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Shuiab Ahmed Tuesday, December 17, 2013 09:32 AM

@ exclusively

Thanks alot sir........... Im totally agreed to your point, i could not justify the proposition's theme point........

Sir can ask from you that which district do you belong in sindh?
I wanted to meet you, if possible?

KHANSHAHRUKH Tuesday, December 17, 2013 12:42 PM

Many Thanks
 
[QUOTE=exclusively;680376]Great dear, you are doing really nice. Good job. Your ideas are very mature. I have not deducted even a single mistake, but I want to suggest you one thing that be very crystal clear in your expressions, use small sentences. Overall your performance is up to the mark and if you keep the wheel of your practice moving on, I hope you will be doing miracles in your paper inshallah..:)

Stay Blessed..[/QUOTE]

Brother !
I need more practice in essay paper. I would be grateful if you suggest some most expected essays to be prepared on emergency basis.

Shuiab Ahmed Tuesday, December 17, 2013 01:27 PM

@ exclusively

[B][SIZE="4"]A hungry man is an angry man[/SIZE][/B]

Man needs bread for physical survival. He struggles hard throughout his life to extinguish the fire of hunger. No doubt, an empty stomach, is highly dangerous for the society, he may go to any extent for the bread. Meanwhile, it is prohibited in religious and social doctrines that one should not live by bread only. Human is bestowed with temporal and spiritual aspects of life. In this context, bread is direly needed for physical survival.

A hungry man might indulge in the web of social evils, theft and robbery. It would not only threaten the life and property of the individual but also render anarchy in the society. At the same time he does not bother about social and moral doctrine. Moreover, he demolishes the wall, which distinguishes between right and wrong. It is the duty of state to come up with an effective policy against hunger. In the ancient era, Hazrat Umar Farooque said, “if, a dog dies of hunger in his kingdom, it is his responsibility”. What a confession by Hazrat Umar. Meanwhile, he equally kept his words. Peace, prosperity and stability in Umar’s era, is likely an apotheosis of eradication of hunger.

In Pakistan, hunger due to poverty has increased on horse’s pace. More than half of the Pakistan’s population has been living under the poverty line. In this context, people helplessly involve in social evils that might not only cripple the economic fabric of the country but also causes severe anarchy. If one is trapped in the web of hunger, he might break all the social and moral rules of the society. Hunger is deemed as such a severe disease that needs to be vaccinated at once. Otherwise it would cause highly dangerous effects to social and economic structure of the country. Doubtless, man lost all the conscience in the state of hunger. At the same time, hunger causes anger and frustration that makes a man incapable to discriminate between right and wrong. Ultimately, the dictum is beautifully quoted that hunger makes a man angry.

exclusively Tuesday, December 17, 2013 08:10 PM

[QUOTE=amannan;680378][SIZE="5"][B][COLOR="Navy"]A hungry man is an angry man[/COLOR][/B][/SIZE]

A person who feels hungry, thinks about his appetite only. The only aim is to feed his appetite and for this he will not care for any one else. He can go through any of the crucial times for his aim. The hunger may be of food, money, fame etc. But the lust and greed for all these materialistic things can make a man reckless, one can go to an extent where he will not pay heed to the "right" and "wrong".[B]Great dear, your start is to the point..Its quite impressive start[/B]

We know, poverty and street crime in Pakistan is burgeoning. The poor people (hungry men) are going through poverty. They need food for their family and have to feed their appetite which enforces them to do any thing and they choose to be criminals (Angry men).
As it is rightly said by Aristotle,
[COLOR="Navy"]"Poverty is the parent of revolution and crime"[/COLOR][/QUOTE]

Dear good job, but you still need a lot of practice. Though you have attempt it quite impressive but your flow is not up to the mark. Play with words, and be natural oriented and keep your practicing on. :)

Dear your answer is too short, try to expand it more and make it a complete attempt..

Best of luck for your upcoming attempt...

