Is democracy an ideal form of government.

There are many forms of government. One of them is democracy. It is the form of government by the people of the people and for the people. And indeed, it is an ideal form of government. This form of government is presented in both developed and underdeveloped countries. As a matter of fact, India is one of the biggest democratic countries. Democracy has been appreciated in many countries. Beside the India, Pakistan, Bangladesh, Sri Lanka, there are many other Asian countries which are practicing democracy. However, European countries are also enhancing democracy, because it is the form of government which is made up for the people. Every people practice democracy, every people is not far away from democracy, every people is engulfed by democracy in form of the democratic system or culture. As a matter of fact, Pakistan is democratic state but it is facing a lot of problems such as bad governance, corruption, nepotism and many other problems which are weakening our country. Despite of having democratic system in our country so far Pakistan has not been able to control these awful problems due to corrupt people. Indeed, democratic system or culture can not be failure, because it is all about people, it is all about individual. It gives free hand every body regarding the freedom of speech, freedom of expression, and it gives permission the media to be free and crystal clear in front of people. Again, there is the matter of people, people and people. Democracy is all about people..Democracy is by the people, and for the people to practice it, to make it better, to make good governance, to make prosperity for one's life, and indeed, ministers are elected form the people. Again it is the turn of people, if a people is elected, and he would do wrong works then he would be responsible for it not democracy. Because, the democracy has been been accepted to be the best form of government of the world globally. However, the failure of democratic form of government is not the fault in system, but it is the fault of democratic people who are running it and practicing badly. Conclusively, it can be said that the democratic system can never be wrong or failure in contrast dictatorship, monarchy, anarchy or tyranny system, because it is an ideal form of government.

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''Today I completed my blessing upon you and liked Islam as a religion for you''. Allah said it to his beloved prophet Hazrat Muhammad (Peace be upon him).Allah created all human beings and, no doubt he is their protector and benefactor.
Islam, no doubt , is a complete code of life, which identifies former religions and at the same time abolishes them because islam is the updated version, All himself took the responsibilty of its protection.''I descended it, and i am its protector'' said Allah.Islam tells us how to live an ideal life and not merely tells us but practically represents the life of Holy Prophet Peace be upon him.
Everything has been explained in Quran, any type of problem can be solved by Quran.Then Hadith, which is second source of islamic law.Muhammad Peace be upon him played every role in their life, he was a child, he was a young man, he was a father, he was a trador, he was a conquerer, he was a worker, he was a grandfather, he was a father in law....Thus his life is a example for everyone

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thanx a lot sir for your kind comments
but i apologize that i do not consider myself to be a good checker

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Yes, you can check out. Just read my both expansions and comment. Also pin point my mistakes. I believe you are good at English. From your attempting, you seem nice, but need some practice. Inshallah, I shall also help you in improving your expansions. Attempt expansion every day. I shall also be attempting same expansion. We will be checking out each others expansions. What do you say?

Religion is the greatest benefactor of human race

It is obvious that religion has a very big impact on one's life. Religion can be said as the compilation of codes and tenets, adherents believe that following their religion will lead them to success. There are around 22 religions in this world and all of them tell us about peace, truth, brotherhood and other commodities which help us to behave like a human. Religion also chaperones us and restricts us from heinous things in this world. Every religion has its own beliefs and rules, one has to offer salah and other has to go to temple but their purpose is same, which is worshiping.
If we talk about Islam, ALLAH sent his messenger Hazrat Muhammad (P.B.U.H), his life is an inspiration for all of us. Holy Qurran is also revealed for us and hence it is a complete code of life. It's verses teach us every good thing regarding every aspect of life. It teaches us to get education, give rights to all and sundry, spread brotherhood, acquire peace and tells us that Love prevails over war. We can say, it teaches us how to live in this world. No doubt, "Religion is the greatest benefactor of human race".

