ,WTO should be restructured
g) Policy of engagement and negotiation
h) Will to eradicate extremism
i) Regional approach
j) To eliminate extremsim sources of income
k) Unemployment and poverty elimination
l) Improvement of quality education
m) Review of law and order situation
n)Role of media should be widen

10-CONCLUSINO


"Pappa Papppa talk to me", says a little boy with tears in his eyes but his father can't answer because he is no more owing to an act of extremists; drone attack and killing of many innocent people; young girl is kidnapped rapped and killed. Extremists and terrorists are killing innocent ulemas, politicians, stake holders and common citizens awfully in the name of targeted killing for their wasted interests. On the one hand luxury lives of political actors like kings and queens of dreamworld and on the other hand a young hungry girl looking for food in the trash of a famous fast food restaurant to quench the fire of her hunger and a boy with dirty hands working in a garage to fulfill the basic needs of his poor family. An unending queue of humans with dead bodies on road ready to kill or be killed' protesting and suddenly an other exclusive and live footage of a bomb blast showing flesh and blood everywhere and per-planned talk shows of political actors on pity issues and laughing after that. This is neither a trailer of an action movie nor an excerpt from a novel. This is a true picture of world's Seventh Nuclear Power, one of the richest countries in coal and gas reserves-Pakistan, which is facing extremism and militancy's problem in our society.


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Extremism and militancy in our society-Its Causes And Remedies

1-INTRODUCTION

2-WHAT IS EXTREMISM (simply I will have to define it that extremism are the people who are anti-state elements and working for their wasted interests)

3-ISLAM'S RESPONSE TO EXTREMISM (Islam does not support extremism; according to Holdy Qur'an, Hadith and Ulemas Extremism is not allowed in Islam)

4-WHAT DOES DO EXTREMIST & WHO ARE THEY?
a-They destroy wealth and lives for their own wrested interests
b-Different ways to cause terror as bombing, killing
c-Gaining political motives
d-To escalate religious and ethnic differences
f-Extremist may be national and international

5-CAUSES OF EXTREMISM & MILITANCY
I-I. Internal Causes
a) Socio-Economic Causes
i) Injustice:
ii) Illiteracy:
iii) Poverty And Unemployment:
iv) Food Insecurity:
v) Dissatisfaction:

b) Political Causes:
i) Non-Democratic Set-Up:
ii) Improper Government Set-Up
iii) Absence Of Law And Failure Of Law Enforcement Agencies:

c) Religious Causes:
i) Role Of Madrassahs:
ii) Religious Intolerance:

II. External Causes
a) Afghan War: 1979
b) Iranian Revolution:
c) War on Terrorism: 9/11

6- FACTORS BOOSTING EXTREMISM:
a) Anti-Terrorism Campaign And Drone Strikes:
b) Negligence of Government:
c) Persecution of Innocent Muslims in Kashmir and Palestine:

7- Steps Taken By Pakistan:
a) Ban On Terrorist Organizations
b) Operation Rah-E-Nijat
c) Operation Rah-E-Rast

8- SEVERE IMPACT OF EXTREMISM :
u should mention all of these in above heading of causes)

a) Civilian Loss

b) Economic Cost Of Terrorism:
i) Agriculture Loss:
ii) Manufacturing Cost:
iii) Declining Foreign Direct Investment:
iv) Diminishing Tourism:
v) Internally Displaced People/internal Migration

c) Social Unrest: (Social problems increase i.e. theft, target kiling etc

d) Political Impacts: (derailing democracy

e) Far reaching Psychological Impacts: (suicide, people are becoming psychological patients

f) Religious Impacts: (Molvi sahibans palying a pivotal role in it


9-SUGGESTIONS
a)Peaceful resolution of political disputes: Kashmir and Palestine and Afghanistan
b) Stop state extremism
c) Deterring states from sponsoring extremism
d) End of USA double standard
e) Un should be reinforced and strengthen
f) IMF, WB , ABD ,WTO should be restructured
g) Policy of engagement and negotiation
h) Will to eradicate extremism (this point is irrelevant because
u mention all suggestions for this purpose)
i) Regional approach
j) To eliminate extremsim sources of income
k) Unemployment and poverty elimination
l) Improvement of quality education
m) Review of law and order situation
n)Role of media should be widen