[QUOTE=Shuiab Ahmed;680454]@ exclusively

[B][SIZE="4"]A hungry man is an angry man[/SIZE][/B]

Man needs bread for physical survival. He struggles hard throughout his life to extinguish the fire of hunger. No doubt, an empty stomach, is highly dangerous for the society, he may go to any extent for the bread. Meanwhile, it is prohibited in religious and social doctrines that one should not live by bread only. Human is bestowed with temporal and spiritual aspects of life. In this context, bread is direly needed for physical survival.

A hungry man might indulge in the web of social evils, theft and robbery. It would not only threaten the life and property of the individual but also render anarchy in the society. At the same time he does not bother about social and moral doctrine. Moreover, he demolishes the wall, which distinguishes between right and wrong. It is the duty of state to come up with an effective policy against hunger. In the ancient era, Hazrat Umar Farooque said, “if, a dog dies of hunger in his kingdom, it is his responsibility”. What a confession by Hazrat Umar[B]![/B] Meanwhile, he equally kept his words. Peace, prosperity and stability in Umar’s era, is likely an apotheosis of eradication of hunger.

In Pakistan, hunger due to poverty has increased on horse’s pace. ([B]According to the report of UNDP,[/B] More than half of the Pakistan’s population has been living under the poverty line. In this context, people helplessly involve in social evils that might not only cripple the economic fabric of the country but also causes severe anarchy. If one is trapped in the web of hunger, he might break all the social and moral rules of the society. Hunger is deemed as such a severe disease that needs to be vaccinated at once. Otherwise it would cause highly dangerous effects to social and economic structure of the country. Doubtless, man lost all the conscience in the state of hunger. At the same time, hunger causes anger and frustration that makes a man incapable to discriminate between right and wrong. Ultimately, the dictum is beautifully quoted that hunger makes a man angry.[/QUOTE]

This is what I wanted, great job dear! It is really up to the mark and to the point. Keep going on dear, I want you just perfect in the expansion... Keep going on, you are really improving outstandingly.

The next topic is: [B]The real root of all evil is Overpopulation[/B]

[QUOTE=Shuiab Ahmed;680395]@ exclusively

Thanks alot sir........... Im totally agreed to your point, i could not justify the proposition's theme point........

Sir can ask from you that which district do you belong in sindh?
I wanted to meet you, if possible?[/QUOTE]

Dear according to the rules of cssforum, no personal questions.

Nevertheless, for contact, inbox me, now I have posted my email address in my profile for you for a while ..:)

[QUOTE=KHANSHAHRUKH;680430]Brother !
I need more practice in essay paper. I would be grateful if you suggest some most expected essays to be prepared on emergency basis.[/QUOTE]

Socioeconomic and political crisis of Pakistan

Terrorism-many perspective

UNO's role (Futre, hurdles and bla bla)

Women-many perspective


Just cover these four topics, I hope you will be able to get through easily inshallah...:)


Besides, I am giving you those topics for expansions which are related to the essay papers. Therefore, attempt them too. It will help you a lot in essay attempting inshallah..

Be blessed...

seher bano Tuesday, December 17, 2013 10:41 PM

[B][COLOR="DarkOrchid"]Check out this expansion, especially grammatical mistakes.[/COLOR][/B]


[B]The impossible is often untried (CSS-2010)[/B]


[B][COLOR="Purple"]“Anything at all is possible. Some things are unlikely. Some things will never happen. But they always could at any time.” -- Ashly Lorenzana [/COLOR][/B]


The proverb” impossible is often untried” means there is nothing impossible in this world. Everything is impossible before they are possible. Man of the Stone Age would have never thought of flying, like birds, in the sky. Neither would he have had thought of descending to surface of lunar. Many things that were impossible in the past are now possible. All such things became possible because of endeavor. As the saying goes:

[COLOR="Purple"][B]“Try try try and one day you can fly.”[/B][/COLOR]

The invention of Airplane, say for example, is one of the biggest achievements of the man. Before the invention of airplane in 1903 by Wright Brothers, nobody could imagine they would fly in the sky like birds; and they would invent supersonic afterwards. Similarly, nobody would have thought of reaching up to the moon before” Neil Armstrong descended to the lunar surface in 1969. Now man not only walks on the moon but also making it possible to grow vegetables there. By the same token, American War of Independence is a case in point where Americans tried and got independence from Britain in 1783. There are a great many other examples which show that things are impossible until they are tried.

