[QUOTE=Ambivalent;890020]I agree with your point of view. I am not negating the angle you have taken of this essay. I just want to share that the rule of thesis statement is to tell the reader what your essay is going to be about; you have to make your point particular rather than keeping yourself general on a topic, in general you are, however, more on a safe side. Your points and outline were great. I appreciate your participation and let us see what angle would you take in the next essay.


Thank you brother. If you notice any mistake then please do rectify it.

When Life Throws You Lemons, Make Lemonade.

Explicit Key Words: Life,Throws, Lemons, Lemonade.
Implicit Key words: Life Throws Difficult times, sourness ( Lemons) Exploit them, use them and be optimistic and make the best out of adversaries (Make Lemonade a sweet drink).

Make outlines and then write introductions.

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It was the first essay, I laid my hands on.
Here's is the introduction, a bit off-topic but interesting.

By the way, good work, keep it up.



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Nice Introduction to the essay. Great work.
Make an outline too.

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Introduction:
Life in today’s contemporary era has shown man two opposing realities. On one side, it entices humans to get attractive materialistic goods around; on the other side, attaining these facilitating goods get the best energy and services out of them. Humans, while trying to achieve luxurious goods in life, become part of the process of globalization. They get impersonal in their interactions, form nuclear families, segregate from their relations, and they reinforce the economics of capitalism. As a result, there only survives a mere 2% of rich class who gets the services of the entire remaining world by providing them incentives through materialism. The lives of the remaining 98% of population becomes part of cycles in which they sometimes witness boom in their pays, happiness, and joy; while on other occasions, they suffer from lack of money, sorrows, and distress. A lot of people fall prey to the latter occasion and majority of them end up in hospitals, asylums, and metal wards. It is a fact that no one is happy with his/her current possessions. There hardly is any chance of winning a million dollars lottery to get everyone out of their miseries. Then what is the solution to all of this? There is always a way out of every situation, and out of this one the solution lies in being optimistic. Being positive in making just one day better than the previous one gets one motivated and going. It is this motivation that provides the room to get yourself out of trouble and to make life better by working hard on it. Thus, when life troubles someone (throws someone lemons [being sour reflecting trouble]), make the best out of it by being optimistic (lemonade [a sweet drink]). In other words, when life throws lemons, the best way out of it is to make lemonade.

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When life throws you lemons make its lemonade
Introduction
A. Success is raised on the edifice of adversity

1. Lemons threw by life multiply the level of individual’s motivation; how Adolf Hitler built his nation in the face of lemons thrown on him by enemies. Nelson Mandela took the lemons of racial adversities and made the sweet lemonade, the end to the policy of racial apartheid.

2. The accomplishment of the French revolution was a response to the adversities; when upper class threw lemons on the working class and denied them their due rights they made lemonade; they united themselves and revolutionized against them.

B. The marvelous achievements of man were the response to lemons of life.

1. The idea of peace emerged from the rubbles of bloody wars
2. The nations united for peace only after undergoing the horrors of the fragmentation.
3. The nationalism was the retort to the lemons of racial, political and religious oppression.
4. The creation of Pakistan was the lemonade of the lemons thrown by rivals.

c. How individuals and society make the lemonade of lemons?

1. The discriminations and differences are responded with the solidarity of a victimized group.

2. The Indifference of society often results in a passion for work for equality of rights and opportunities; movements of women empowerment.

3. The increased floods often result in more dams, thus providing more water in much needed time.

4. The cultural and social oppression results in movements of rights and consequently deliver justice to people.

D. Making lemonade of lemons ensures the success after setbacks; it is turning even misfortunes to account. It is the spirit of the King Robert Bruce. It is optimism that the adversities make the actions more consolidated, the will more powerful and the courage indomitable.


E. The spirit of making lemonade of lemons distinguishes the winner from the vanquished.

F. The World admires and remembers the champions of making lemonade of lemons

Conclusion

ambivalent! you started your topic with the discussion of the distribution of resources in a society, then you discussed the misries of 2nd class but you did not discuss it directly. checker knows we should make lemonade we have to write how we are making lemonade and how in the future we can do this. you wrote that we should use miseries to make the progress but there are no examples, no solid discussion. you discussed the topic in last three line of para all the other lines seem irrelevant. you can write much better, give yourself a 2nd chance and post it.

fellows! please, comment on my outline, all type of criticism is welcomed.