10-CONCLUSION


"Pappa Papppa talk to me", says a little boy with tears in his eyes but his father can't answer because he is no more owing to an act of extremists; drone attack and killing of many innocent people; young girl is kidnapped rapped and killed. Extremists and terrorists are killing innocent ulemas, politicians, stake holders and common citizens awfully in the name of targeted killing for their wasted interests. On the one hand luxury lives of political actors like kings and queens of dreamworld and on the other hand a young hungry girl looking for food in the trash of a famous fast food restaurant to quench the fire of her hunger and a boy with dirty hands working in a garage to fulfill the basic needs of his poor family. An unending queue of humans with dead bodies on road ready to kill or be killed' protesting and suddenly an other exclusive and live footage of a bomb blast showing flesh and blood everywhere and p(e)re-planned talk shows of political actors on pity issues and laughing after that. This is neither a trailer of an action movie nor an excerpt from a novel. This is a true picture of world's Seventh Nuclear Power, one of the richest countries in coal and gas reserves-Pakistan, which is facing extremism and militancy's problem in our society.


All active and new members are highly requested to take out my mistakes and check it out in detail, I will highly be thankful to you...Thanks...
( you should mention militancy groups then its causes. Well nice effort but your major focus only extremist. I have check ur attempt which i knew about this topic. Thanks
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Extremism and militancy in our society-Its Causes And Remedies

1-INTRODUCTION

2-WHAT IS EXTREMISM (simply I will have to define it that extremism are the people who are anti-state elements and working for their wasted interests)

3-ISLAM'S RESPONSE TO EXTREMISM (Islam does not support extremism; according to Holdy Qur'an, Hadith and Ulemas Extremism is not allowed in Islam)

4-WHAT DOES DO EXTREMIST & WHO ARE THEY?
a-They destroy wealth and lives for their own wrested interests
b-Different ways to cause terror as bombing, killing
c-Gaining political motives
d-To escalate religious and ethnic differences
f-Extremist may be national and international

5-CAUSES OF EXTREMISM & MILITANCY
I-I. Internal Causes
a) Socio-Economic Causes
i) Injustice:
ii) Illiteracy:
iii) Poverty And Unemployment:
iv) Food Insecurity:
v) Dissatisfaction:

b) Political Causes:
i) Non-Democratic Set-Up:
ii) Improper Government Set-Up
iii) Absence Of Law And Failure Of Law Enforcement Agencies:

c) Religious Causes:
i) Role Of Madrassahs:
ii) Religious Intolerance:

II. External Causes
a) Afghan War: 1979
b) Iranian Revolution:
c) War on Terrorism: 9/11

6- FACTORS BOOSTING EXTREMISM:
a) Anti-Terrorism Campaign And Drone Strikes:
b) Negligence of Government:
c) Persecution of Innocent Muslims in Kashmir and Palestine:

7- Steps Taken By Pakistan:
a) Ban On Terrorist Organizations
b) Operation Rah-E-Nijat
c) Operation Rah-E-Rast

8- SEVERE IMPACT OF EXTREMISM :


a) Civilian Loss

b) Economic Cost Of Terrorism:
i) Agriculture Loss:
ii) Manufacturing Cost:
iii) Declining Foreign Direct Investment:
iv) Diminishing Tourism:
v) Internally Displaced People/internal Migration

c) Social Unrest: (Social problems increase i.e. theft, target kiling etc

d) Political Impacts: (derailing democracy

e) Far reaching Psychological Impacts: (suicide, people are becoming psychological patients

f) Religious Impacts: (Molvi sahibans palying a pivotal role in it


9-SUGGESTIONS
a)Peaceful resolution of political disputes: Kashmir and Palestine and Afghanistan
b) Stop state extremism
c) Deterring states from sponsoring extremism
d) End of USA double standard
e) Un should be reinforced and strengthen
f) IMF, WB , ABD ,WTO should be restructured
g) Policy of engagement and negotiation
h) Will to eradicate extremism
i) Regional approach
j) To eliminate extremsim sources of income
k) Unemployment and poverty elimination
l) Improvement of quality education
m) Review of law and order situation
n)Role of media should be widen

