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Bravery, intelligence, honest, bold, leadership and several other traits define a personality. The charismatic, magnificent, influential or obedient nature in the childhood clearly describe the attitude he will show in his adulthood. John Milton has beautifully explained the phenomenon as,

Childhood shows the man,
as morning shows the day

Psychological researches have declared that human personality is developed in early ages of life. Some claimed that learning during the early five years defines the way child will act throughout his life. It is rightly said that mother's leap is the first academy of man. Also the company has deep influences on one's thoughts and perceptions.Healthy environment and optimistic peers help in shaping a positive individuality whereas the aggressive and pessimist friends lead to an ever troubling life.

History has witnessed several great men whose young life shadowed the greatness in later years of life. Our Holy Prophet (Peace be upon Him) possessed honest and truthfulness since his childhood that made him to get the title of Saadiq -wa-Ameen from his worst enemies. Quaid-e-Azam was an ideal leader. His attitude from the days of youth was of a leader. Once his mother asked him to stop studying late night and to take rest. His spontaneous reply depicted him as an extra-ordinary person as he said that if he took rest that time, how would he become a great man in his future?
Nepolean is known for his enthusiasm for warfare. He was fond of fighting in his childhood.

A Child has superiority over a grown man due to several reasons. He is more pure, more innocent, more energetic and more close to the nature. He is away from the complexity of life,tackles the matters with simplicity and remains free of depression.

A child is father of the man as childhood never dies. There is always a little child hidden in everyone who guides the man to act according to his learning. Therefore, the early years of a man should be supervised wisely to get a healthy person developed of it.
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A pretty good attempt this time but you are still committing some of the previous mistakes e.g some grammatical,organizational and clarity errors.Plz dont take it on your heart but you need consistent practice of writing good expressions and grammatical rules.What you require is to consult a vibrant and competent English teacher for guidance in the areas required.If you can contact me on my skype,yahoo,gmail or other contacts given in my profile,i will feel pleasure to help and guide you in this regard.

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It is rightly said that love is blind. Love is careless of the consequences it may has to face due to the affection. Love provokes the emotions to the extreme end. Although love is a delightful and sacred feeling that makes one happy by taking one away from the stressful life, but this beauty pampers only when love is not suppressed. When love is encountered by hurdles instead of an encouraging welcome, it becomes furious and regardless of all boundaries , chases the rival.
Love is beautiful till it is kind but when turns into passion, it behaves indignantly and ruthlessly. This is valid to all kind of love, whether it is love for some spouse, love for wealth or love for authority. Laila Majnoon, Heer Ranjha, Romeo Juliet and many other characters show how their love made him to bear all oppressions. Wealthy people do not want any decree in their assets, so they do invest least in charity careless of any others' rights. They want to grab all money in their pockets. It is love for authority that has caused chaos and heavy bloodshed in different regions of the world. Love for power made Hosni Mubarak, for instance, to insist for the prestige despite of all the resistance and massive destruction.
Love fills heart with enthusiasm and excitement. It never lets one to sit calmly and continuously pins him to explore the ways for ultimate conquest. Love never wants to be overthrown, instead it is more likely to be overwhelming.
Love is beautiful and blissful only if it is buoyant. All its delicacy, elegance, grace and sophistication is replaced by turbulent and irresistible aggression if it is oppressed. Love loves its domination and hates subjugation. So, love is beautiful but baleful god.
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Erum sorry dear i won't be able to asses your expansions as my psychological assessment for PMS is starting from 26th of this month, i would get back to you once i am free from it, you are requested to kindly pray for my success...
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Erum sorry dear i won't be able to asses your expansions as my psychological assessment for PMS is starting from 26th of this month, i would get back to you once i am free from it, you are requested to kindly pray for my success...
May Allah bestow you success. Ameen

No problem, we shall be continuing it later.
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Default check out my introductory paragraph of expansion plz with the same topic

Man was born as a free entity. He was not enslaved in other hands. The self power is the real manifestation of his liberty.Slavery is not defined as to be confined in the rods and bars of the cell. Slavery is dependence on others for aiding and facilitating the life.



just check it i want to expand it on the basis of this idea.. is it appropriate?
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It is rightly said that love is blind. Love is careless of the consequences it may has to face due to the affection. Love provokes the emotions to the extreme end. Although love is a delightful and sacred feeling that makes one happy by taking one away from the stressful life, but this beauty pampers only when love is not suppressed. When love is encountered by hurdles instead of an encouraging welcome, it becomes furious and regardless of all boundaries , chases the rival.
Love is beautiful till it is kind but when turns into passion, it behaves indignantly and ruthlessly. This is valid to all kind of love, whether it is love for some spouse, love for wealth or love for authority. Laila Majnoon, Heer Ranjha, Romeo Juliet and many other characters show how their love made him to bear all oppressions. Wealthy people do not want any decree in their assets, so they do invest least in charity careless of any others' rights. They want to grab all money in their pockets. It is love for authority that has caused chaos and heavy bloodshed in different regions of the world. Love for power made Hosni Mubarak, for instance, to insist for the prestige despite of all the resistance and massive destruction.
Love fills heart with enthusiasm and excitement. It never lets one to sit calmly and continuously pins him to explore the ways for ultimate conquest. Love never wants to be overthrown, instead it is more likely to be overwhelming.
Love is beautiful and blissful only if it is buoyant. All its delicacy, elegance, grace and sophistication is replaced by turbulent and irresistible aggression if it is oppressed. Love loves its domination and hates subjugation. So, love is beautiful but baleful god.
Never write in starting that It is rightly said....
There is lack of coherence in your sentences. A lot of grammatical mistakes.. I point out some of them:

Love is careless of the consequences it(THAT) may(Remove it) has to face due to the affection. COORDINATION ERROR

whether it is love for some spouse,(OR) love for wealth or love for authority. PARALLEL CONSTRUCTION

Laila Majnoon, Heer Ranjha, Romeo Juliet and many other characters show how their love made him(them) to(remove to) bear all oppressions. ERROR in SENTENCE CORRECTION. MAKE/BID/LET/HEAR/WATCH all are bare infinitive.

It never lets one to sit calmly( CALM). No need of adverb...

BLAH BLAH BLAH.

I will suggest you to read DAWN newspaper daily so that you may improve your English and structure.
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