Originally Posted by waqarabbasi

When life throws you lemons make its lemonade
Introduction
A. Success is raised on the edifice of adversity

1. Lemons threw by life multiply the level of individual’s motivation; how Adolf Hitler built his nation in the face of lemons thrown on him by enemies. Nelson Mandela took the lemons of racial adversities and made the sweet lemonade, the end to the policy of racial apartheid.

2. The accomplishment of the French revolution was a response to the adversities; when upper class threw lemons on the working class and denied them their due rights they made lemonade; they united themselves and revolutionized against them.

B. The marvelous achievements of man were the response to lemons of life.

1. The idea of peace emerged from the rubbles of bloody wars
2. The nations united for peace only after undergoing the horrors of the fragmentation.
3. The nationalism was the retort to the lemons of racial, political and religious oppression.
4. The creation of Pakistan was the lemonade of the lemons thrown by rivals.

c. How individuals and society make the lemonade of lemons?

1. The discriminations and differences are responded with the solidarity of a victimized group.

2. The Indifference of society often results in a passion for work for equality of rights and opportunities; movements of women empowerment.

3. The increased floods often result in more dams, thus providing more water in much needed time.

4. The cultural and social oppression results in movements of rights and consequently deliver justice to people.

D. Making lemonade of lemons ensures the success after setbacks; it is turning even misfortunes to account. It is the spirit of the King Robert Bruce. It is optimism that the adversities make the actions more consolidated, the will more powerful and the courage indomitable.


E. The spirit of making lemonade of lemons distinguishes the winner from the vanquished.

F. The World admires and remembers the champions of making lemonade of lemons

Conclusion

Originally Posted by waqarabbasi

thank you, Bonaparte, my mother used to call me this when I was little. yes, ambivalent I agree that we should give marks to one another, it's a good practice.

Originally Posted by Ambivalent

Introduction
A. Success is raised on the edifice of adversity

1.Lemons threw by life multiply the level of individual’s motivation; how Adolf Hitler built his nation in the face of lemons thrown on him by enemies. Nelson Mandela took the lemons of racial adversities and made the sweet lemonade, the end to the policy of racial apartheid.

2.The accomplishment of the French revolution was a response to the adversities; when upper class threw lemons on the working class and denied them their due rights they made lemonade; they united themselves and revolutionized against them.

B. The marvelous achievements of man were the response to lemons of life.

1. The idea of peace emerged from the rubbles of bloody wars
2. The nations united for peace only after undergoing the horrors of the fragmentation.
3. The nationalism was the retort to the lemons of racial, political and religious oppression.
4. The creation of Pakistan was the lemonade of the lemons thrown by rivals.

c. How individuals and society make the lemonade of lemons?

1. The discriminations and differences are responded with the solidarity of a victimized group.

2. The Indifference of society often results in a passion for work for equality of rights and opportunities; movements of women empowerment.

3. The increased floods often result in more dams, thus providing more water in much needed time.

4. The cultural and social oppression results in movements of rights and consequently deliver justice to people.

D. Making lemonade of lemons ensures the success after setbacks; it is turning even misfortunes to account. It is the spirit of the King Robert Bruce. It is optimism that the adversities make the actions more consolidated, the will more powerful and the courage indomitable.


E. The spirit of making lemonade of lemons distinguishes the winner from the vanquished.

F. The World admires and remembers the champions of making lemonade of lemons

Conclusion
Your outline is fine.



Buddy there are two ways to start a 3000 words essay. In the introduction you either have to get to your subject directly like you did in yours, or you can start from any angle and then get to your subject in the end, like the one I did in mine. I chose the second one in this intro, as everything you mentioned will be done after this paragraph. Second point is that by defining the distribution I generalized the problem of adversary to the majority of the population and then gave the solution, and hence introduced the topic. I hope you understood what I meant.


Your outline was just fine. write paragraphs on two or three points of your outline so that we would see how it matches the theme in your outline. Do it in this essay.



