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Asif3531 · #**111** Saturday, July 21, 2012

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Originally Posted by zuhaib ahmed

I live in real world, That is why using CSS forum.

Expansion writing is much related towards Philosophy. All the quotations are of Philosophers. So do concentrate you too . I shall say you to read Rumi.

I shall tell the very difference of goal and desire in part time.

I asked you the Central Idea.

To me expansion is based on realities. Be real and rational, don't be over smart. Checkers knew things very well, they already spent greater portion of lives than us. I can easily judge the type of style you have employed. Few things must be original, Strictly Speaking "Original".

To me examples must be real and the whole story must not be fictitious.

zuhaib ahmed · #**112** Saturday, July 21, 2012

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Originally Posted by Asif3531

To me expansion is based on realities. Be real and rational, don't be over smart. Checkers knew things very well, they already spent greater portion of life than us. I can easily judge the type of style you have employed. Few things must be original, Strictly Speaking "Original".

To me examples must be real and the whole story must not be fictitious.

I have been asking for the Central Idea of The TOPIC, Call No Man Happy Till He is Dead.

Scroll back and check my 14 expansions. And, do tell about my employed style.

zuhaib ahmed · #**113** Saturday, July 21, 2012

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Originally Posted by pearlyS

you gave good examples to adorn the expansion,thanks ..i have a question,let's say the same topic comes in paper & i write it the same way i have written. what marks it could earn??

Regards

I don't know appositely. You would have been given around 10 out of 20.

Asif3531 · #**114** Saturday, July 21, 2012

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Originally Posted by zuhaib ahmed

[COLOR="DarkRed"][SIZE="3"][FONT="Book Antiqua"][B]No, it was for ASIF.

You touched the topic well but you could define it very well.

Let me tell what meanings can come out of the quotation.

Call No Man Happy Till He is Dead.

1. Jub Insaan Merta hai, Tub e pata chlta hai K, WO HAPPY THA K NHN. A true Man would Smile when he dies Means he is happy and He who weeps, He is not.

Nope, The main theme of this proverb is related to the realities of life. No man on this earth is happy, each have his own problems. Man on this earth cannot be happy all the time. Death only brings an end to his miseries and give him rest from all sorrows of this world forever.

pearlyS · #**115** Saturday, July 21, 2012

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Originally Posted by alihashmatkhoso

LEND YOUR EARS TO ALL, TONGUE TO FEW

A wise man is good listener, but a cautious speaker. he listen to everyone, with patience, but use his own judgement. in the present world, with so many wolves in sheep's clothing,it is good to be discreet in one's choice of friends. a person who talks unnecessarily is bound to invite trouble for himself . however, people who are patient listeners are more sensible as they can have a full peep in others' heart without reveling their minds. sometimes people befriend you with ulterior motives and take advantage of the confidence you repose in them. we daily come across news paper reports of people who tricked some gullible persons. the modus operandi is first to win the confidence of the unsuspecting victims and then to cheat them. therefore we must not be taken in by sycophants whose sole purpose is to exploit us. we should confide in those who have stood the test of time and are worthy of our confidence. by listening to others, we come to know of certain facts which may be useful for us. everybody has one or two things to teach you.therefore listening can be advantageous. hence talking injudiciously to everybody who happens to be your acquaintance, can prove very dangerous in the long run. listening should always be preferred to talking as even nature given us two ears and one tongue that too guarded by thirty two strong teeth....

dear fellows please critically analyse

I do not feel i am in position to point out mistakes as i am in process of improving my own style. To me your's is a nice attempt. however,i would add that you can improve it as you have potential...better opinion will come from senior & learned members.

Regards

zuhaib ahmed · #**116** Saturday, July 21, 2012

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Originally Posted by alihashmatkhoso

LEND YOUR EARS TO ALL, TONGUE TO FEW

A wise man is good listener, but a cautious speaker. He listenS to everyone, with patience, but useS his own judgement. In the present world, with so many wolves in sheep's clothing, it is good to be discreet in one's choice of friends. A person who talks unnecessarily is bound to invite trouble for himself . However, people who are patient listeners are more sensible as they can have a full peep in others' heart without reveling their minds. Sometimes people befriend you with ulterior motives and take advantage of the confidence you repose in them. We daily come across news paper reports of people who tricked some gullible persons. The modus operandi is first to win the confidence of the unsuspecting victims and then to cheat them. Therefore we must not be taken in by sycophants whose sole purpose is to exploit us. We should confide in those who have stood the test of time and are worthy of our confidence. By listening to others, we come to know of certain facts which may be useful for us. Everybody has one or two things to teach you .Therefore listening can be advantageous. hence talking injudiciously to everybody who happens to be your acquaintance, can prove very dangerous in the long run. listening should always be preferred to talking as even nature given us two ears and one tongue that too guarded by thirty two strong teeth....

dear fellows please critically analyse

Good one. Don't use 'YOU'. It is better you use ONE.

