I respectfully beg to differ with your teacher, i hope he is fully acquainted with the requirements of CSS English, if he is just an English teacher and you are counting on him then you better be careful as in this PMS exam many experienced teachers have miserably failed in both Essay and composition paper and they also have M.Phil degree and have been teaching English for half decade, even there are many on this very forum, i won't name them though...the purpose of telling you the whole story is that if you rely on him because he teaches English then this is not a good bet...

we have to hit the bull's eye, you gotta write the expansion in 250-300 words. how can you manage to properly describe the given topic and give different perspectives as well staying within the words limit?

except some minor grammatical mistakes this is very amazingly done...keep practicing, you are getting this...

Well attempt this time!

You have improved in a very short span of time.But it would be better for you to give as many examples as you can from real life e.g Our Holy Prophet(P.B.U.H),Zaheer-ud-Din Babar,Quaid-e-Azam M.A Jinnah,the Western developed nations,etc.What you need is to carry it on 'daily basis' and keep in contact with CSS forum as we are all here to help one another.

best of luck for your next attempts!!

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I respectfully beg to differ with your teacher, i hope he is fully acquainted with the requirements of CSS English, if he is just an English teacher and you are counting on him then you better be careful as in this PMS exam many experienced teachers have miserably failed in both Essay and composition paper and they also have M.Phil degree and have been teaching English for half decade, even there are many on this very forum, i won't name them though...the purpose of telling you the whole story is that if you rely on him because he teaches English then this is not a good bet...

we have to hit the bull's eye, you gotta write the expansion in 250-300 words. how can you manage to properly describe the given topic and give different perspectives as well staying within the words limit?

agreed Bilal..I was not satisfied by his suggestions, this is why i decide to post here even I was not sure about rapid response. But I am really grateful to you and Imtiaz to guiding me on time.

InshaAllah, I will be posting more works

Thanks Imtiaz..yes I should have to mention some great names from history too.. Hopefully further writings will be containing such examples..InshaAllah



Regards

This proverb depicts a wise approach to live an honourable life. Tailoring one's expenses according to one's resources paves the way to satisfaction and peace of mind and soul.

If one takes a cloth to a tailor and wants to get a proper coat stitched from it, he must have to give the measurements according to the size of cloth. Because the tailor will adjust the coat with the cloth, not the cloth with the coat. The tailor will not be adding any extra cloth himself to make a big coat. Similar is the case of a respectful life. One has to meet his needs with his own money. He would have to rely on his own resources instead of looking for others' resources.

A peaceful and comfortable life is only possible if one stays within his limits. Our society is facing a day to day increased crime just because people want to cut their coat according to others' cloth. One is impressed by the showoff of wealthy people and wants to adopt their lifestyle. In pursuance, he goes for every possible mean of earning money, often getting indulged into criminal activities like bribery, fraud, theft, and sometimes even murder. Not only he causes unrest to others but he himself loses his self-hood along with self esteem, respect and nobility. A wise person has to be thrifty and contented to his own resources.

Businessmen have too to keep this proverb in mind while investing their capital in the projects. If they do not manage an appropriate balance between their expenditure and their capital, they must fall in heavy debts. This will lead to a great trouble.

An honourable life can be easily lived if the proverb is followed in its true spirit. Giving priority to the basic needs according to one's own budget is the only way to stay on a respectable edge. One must be happy with cutting his coat according to his own cloth.

Erum dear now there are fewer grammatical mistakes but again you have lost the perspective, your giving the example of tailor in literal meaning is not a good idea. it seems absurd you know, all you need to do is give the importance of leading your life according to your resources, its benefits and dangers if you don't cut you don't stay within your means...that's it...but not a bad one...

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Dear!
As Bilal mentioned,you have deviated from the main topic in some places like in the very beginning,you have absurdly explained and longed the topic that transgress the essence of the topic.Despite it,you better had hit the topic directly like this,

"It is very good practice and healthy experience for one to balance one's requirements and expenditures with the earnings and budget.It is observed that those people who live beyond their means repent throughout their lives".

Yet it is an improved and good attempt on your part.It can be further beautified with the examples from the teachings of Islam about contentment and simplicity,life of our Holy Prophet(PBUH),
Social life and Pakistani perspective,etc.
But i must appreciate your good points i.e breavity,clarity and simplicity of thoughts.


Good attempt this time!!!!

It is very good practice and healthy experience for one to balance one's requirements and expenditures with his earnings and budget. It is observed that those people who live beyond their means repent throughout their lives. This proverb explains well the phenomena of suitability, appropriateness and management of resources of the social, political, and economic and many other aspects of our daily lives. It means that one should handle one’s sources and resources accordingly, in order to avoid any mishap and frustration. For this purpose one has to control one’s ambitions and aspirations, having an insight into the feasibility of his dreams.
As a matter of fact, one should have practical and realistic approach and should not live in the crowd of cuckooland.It is a general observation that the person living above his means lives a miserable life and in the end he is without any penny and beggary is his ultimate fate. Its importance is evident from the sayings of Our Holy Prophet and Quaid-e-Azam.Our Holy prophet Mohammad (PBUH) stressed on the importance of this idea saying that the best thing is the middle one (khair ul umoor e awsatuha) and our greatest leader Quaid-e-Azam also lauded the concept to the high-ups of the bureaucracy and society in carrying the system of the country.
The secret of the prosperity and progress of the economically stabled countries lie mainly in the best handling and utilization of their human and natural resources and the poor countries should also learn a lesson in this regard in order to make good policies for future goals. One should dive into a task when one is well equipped and well prepared for the task otherwise shame, disappointment, agitation, havoc and frustration are the final and ultimate results. One has to be well aware of one’s limitations and boundaries and should plan accordingly to live an honorable and ideal life.

Thanks Bilal and Imtiaz

Should I replace the first para only? or as Bilal has mentioned about literary meaning of tailoring is inappropriate, so that para should also be rewritten?

and one more thing I wanna ask. I find it difficult to produce an effective or impressive introduction while writing both the short and long essays. Please give some tips to improve it

Regards

A wise approach to live a peaceful life is to maintain an appropriate balance between the expenditures and resources. It is well said that the middle course is the best course. Living beyond one's own resources causes him to repent throughout his life. This proverb provides an ideal modus operandi applicable to each and every discipline of life. Managing the resources in social, economical, political and all other fields of life is the prerequisite of a prosperous life.

For instance, in one's social life, he must be careful while making any statement. He should not claim for anything that is not possible for him to do. Similarly, one must keep his resources in mind while spending his money on any project. In our society, people often want to follow the trends introduced by the wealthy people. To meet the requirements, they adopt even the illegal means of earning. They commit crimes like bribery, fraud, theft and even murder. Consequently, they do not only cause unrest and discomfort of the society but also lose their dignity, honour and respect for the whole life.

The great men always led a contented life. They advised their followers, too, to live a moderate life. Our Holy Prophet (Peace be Upon Him) said that the best thing is the middle thing. His saying actually described how to practice the proverb under discussion. A prudent person is always a thrifty one.

To cut one's coat according to one's own cloth is, thus, mandatory not only in individual's life but also essential for the society. It is the only resort to minimize the agitation and havoc from the society as well as increasing the dignity, integrity and nobility of all people of the aforementioned group.