10-CONCLUSINO


"Pappa Papppa talk to me", says a little boy with tears in his eyes but his father can't answer because he is no more owing to an act of extremists; drone attack and killing of many innocent people; young girl is kidnapped rapped and killed. Extremists and terrorists are killing innocent ulemas, politicians, stake holders and common citizens awfully in the name of targeted killing for their wasted interests. On the one hand(coma) luxury lives of political actors( luxury life style is much better, bu still this whole sentence needs proper puntuation) like kings and queens of dreamworld( (?) and on the other hand a young hungry girl looking for food in the trash of a famous fast food restaurant to quench the fire of her hunger and a boy with dirty hands working in a garage to fulfill the basic needs of his poor family. An unending queue of humans with dead bodies on road ready to kill or be killed' protesting and suddenly an other exclusive and live footage of a bomb blast showing flesh and blood everywhere and per-planned talk shows of political actors on pity issues and laughing after that. This is neither a trailer of an action movie nor an excerpt from a novel. This is a true picture of world's Seventh Nuclear Power, one of the richest countries in coal and gas reserves-Pakistan, which is facing extremism and militancy's problem in our society.


All active and new members are highly requested to take out my mistakes and check it out in detail, I will highly be thankful to you...Thanks...

Well, this time it was quite easy for me to understand you. It was really good to read that in fact. Your outlines are really well and organized. But still in one of your sentence, you never cared about punctuation, For instance "On the one hand luxury lives of political actors like kings and queens of dreamworld and on the other hand a young hungry girl looking for food in the trash of a famous fast food restaurant to quench the fire of her hunger and a boy with dirty hands working in a garage to fulfill the basic needs of his poor family. An unending queue of humans with dead bodies on road ready to kill or be killed' protesting and suddenly an other exclusive and live footage of a bomb blast showing flesh and blood everywhere and per-planned talk shows of political actors on pity issues and laughing after that.. This is longest sentences in English History, i must say. Remember in order to get reader continuous attention, never ever try to write lengthy sentences, and if you are doing it, then be extra careful about punctuation. If it is only about writing style, then today your's attempt was really good but do not you think you only depicted a worse situation of terrorism? . I didnot find any causes, remedies or suggestions in your introduction.
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Thanks for checking out my attempt, I try to mention current happenings, the reality of our society due to Extremism and militancy in my introduction. However, I think there is no need to mention causes, suggestions in introduction. In simple words, our introduction must be good enough to support our topic and it must be to the point. As far as causes and suggestions are concerned, after introduction we will have to write down its causes, effects and suggestions. As per my assumption it is not a suitable thing to mention each and every thing in our introduction. As sir shakeel said that we must be concise in our introduction. I request you to mention your assumption of introduction. What is needed in our introduction, please let me know I will highly be thankful to you.

Thanks again to check out my attempt in a detail, I will be looking forward to you for checking out my attempt in the upcoming essays. Thanks.

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( you should mention militancy groups then its causes. Well nice effort but your major focus only extremist. I have check ur attempt which i knew about this topic. Thanks

Firstly, I am really thankful to you for pinpointing my mistakes.
Secondly, Yes major problem is extremist. May be so far I am unable to get you. Please would let me know about 'militancy'. What does it means, and what should I had to mention for this topic. Thanks..
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Extremism and militancy in our society-Its Causes And Remedies
1.Introduction
1.Historical background
2.Kinds of extremism
*religious
*political
*ethnical
*econmical
3.Incidents Of Violent Extremism
*Malala yousufzai shooting attack
*gruesome attacks at public venues and holy places
*violence for polio vaccination
*violence at political rallies
4.Causes
*brain washing
*feudalism
*involvement of foreign powers
*proliferation of military operation
*misconception of jihad
*unemployment and poverty
*illiteracy and social injustice
5.Pragmatic Measures
*Implication of UNO resolution
*religion-science based madrassas
*To provide national security and good governance
*Flourish social justice
6.Militancy Groups
7.Causes Of Rise Of Militancy
*excess use of nuclear weapon
*religious tool
*vacant of Government security
*proliferation of militant groups
*bad governance*social unrest
8.Remedies
*impose law and order
*investigate allegations and power and arrest of militant
*enhance national security
*Intelligence agencies should play vital role
9.Conclusion
Pakistan is now regarded as the country of blood stream and violence. Pakistan is condemned as barbaric act of extremism and militancy. Extremism got power in the time of General Zia-ul-Haq regime. The biggest threat in our society is Religious Extremism. The scourage of extremism and militancy has bite during Ashura and the Malala yousuf zai attack respectively. During election days militant groups create violence and fear by exploding at political rallies and election offices. The rise of extremism and militancy are especially in the name of Islam. The root causes are involvement of foreign power, brain washing, bad governance, misconception of jihad and iliteracy. As Salman Rushdie quotes, "Fundamentalism isn't about religion, it's about power". They promotes extremism; used religion as a tool to gain power through military. To eradicate such violence and fear in our society to lead out from domsday. There must be some pragmatic steps need; awareness of religious knowledge, remove iliteracy which aggravates social unrest and violence. There must be special training for Talibans to remove brain washing of miserable people in the Religious Institutes. UNO should implicates resolution of International affairs and disputes. Government also play their due role by providing national security; impose law and order for militant groups.
Plz everyone check my attempt. Thanks