When life throws you lemons make it lemonade
Introduction
Great are those who turn their misfortunes to account; history remembers them in golden words and people regards them their heroes. Making lemonade of lemons is a distinguishing feature of successful people of history and contemporary world. Reality testifies that every optimistic nation used the lemons of oppression and discrimination to make her more united, motivated and civilized.The narration of the world’s success in different fields shows that lemonade was not made unless lemons were thrown upon; the concept of collective peace could not take roots if nations had not suffered the lemons of wars and disintegration. The individuals’ and collective success of humans in achieving democracy, human rights and respect for women all are the results of adversities of despotism, human suffering and inequality. The spirit of making lemonade unties the knot of success in difficulties; it motivates people and society to fight lemons and make their lemonade. This motivation makes the actions intensive and the spirit infallible .

Introduction
A. Success is raised on the edifice of adversity

1. Lemons threw by life multiply the level of individual’s motivation; how Adolf Hitler built his nation in the face of lemons thrown on him by enemies. Nelson Mandela took the lemons of racial adversities and made the sweet lemonade, the end to the policy of racial apartheid.

2. The accomplishment of the French revolution was a response to the adversities; when upper class threw lemons on the working class and denied them their due rights they made lemonade; they united themselves and revolutionized against them.

B. The marvelous achievements of man were the response to lemons of life.

1. The idea of peace emerged from the rubbles of bloody wars
2. The nations united for peace only after undergoing the horrors of the fragmentation.
3. The nationalism was the retort to the lemons of racial, political and religious oppression.
4. The creation of Pakistan was the lemonade of the lemons thrown by rivals.

c. How individuals and society make the lemonade of lemons?

1. The discriminations and differences are responded with the solidarity of a victimized group.

2. The Indifference of society often results in a passion for work for equality of rights and opportunities; movements of women empowerment.

3. The increased floods often result in more dams, thus providing more water in much needed time.

4. The cultural and social oppression results in movements of rights and consequently deliver justice to people.

D. Making lemonade of lemons ensures the success after setbacks; it is turning even misfortunes to account. It is the spirit of the King Robert Bruce. It is optimism that the adversities make the actions more consolidated, the will more powerful and the courage indomitable.


E. The spirit of making lemonade of lemons distinguishes the winner from the vanquished.

F. The World admires and remembers the champions of making lemonade of lemons

Conclusion
Your outline is fine.

Buddy there are two ways to start a 3000 words essay. In the introduction you either have to get to your subject directly like you did in yours, or you can start from any angle and then get to your subject in the end, like the one I did in mine. I chose the second one in this intro, as everything you mentioned will be done after this paragraph. Second point is that by defining the distribution I generalized the problem of adversary to the majority of the population and then gave the solution, and hence introduced the topic. I hope you understood what I meant.

Your outline was just fine. write paragraphs on two or three points of your outline so that we would see how it matches the theme in your outline. Do it in this essay.


Introduction
Great are those who turn their misfortunes to account; history remembers them in golden words and people regards them their heroes. Making lemonade of lemons(what is lemons and lemonade define before talking about them) is a distinguishing feature of successful people of history and contemporary world. Reality testifies that every optimistic nation used the lemons of oppression and discrimination to make her more united, motivated and civilized.The narration of the world’s success in different fields shows that lemonade was not made unless lemons were thrown upon; the concept of collective peace could not take roots if nations had not suffered the lemons of wars and disintegration. The individuals’ and collective success of humans in achieving democracy, human rights and respect for women all are the results of adversities of despotism, human suffering and inequality. The spirit of making lemonade unties the knot of success in difficulties; it motivates people and society to fight lemons and make their lemonade. This motivation makes the actions intensive and the spirit infallible.
keywords of lemons and lemonade are to be defined and once their context is given their synonyms have to be replicated in the whole essay. Using lemons and lemonade every time exposes you as being short of words.

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Thank you so ver much for reviewing.turning something to account is an idiom , and the second line should be written as ' the individual and collective success '. I will upload some paragraphs of the essay. you please upload your outline so we may get a better understanding of your introduction. and one thing more, rate my essay as grade A,B or C. I just wanna know how much still have to work for coming through.

Instead of rating I think strict marking would be good. Marking everything out of 10 would let us know what is our worth, with making 4 the massing marks.
I will write my outline in the end when few other will post theirs.

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