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Golden rule is that there is no Golden rule

In order to make possible peace and prosperity in the society there is need of rule. The rule is made up for the ease of human being. As a matter of fact, all rules are made and even are ammended due to the advancement in the technology and advanced world. Rule does not have much importance when we think about human nature, by human nature every body needs to live in prosperity, no one wants extreme society. Therefore, rules must be made up according to the huamn needs, human wants and human tendency according to the circumstances. It is generally saying that golden rule is that there is no golden rule. Because, a rule can not stop sun rising, a rule can not stop night and day's tendencies. They do their work according to their own golden rule by mother nature. That is why the golden rule is that there is no golden rule. Same as the case with human being. No doubt humans are committed and spend their lives according to the rules in order to get peace and ease in society. But these rules are artificial not golden rules because human being has made these rules by themselves, in actual form by nature there is no rule. These are artificial rule. If you are good at deeds, if your follow things naturally like our ancestors did, in past there were no golden rules. And they people were very happy than that of today's. As a matter of fact, despite of golden rules people are doing sins, they are involved in corruption, nepotism, target killing. Some people go to the length of to be kill or be killed in this materialistic world. They are away from natural rules, that is the nature's rule. They have forgotten about their soul and are becoming materialistic. Therefore, people must look into their inner core of heart. Follow the rule which is supernatural. However, other rules are just mere for the spending lives in order to expend peace and prosperity in the society. Indeed, it is well said that the golden rule is that there is no golden rule...


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Is democracy an Ideal form of Government.

The democracy can be said as the form of Government in which the tenets, rules, commands and constitutions are made by the consensus of people and government together. It is said that the rules in democracy can be described as “to the people, by the people, for the people". One can gauge the success of democracy from many developed countries. It is been observed that most of the successful and developed countries are being governed through democracy.

Democracy gives us the right to raise our voice, all and sundry are given equal rights either one is from low level society or high level society. There are certain rules of democracy, some of them are like “one can vote for mere one leader”, “vote of every one will be of same level irrespective of society caliber”, “vote of an illiterate and illiterate will be equal” and some other rules are there too. Together these rules make a set of tenets and commandments which form a Government type which is really in juxtaposition with the perfection.

One must inculcate one thing, that nothing is perfect in this world. However the best thing can be said as perfect, like democracy can be termed as perfect form of Government. There are certain flaws in democracy which need some amendments according to Islamic tenets. One can have a look at western world; they have strong economy, best intelligence and defense and have a burgeoning literacy rate. Despite of all these commodities they have a devastated social system. They have allowed gay marriages and other commodities which are prohibited in our religion Islam.

Democracy should also have some limitations. Hence democracy is the ideal form of Government if some amendments according to Islamic tenets are made in it.

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I have pointed out some of your mistakes. More or less you have attempted your expansion well...Keep going on, also check out my expansions and pin point my mistakes...

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I have pinpointed some mistakes of you. Try to have a look and tell me if I pointed out some mistake not correctly.

1. I would like to advise you to avoid long phrases, try to make them short as much as possible. In above passage, there are many phrases which are combined in a futile way. They can be separated by removing commas and "ands".
2. Avoid starting your phrases with AND, BUT and BECAUSE.

Overall it's a good attempt.

I will post some more expansions, try to evaluate my expansions too.

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@ammanan

Thanks dear, you have rightly pointed out my mistakes. I think we can use "but, and, because" in the beginning of the sentence. As it is not a mistake because I read dawn on the daily basis, I have seen most of the time that these are used in the beginning of the sentences. However, I must avoid them to use maximum times, because they disclose a bad impression in diction as you felt. Therefore, I will try my best as much as I can to the level of perfection in the upcoming attempts. Also I will try to use small sentences instead of big ones.

Please keep in touch with us, attempt two or one expansion daily, we need to improve our composition and expansions. In collaboration and coordination we can do miracles in composition inshaallah. These expansions are not fruitful for composition but also for Essay too. If we want kill two birds with one stone, then it is really better to do writing practice as much as we can in expansions, in this way we can improve our written to the level of perfection.

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