(b) Correct any FIVE of the following sentences: (5)

Passing through ten different cities, Karachi is the most active.
Karachi seems to be the most active out of the ten cities we/i passed.

He was laid up for six weeks with two broken ribs.
He was lying with two broken ribs for six weeks.

Someone showed the visitors in the room.
The visitors were showed into the room by someone.

Until you remain idle you will make no progress.
You shall make no progress till you remain idle.

It is very wrong to be devoted to lying and cheating.
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He told me that he is waiting for me since a long time.
He told me he had been waiting for me for a long time.

The house stood up in the dull street because of its red door.
The house stood ............. i don't know! ...

He brought the articles to the market which he wanted to sell.
He brought the articles that he wanted to sell to the market...

Adil, u go ahead bro... i seriously hadn't read these while posting them, i just copy-pasted in a haste... now that i read them and tried to comprehend the hidden mistakes, i wuz stunned! tough ones dude! we seriously need to Explore the world of English ....

Regards,

THE 1

1. Passing through ten different cities, Karachi is the most active.
[Problem: Confusion about the object]

If you're passing through ten different cities, Karachi is the most active.
or
Passing through ten different cities, We/I found Karachi the most active.
[Comments: Who was passing through those cities? Karachi or someone else]

2. He was laid up for six weeks with two broken ribs.
[Problem: Past Progressive with Adverbial of time]

He had been laid up for six weeks with two broken ribs.
[Comments: Never use a phrase telling "how long" with present or past progressive/continuous]

3. Someone showed the visitors in the room.
[Problem: Confusion hi confusion:p]

Someone introduced the visitors in the room.
[Comments: The verb "showed" is not appropriate if this is the sense of the sentence]
Someone showed the visitors the room.
[Comments: Why don't you say something? ]

4. Until you remain idle you will make no progress.
[Problem: Improper use of "until"]

Till you remain idle, you will make no progress.
You will make no progress till you remain idle.
[Comments: Until is appropriate when you change it to: You will make no progress until you start working]

5. It is very wrong to be devoted to lying and cheating.
[Problem: Improper context for word "devoted"]

It is very wrong to be addicted to lying and cheating.
[Comments: Lying and being a cheat is too bad to be devoted to]

6. He told me that he is waiting for me since a long time.
[Problem: Present Progressive with Adverbial of time; Wrong use of tenses Past with Present Progressive; Wrong use of since]

He told me that he had been waiting for me for a long time.
[Comments: Slightly different from Mr THE 1]

7. The house stood up in the dull street because of its red door.
[Problem: Confusion about the relation of Subject and Adverbial]

The house, because of its red door, stood up in the dull street.
[Comments: Which of them the red door belongs to? the dull street??]

8. He brought the articles to the market which he wanted to sell.
[Problem: Confusion about the relation of Verb and two Objects]

He brought the articles that he wanted to sell to the market
[Comments: You're absolutely right Mr. THE 1]

Objections and Corrections are welcomed... but not suggestions just kidding.

Someone please change voice of these sentences.
A horse has four legs.
Sun rises in the east.
I have black hair.

SAM bhai, i truly appreciate your participation. Gosh, you've made me despise my grammatics ... i never paid heed to grammar, no wonder my english teacher used to get annoyed... hmmm, so according to your corrections, i got a mere 1 outta 8, which is a pathetic score! But thanx to you for helpin me out, i learnt a lot in these very questions.

1. Passing through ten different cities, We/I found Karachi the most active.
[I find this one absolutely correct.]

2. He was laid up for six weeks with two broken ribs.
[hey, are you sure "laid up" is correct? thanx for the advice! i'll keep it in mind]

3. Someone showed the visitors into/in the room.
[this one's a hooker... ]

4. Till you remain idle, you will make no progress.
[agreed]

5. Lying and cheating devotely is very wrong.
[how about this? lol, this sentence is a disaster for my poor grammatonix!]

6. He told me that he had been waiting for me for a long time.
[with "that" or without it... seems the same to me]

7. The house stood up in the dull street because of its red door.
[l found this one perfectly right! its the red door of the house bhai, not the street!]

8. ABSOLUTELY RIGHT....



English experts, its about time you ppl appeared on the scene.


Regards,

THE 1

aoa,
shouldnt no:7 be
The house stood out in the dull street because of its red door.
??
Saania

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i think ms.saania is right. house stands out(be prominent). it doesnt stand up.

Sentence # 2:

Busharraf, the usage of 'laid up' is incorrect. You could better use 'lying'. Listen, we are concerned with the correction. Do not take a chance by trying to keep up with the original words in the sentence. If you are not satisfied, substitute the words. You can change the tense.

Sentence #3:
It must be 'into' NOT 'in'.

Sentence #5:
There is no word like 'devotely' in the English dictionary.

Busharraf, these are just the mistakes in your sentences. I will present my corrections within a day or two.

Regards,

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Adil Memon
Police Service of Pakistan (P.S.P)
37th Common Training Program

lay sb up [usually*passive] if sb is laid up, they are unable to work, etc. because of an illness or injury:
She’s laid up with a broken leg.
Ref: Oxford Advanced Learner's Dictionary of Current English

lay up transitive verb
2. confine somebody with injury or illness: to prevent somebody from leading a normal active life, usually temporarily because of injury or illness
Ref:Encarta® World English Dictionary © & (P) 1999 Microsoft Corporation. All rights reserved. Developed for Microsoft by Bloomsbury Publishing Plc.

I confess Ms Saania is absolutely right about "stood out". But the rest of the sentence is to remain same because there is a confusion about the door due to the use of pronoun "its". Mr THE 1, I wasn't really trying to teach anyone, I just wrote the rules intact. I appologize if I offended you. The sentence should be like this:
The house, because of its red door, stood up in the dull street.
The door, of course, belongs to the house. But you have to make it clear in the sentence.

About dedication, I wrote this word has a positive meanings in itself, so it couldn't be used with negative things like cheating and lying. The suitable word, thus, is addicted that is used for such negative habits.

Your objection about "that" is accepted, that doesn't make much difference. When did I say it did? I just mentioned that I made a little change in that.

Can somebody please tell me the sense of that sentence. Even the meanings you people want to be taken from the corrections you made in sentence number 3.

Well, I won't be able to give much time here so you people are requested not to wait for my responses.

Anyway, thanks Ms Saania for the correction, I truly appreciate it.

Brother Sam,

Thanks for the correction. In haste, I just checked up one usage of 'lay up' and didn't scroll down in my dictionary to find any other possibilities.

Thanks again.

Regards,

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"The race is not over because I haven't won yet."

Adil Memon
Police Service of Pakistan (P.S.P)
37th Common Training Program

@ Adil:
i missed the "d" in devotely... i had planned to type "devotedly"... i hope this one exists

@ Saania:
hey, that was a correction outta the blue! Impressive i must say... wonder how much i need to work on my grammatronics

@ Sam:
hey, i wasn't the least offended bro! its all good ...


thanks all, especially A.J. bhai, for spendin ur precious time in this section as well.

Regards,

THE 1

[QUOTE=Sam]About dedication, I wrote this word has a positive meanings in itself, so it couldn't be used with negative things like cheating and lying. The suitable word, thus, is addicted that is used for such negative habits.

Read 'devotion' instead of 'dedication'. We're talking about being devoted to cheating and lying etc.