Introduction
Great are those who turn their misfortunes to account; history remembers them in golden words and people regards them their heroes. Making lemonade of lemons(what is lemons and lemonade define before talking about them) is a distinguishing feature of successful people of history and contemporary world. Reality testifies that every optimistic nation used the lemons of oppression and discrimination to make her more united, motivated and civilized.The narration of the world’s success in different fields shows that lemonade was not made unless lemons were thrown upon; the concept of collective peace could not take roots if nations had not suffered the lemons of wars and disintegration. The individuals’ and collective success of humans in achieving democracy, human rights and respect for women all are the results of adversities of despotism, human suffering and inequality. The spirit of making lemonade unties the knot of success in difficulties; it motivates people and society to fight lemons and make their lemonade. This motivation makes the actions intensive and the spirit infallible.
keywords of lemons and lemonade are to be defined and once their context is given their synonyms have to be replicated in the whole essay. Using lemons and lemonade every time exposes you as being short of words.

Originally Posted by waqarabbasi

When life throws you lemons make its lemonade
Introduction
A. Success is raised on the edifice of adversity

1.Lemons threw by life multiply the level of individual’s motivation; how Adolf Hitler built his nation in the face of lemons thrown on him by enemies. Nelson Mandela took the lemons of racial adversities and made the sweet lemonade, the end to the policy of racial apartheid.

2.The accomplishment of the French revolution was a response to the adversities; when upper class threw lemons on the working class and denied them their due rights they made lemonade; they united themselves and revolutionized against them.

B. The marvelous achievements of man were the response to lemons of life.

1. The idea of peace emerged from the rubbles of bloody wars
2. The nations united for peace only after undergoing the horrors of the fragmentation.
3. The nationalism was the retort to the lemons of racial, political and religious oppression.
4. The creation of Pakistan was the lemonade of the lemons thrown by rivals.

c. How individuals and society make the lemonade of lemons?

1. The discriminations and differences are responded with the solidarity of a victimized group.

2. The Indifference of society often results in a passion for work for equality of rights and opportunities; movements of women empowerment.

3. The increased floods often result in more dams, thus providing more water in much needed time.

4. The cultural and social oppression results in movements of rights and consequently deliver justice to people.

D. Making lemonade of lemons ensures the success after setbacks; it is turning even misfortunes to account. It is the spirit of the King Robert Bruce. It is optimism that the adversities make the actions more consolidated, the will more powerful and the courage indomitable.


E. The spirit of making lemonade of lemons distinguishes the winner from the vanquished.

F. The World admires and remembers the champions of making lemonade of lemons

Conclusion

Originally Posted by safeer khan

Tmhe kis naam sy pukaron
Kiyaa naam hai tmhara!

My friend, you're right that introduction can be written either way, generally or to-the-point. But it is much safer to target the topic from the very first sentence because that's when the paper checker makes up his mind.

For the same reason, I called my introduction a bit off-topic, as I consumed more than 150 words (12-14 lines) before taking into account the topic phrase. I usually do it in the fourth, fifth line.

There are many rules of writing an essay. All of them, unfortunately, cannot be incorporated in css as such. We need to play by their rules. So we need to expose the topic in the introduction.

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Originally Posted by Bonaparte

This is my outline. Please check and mention my mistakes. I found this essay bit difficult though; however, i tried my best to cover it comprehensively.




WHEN LIFE THROW YOU LEMON MAKE ITS LEMONADE

I learned that courage was not the absence of fear, but the triumph over it. The brave man is not he who does not feel afraid, but he who conquers that fear.
Nelson Mandela



INTRODUCTION

a)Life throws lemon and how to make best out of it?
b)Life; According to Socrates
c)Life is a maze, contemplate it and harness adversity
d)Life is a hit; take it and move forward
e)Life throw lemon process it and make lemonade

1)Life as an hostile condition without losing determination and courage

1.1)Life throws hostility upon Holy Prophet (P.B.U.H) and instead of renouncing his mission, the Messenger of Allah transformed strayed Arabs.

1.2)Pre-Partition challenges for Muslims and by adhering to principles
Pakistan came into existence.

1.3)Adolf Hitler dream of being artist, never disappointed him; but rather he become German Chancellor

1.4)Barack Obama, a migrant from Africa and challenge for his life turns him a champion to pave the way for an unprecedented black President in the history of United State.

1.5)Nelson Mandela anti-apartheid revolutionary politician stick to his stance, and finally become the president of South Africa.

2)Life is a challenge for the family, country, doctor, animal, boxer, student, politician and as a professional.

2.2)Nuclear Family as a challenge for parents to protect the children and to feed them without giving up.

2.3) Life throws hit for Boxer but instead of surrendering, he keeps going.

2.4)Politicians despite facing severe criticism and hardships are willing to perform their duties instead of losing enthusiasm and make best out of it

2.5)MM Alam and his courage in the line of fire made him victorious by taking advantage of situation.