Overall its a nice attempt. Saqib Bangash has rightly pointed out some of your mistakes already. Try to be crystal clear in your ideas, and just play with words. You are doing good job. Keep it up. Thanks.

I request other brothers and sisters to attempt their essay. So that we can continue smoothly. Both Sir Shakeel and Faisal are highly requested to attempt their essay and please post new topic. Thanks.
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Extremism and militancy in our society-Its Causes And Remedies
1.Introduction
1.Historical background
2.Kinds of extremism
*religious
*political
*ethnical
*econmical
3.Incidents Of Violent Extremism
*Malala yousufzai shooting attack
*gruesome attacks at public venues and holy places
*violence for polio vaccination
*violence at political rallies
4.Causes
*brain washing (This is not a cause of extremism. This is a method through which extremist or militant elements do their job.)
*feudalism(Unjust/tyrant political system)
*involvement of foreign powers
*proliferation of military operation
*misconception of jihad
*unemployment and poverty
*illiteracy and social injustice
5.Pragmatic Measures
*Implication (Implementation) of UNO resolution
*religion-science based madrassas (Madrassah reforms)
*To provide national security and good governance
*Flourish social justice
6.Militancy Groups
7.Causes Of Rise Of Militancy (In the context of this topic i.e militancy and extremism in our society, you cannot separate the two. Both are the same. Extremism refers to considering one's own beliefs, thoughts and ideologies fair and legitimate to such an extent that he feels it good to harm others to urge them for thinking like him; while militancy refers to opposing the govt policies with the belief that they are against the interest of a particular segment of society or a sacred enitity/belief etc. Militants carry out violence and aggression to impose their own set of thoughts etc. on the govt and the rest of population. So, both terms are intimately connected to each other)
*excess use of nuclear weapon
*religious tool
*vacant of Government security
*proliferation of militant groups
*bad governance*social unrest
8.Remedies
*impose law and order
*investigate allegations and power and arrest of militant
*enhance national security
*Intelligence agencies should play vital role
9.Conclusion
Pakistan is now regarded as the country of blood stream and violence. Pakistan is condemned as barbaric act of extremism and militancy [are rampant here]. Extremism got power in the time of General Zia-ul-Haq regime. The biggest threat in (to) our society is Religious Extremism. The scourage of extremism and militancy has bite during Ashura and the Malala yousuf zai attack respectively. During election days militant groups create violence and fear by exploding [bombs] at political rallies and election offices. The rise of extremism and militancy are especially in the name of Islam. The root causes are involvement of foreign power, brain washing, bad governance, misconception of jihad and iliteracy. As Salman Rushdie quotes, "Fundamentalism isn't about religion, it's about power". They promotes extremism; used religion as a tool to gain power through military. To eradicate such violence and fear in our society to lead out from domsday. There must be some pragmatic steps need; awareness of religious knowledge, remove iliteracy which aggravates social unrest and violence. There must be special training for Talibans to remove brain washing of miserable people in the Religious Institutes. UNO should implicates resolution of International affairs and disputes. Government also play their due role by providing national security; impose law and order for militant groups.
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Good attempt. However, I have found many grammatical mistakes in your attempt. Moreover, your ideas are not organised. Try to write in a simple and cohenret manner. Keep it up.
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Extremism and militancy in our society-Its Causes And Remedies

1-INTRODUCTION

2-WHAT IS EXTREMISM (simply I will have to define it that extremism are the people who are anti-state elements and working for their wasted(vested) interests)

3-ISLAM'S RESPONSE TO EXTREMISM (Islam does not support extremism; according to Holdy Qur'an, Hadith and Ulemas Extremism is not allowed in Islam) (It is often advisable to make short headings instead of writing legnthy sentences while making outlines.)