In view of the above mentioned fact, there is no harm in saying that God has endowed man with striking faculties. He can do anything within certain limits, so everything is possible unless they are tried.

[COLOR="Purple"][B]“We have this history of impossible solution to insoluble problems.” -- Will Eisner[/B][/COLOR]
(WC-288)

amannan Wednesday, December 18, 2013 06:06 AM

@ exclusively sir please have a look :)
[B][COLOR="Navy"]The real root of all evil is over population[/COLOR][/B]

Our Pakistan is confronting enormity of problems, we have illiteracy; terrorism; crime; poverty etc. If we simply ponder over the problems and all other evils, which are already ingrained in our society, we can pinpoint a single cause which is over population. Parents having more children can not feed their family and are leading a life below poverty line. These people when try to find some good jobs, they can not, because the jobs are less and population is being accelerated at a steady rate. These people when can not get jobs and can not feed their family, they grab arms and go on the streets for street crime. Illiteracy is also, some how related to over population, persons who can not even feed their children, they simply can not afford education expenses and this way other problems are also emerging. People who are helpless, when find no any other solution for their problems, they join religious groups, they are even ready for suicide and these people are used by militant groups for bombings and suicide attacks.
[COLOR="DarkSlateBlue"]"A crowded society is restrictive society and an over crowded society is an authoritarian, repressive and murderous society" (Edward Abbey)[/COLOR]
Hence in a nutshell, we can say that " The real root of all evils is over population"

exclusively Thursday, December 19, 2013 12:15 AM

[QUOTE=seher bano;680686][B][COLOR="DarkOrchid"]Check out this expansion, especially grammatical mistakes.[/COLOR][/B]


[B]The impossible is often untried (CSS-2010)[/B]


[B][COLOR="Purple"]“Anything at all is possible. Some things are unlikely. Some things will never happen. But they always could at any time.” -- Ashly Lorenzana [/COLOR][/B]


The proverb” impossible is often untried” means there is nothing impossible in this world. Everything is impossible before they are possible. Man of the Stone Age would have never thought of flying, like birds, in the sky. Neither would he have had thought of descending to surface of lunar. Many things that were impossible in the past are now possible. All such things became possible because of endeavor. As the saying goes:

[COLOR="Purple"][B]“Try try try and one day you can fly.”[/B][/COLOR]

The invention of Airplane, [B]say for example[/B], is one of the biggest achievements of the man. Before the invention of airplane in 1903 by Wright Brothers, nobody could imagine they would fly in the sky like birds; and they would invent supersonic afterwards. Similarly, nobody would have thought of reaching up to the moon before” Neil Armstrong descended to the lunar surface in 1969. Now man not only walks on the moon but also making it possible to grow vegetables there. By the same token, American War of Independence is a case in point where Americans tried and got independence from Britain in 1783. There [B]are a great[/B] many other examples which show that things are impossible until they are tried.

In view of the above mentioned fact, there is no harm in saying that God has endowed man with striking faculties. He can do anything within certain limits, so everything is possible unless they are tried.

[COLOR="Purple"][B]“We have this history of impossible solution to insoluble problems.” -- Will Eisner[/B][/COLOR]
(WC-288)[/QUOTE]

I have pointed out your minor mistakes. Dear your expressions are quite impressive and simple. Keep it up :)

exclusively Thursday, December 19, 2013 12:24 AM

[QUOTE=amannan;680719]@ exclusively sir please have a look :)
[B][COLOR="Navy"]The real root of all evil is over population[/COLOR][/B]