2.5)British Prime Minister in order to harness Scottish nationalism allowed Scotland`s referendum to avoid further complications and succeed

2.6) Life is a challenge for sparrow to go out expose into adversity and to
get their food for survival.


Conclusion:
Summary

When life throws you lemon make lemonade

Originally Posted by Ambivalent

Your outline is fine.



Buddy there are two ways to start a 3000 words essay. In the introduction you either have to get to your subject directly like you did in yours, or you can start from any angle and then get to your subject in the end, like the one I did in mine. I chose the second one in this intro, as everything you mentioned will be done after this paragraph. Second point is that by defining the distribution I generalized the problem of adversary to the majority of the population and then gave the solution, and hence introduced the topic. I hope you understood what I meant.


Your outline was just fine. write paragraphs on two or three points of your outline so that we would see how it matches the theme in your outline. Do it in this essay.



Introduction
Great are those who turn their misfortunes to account; history remembers them in golden words and people regards them their heroes. Making lemonade of lemons(what is lemons and lemonade define before talking about them) is a distinguishing feature of successful people of history and contemporary world. Reality testifies that every optimistic nation used the lemons of oppression and discrimination to make her more united, motivated and civilized.The narration of the world’s success in different fields shows that lemonade was not made unless lemons were thrown upon; the concept of collective peace could not take roots if nations had not suffered the lemons of wars and disintegration. The individuals’ and collective success of humans in achieving democracy, human rights and respect for women all are the results of adversities of despotism, human suffering and inequality. The spirit of making lemonade unties the knot of success in difficulties; it motivates people and society to fight lemons and make their lemonade. This motivation makes the actions intensive and the spirit infallible.
keywords of lemons and lemonade are to be defined and once their context is given their synonyms have to be replicated in the whole essay. Using lemons and lemonade every time exposes you as being short of words.

Originally Posted by safeer khan

Excellent selection of the quote.

Normal skeleton of the outline.

What was the view of Socrates? Write explicitly!

So many views on life. (that's good only if you also state that which one would you follow in the essay)

Adhered to the principles... (which principles? Principle of humanity, principle of determinism,) (eliminate such vagueness of thought)

Why portray Hitler as a good fella?
This may offend the examiner.

No need to write anything below the conclusion.

Write 5,6 essays.. You will have a better idea of your own unique way of writing essays.

I hope it helped.

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Originally Posted by Bonaparte

What was the view of Socrates? Write explicitly!

Socrates view “The unexamined life is not worth living” (This sentence has to be included in introductory paragraph” along with further explanation

So many views on life. (that's good only if you also state that which one would you follow in the essay)

The fundamental point I have to convince the examiner that “how life throws lemon and one should make it lemonade rather than giving up” hence, keeping this factor into consideration I reckon I have shown various dimensions which covers the preliminary gist of essay; however, in-case you find it not satisfactory then kindly rectify it along with necessary alteration so that I could get exact idea that where I am missing exactly.

Adhered to the principles... (which principles?, principle of determinism, YES). Determinism to precede Pakistan Movement under hardships and sufferings to get independent state. YES, It was not clear before.

Why portray Hitler as a good fella?

Well, I think it will not offend examiner as long as one is stick with balanced approach. Besides, I reckon this is not about Hitler`s goodness or evil side. It is actually about what hardships with which he has gone through and how his life transforms into chancellorship out of difficulty.

I may be wrong but, my this statement is based on following reasons,

1)In my 2014 essay attempt I straightaway started with Hitler`s Quotation taken from his book Mein Kampf (My struggle ) and obviously examiner started that essay with Hitler`s quote and I secured 45 marks.

2)Secondly, European History, International Relations and even mcq`s contains Hitler`s foreign policy and about his life etc. It is therefore, if one is not taking a side of his evil acts and taking the line of neutrality then I think examiner would not feel offensive.

3)Thirdly, Hitler`s book MEIN Kampf which he wrote while he was in prison. If offence was the case then his book suppose to be banned, whereas it is available almost all part of the world which I guess nothing to do with offence.

4)Lastly, Yes, Hitler has evil side as well; but one can not deny the fact that, Hitler covers the major chunk of history since his birth 1889, till World War 2 which can not be ruled out.


I welcome any suggestion and alteration, as we all are learning and it is good for us in exam`s point of view as well so please do correct me if i am wrong.