Use CORRECTLY PRESENT INDEFINITE TENSE.

Dear, it is hard to write whole expansion into single Paragraph.

So, write into three or four paragraphs.

In this way, you can write well and clear.

Keep on practising.

pearlyS · #**117** Saturday, July 21, 2012

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Originally Posted by Asif3531

Nope, The main theme of this proverb is related to the realities of life. No man on this earth is happy, each have his own problems. Man on this earth cannot be happy all the time. Death only brings an end to his miseries and give him rest from all sorrows of this world forever.

if you can than do write complete expansion. This will help clearing your point i.e original examples & less philosophy. i feel a piece of writing should be a decent blend of philosophy & real examples. i am trying to raise standard of my writing to touch this balance.

Regards

Asif3531 · #**118** Saturday, July 21, 2012

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Originally Posted by pearlyS

if you can than do write complete expansion. This will help clearing your point i.e original examples & less philosophy. i feel a piece of writing should be a decent blend of philosophy & real examples. i am trying to raising standard of my writing to touch this balance.

Regards

Now this is something acceptable or I would say such kind of style will fetch you good marks. Remember, real examples makes your arguments more worthy and acceptable, whereas, Fictitious things add ambiguity to the arguments by making them more imaginary.

zuhaib ahmed · #**119** Saturday, July 21, 2012

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Originally Posted by zuhaib ahmed

Poverty is the parent of revolution and crime.

Tensions, tortures, tragedies and torments enter in the house where poverty lives in. Poverty shakes the soul of survival. It compels him to revolutionize and commit crime. Poverty makes man rebellion and criminal. The earth, which remains silent for years, bursts up with burning and boiling volcano. In the very way, man who tolerates and bears, breaks the ice and starts being rebellion and criminal with the passage of time.

A poor man takes gun, sometimes for the milk and food of his family, sometimes for the marriage of his sister or daughter, sometimes for the funeral ceremonies of his relative and sometimes being compelled by inflation. No man comes into world being a criminal. It is what poverty makes him. The crime which is increasing day by day into Pakistan is only because of poverty. Poverty is directly proportional to crime.

2500 years ago, a revolution went into Rome, Brought by the Fighter Spartacus and had almost reached to Parish and crash the Rome. That time, only a few people were rich and had all money. Others were the poor and slaves. Their women were sold, raped and tortured. Men were enslaved and huntered by Rich people. Poverty had killed the thousands and a giant revolution came into Rome. Poverty was the father of revolution in Rome.

Gandhi said, "To a man with an empty stomach food is God." Man can do all for his empty stomach. Pakistan should focus over the root cause of crime and revolution. They would know, it is poverty. Every man should be given equal rights and property. As Prophet Mohammad PBUH did.

“When I give food to the poor, they call me a saint. When I ask why the poor have no food, they call me a communist.”

By: The Xuhaib AHmed PiRzaDa. 18-july-2012 12:38 AM

Please, Check and Mark. I await.

Do Check it ASIF3531. I have written day before yesterday. None has checked it. Check it as you say about fantasies and realities. I shall have another way to write on. Thanks

Pearlys, you must check it too.

Asif3531 · #**120** Saturday, July 21, 2012

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Originally Posted by zuhaib ahmed

Do Check it ASIF3531. I have written day before yesterday. None has checked it. Check it as you say about fantasies and realities. I shall have another way to write on. Thanks

Sir, I have checked all your posts, even i have checked your sentence corrections posts. I acknowledged and appreciated your initiative. You have good writing skills. BUT i was successful in figuring out few things related to your style and the stuff you have in your head. I am not criticizing you, as you have good english skills but it doesnt mean you are creative too.

You have to search for those things and correct it on time. As everything has a cost and nothing is free.

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