Our Pakistan is confronting enormity of problems, we have illiteracy; terrorism; crime; poverty etc. If we simply ponder over the problems and all other evils, which are already ingrained in our society, we can pinpoint a single cause which is over population. Parents having more children can not feed their family and are leading a life below poverty line. [B]These people when try to find some good jobs, they can not, because the jobs are less and population is being accelerated at a steady rate.[/B] [B][COLOR="DarkRed"][/COLOR][/B] [B]These people[/B] when can not get jobs and can not feed their family, they grab arms and go on the streets for street crime. Illiteracy is also, some how related to over population, persons who can not even feed their children, they simply can not afford education expenses and[B] this way [/[B]B]other problems are also emerging[/B]. People who are helpless, when find[B] no any [/B]other solution for their problems, they join religious groups, they are even ready for suicide and these people are [B]used [/B]by militant groups for bombings and suicide attacks.
[COLOR="DarkSlateBlue"]"A crowded society is restrictive society and an over crowded society is an authoritarian, repressive and murderous society" (Edward Abbey)[/COLOR]
Hence in a nutshell, we can say that " The real root of all evils is over population"[/QUOTE]


I have pointed out your mistakes. Good efforts though.

Dear keep practicing on and read a grammar book, try to understand the usage of passive sentences. Besides, you are lacking in your flow. Play with words and just try to attempt them in your own simple way. Dear keep your practicing on as much as you can, because you need a lot of work to the level of perfection.

Best of luck for your upcoming attempt...:)


@Shuiab Ahmed

Where are you dear, today you have not attempted your expansion!

amannan Thursday, December 19, 2013 11:52 AM

@exclusively
 
[QUOTE=exclusively;680996]I have pointed out your mistakes. Good efforts though.

Dear keep practicing on and read a grammar book, try to understand the usage of passive sentences. Besides, you are lacking in your flow. Play with words and just try to attempt them in your own simple way. Dear keep your practicing on as much as you can, because you need a lot of work to the level of perfection.

Best of luck for your upcoming attempt...:)
[/QUOTE]

Thanks Bro.
I shall keep practicing, just keep checking my expansions :D
Its really a great favor from your side. I am posting a new expansion, have a look at it. I hope, you will notice some improvement in this one.

[B][SIZE="4"]Rich Men Have No Fault[/SIZE][/B]

It is an orthodox, that people who are rich are considered to be the most meek and tacit personalities. Undoubtedly, we human beings make mistakes as its a natural thing. But, people around us will not point you out for any mistake if you are rich. In case, if some one points you out, you have the money;ordain to make it right in our hypocritic society. People here can do anything for wealth, they will ascertain 'black' as 'white'. Unfortunately we have created an environment, where the tradition of giving and taking bribes; corruption and nepotism is fully endorsed. Rich people can do anything they want, there is no law and no punishment for them. No one will venture to raise the voice against them. In contrast to them, poor people, who are not even leading an austerity life, are blamed for everything. As it is rightly said
[B][COLOR="Navy"]"A light purse, is a heavy curse"[/COLOR][/B]
We should try our best, to eradicate all these absurd things from our society. We should start this from our selves, to make our country and society free from evils like corruption and nepotism. This will not only help us to develop a corruption free society but will also annihilate the discrimination between the rich and poor people.

KHANSHAHRUKH Thursday, December 19, 2013 03:57 PM

Rich men have no fault
 
Rich men have no fault

"Rich Men" is an umbrella term which normally refers to the people having deep pockets. But it also includes other sources of richness like power, politics, holiganism, mafias etc. Richness in anything could have both positive or negative aspects. It makes you confident in one case and over confident in another.

Richness in money is generally most established term for people to be a "Rich Men". They normally consider themselves as the superior creature which is above all laws and regulations. Money attracts other sources of power like political power, economic self sufficiency, mafias, holiganism, which all make a strong bong of self-interests. They are all-holy and blameless just because they are rich. They have power to use law for their own interest as we have recently observed in Shahzeb Murder case. Law is the bondwoman of their homes.

Term "Rich Men" also refers to a society which considers itself a first-class society. Saudi society is the best example. It is common saying that "Expats are always wrong and Saudis are always right". By further expanding this term to international level, USA's foreign policies show true picture of what is ultimate result of uncontrolled self-suffiency in economic affairs of a country.

So, opulent people, societies or countries show same behaviour of being right at all times. They consider themselves real masters of their domain. Might is right is the law of real world. Anyone likes or not, it does not matter at all.


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