4-WHAT DOES DO EXTREMIST & WHO ARE THEY?
a-They destroy wealth and lives for their own wrested interests
b-Different ways to cause terror as bombing, killing
c-Gaining political motives
d-To escalate religious and ethnic differences
f-Extremist may be national and international

5-CAUSES OF EXTREMISM & MILITANCY
I-I. Internal Causes
a) Socio-Economic Causes
i) Injustice:
ii) Illiteracy:
iii) Poverty And Unemployment:
iv) Food Insecurity:
v) Dissatisfaction:

b) Political Causes:
i) Non-Democratic Set-Up:
ii) Improper Government Set-Up
iii) Absence Of Law And Failure Of Law Enforcement Agencies:

c) Religious Causes:
i) Role Of Madrassahs:
ii) Religious Intolerance:

II. External Causes
a) Afghan War: 1979
b) Iranian Revolution:
c) War on Terrorism: 9/11

6- FACTORS BOOSTING EXTREMISM:
a) Anti-Terrorism Campaign And Drone Strikes:
b) Negligence of Government:
c) Persecution of Innocent Muslims in Kashmir and Palestine:

7- Steps Taken By Pakistan:
a) Ban On Terrorist Organizations
b) Operation Rah-E-Nijat
c) Operation Rah-E-Rast

8- SEVERE IMPACT OF EXTREMISM :


a) Civilian Loss

b) Economic Cost Of Terrorism:
i) Agriculture Loss:
ii) Manufacturing Cost:
iii) Declining Foreign Direct Investment:
iv) Diminishing Tourism:
v) Internally Displaced People/internal Migration

c) Social Unrest: (Social problems increase i.e. theft, target kiling etc

d) Political Impacts: (derailing democracy

e) Far reaching Psychological Impacts: (suicide, people are becoming psychological patients

f) Religious Impacts: (Molvi sahibans palying a pivotal role in it


9-SUGGESTIONS
a)Peaceful resolution of political disputes: Kashmir and Palestine and Afghanistan
b) Stop state extremism
c) Deterring states from sponsoring extremism
d) End of USA double standard
e) Un should be reinforced and strengthen
f) IMF, WB , ABD ,WTO should be restructured
g) Policy of engagement and negotiation
h) Will to eradicate extremism
i) Regional approach
j) To eliminate extremsim sources of income
k) Unemployment and poverty elimination
l) Improvement of quality education
m) Review of law and order situation
n)Role of media should be widen

10-CONCLUSINO


"Pappa Papppa talk to me", says a little boy with tears in his eyes but his father can't answer because he is no more owing to an act of extremists; drone attack and killing of many innocent people; young girl is kidnapped rapped and killed. Extremists and terrorists are killing innocent ulemas, politicians, stake holders and common citizens awfully in the name of targeted killing for their wasted interests. On the one hand luxury lives of political actors like kings and queens of dreamworld and on the other hand a young hungry girl looking for food in the trash of a famous fast food restaurant to quench the fire of her hunger and a boy with dirty hands working in a garage to fulfill the basic needs of his poor family. An unending queue of humans with dead bodies on road ready to kill or be killed' protesting and suddenly an other exclusive and live footage of a bomb blast showing flesh and blood everywhere and per-planned talk shows of political actors on pity issues and laughing after that. This is neither a trailer of an action movie nor an excerpt from a novel. This is a true picture of world's Seventh Nuclear Power, one of the richest countries in coal and gas reserves-Pakistan, which is facing extremism and militancy's problem in our society.


All active and new members are highly requested to take out my mistakes and check it out in detail, I will highly be thankful to you...Thanks...
Dear friend, your attempt is unsystematic and disorganised. In your outline you have mentioned highly crucial and relevant points. Besides, there is an organisation of materail in your outline. But your introduction seems totally haphazard. It hardly contains only the 10% of your outline. Neither you mentioned causes nor gave suggestions. Moreover, whatever you wrote seems ambiguous. For example, you have given the instances of king, queen, girl, boy etc. These examples seem to have little relationship with topic. In short, I have found your introduction haphazard and unimpressive. You should avoid such approach. you are a very active member of our group. Indeed, you are improving rapidly. I believe that if you keep your endeavour continue, you will acquire remarkable skills. I request you to do still more work and keep checking others' attempts.
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