It's neither an outline nor the introduction.

"The crux of success is the manifest of lemons of life." and this sentence makes no sense to me.

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You haven't completely written your introduction brother. Re-write it and thoroughly check your introduction by yourself before posting. You can find your mistakes easily, which will let you improve the areas you are weak in.

An excellent outline. I didn't correct few grammatical mistakes but that doesn't matter if your outlined is enriched with relevant and striking examples. Well done. It doesn't seem that you struggled while making this outline.

Okay boss. No red from now. What about the current color?

Brother you have not sent your complete outline. It is just one page, kindly send the other page too.
Second, my question from you and others is: is it necessary to include the key points of your outline in the introduction? Here, I am asking about the essay required for CSS; other essays, like in foreign universities, require you to introduce the topic in either direct or indirect way and your introduction should not be a miniatured version of your essay, rather it should be an introduction to your subject. What about in CSS? What is the safest way to do it?

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When life throws you lemons make it lemonade
Introduction

A. Success is raised on the edifice of adversity

1. Lemons thrown by life multiply the level of individual’s motivation; how Adolf Hitler built his nation in the face of lemons thrown on him by enemies. Nelson Mandela took the lemons of racial adversities and made the sweet lemonade, the end to the policy of racial apartheid.

2. Accomplishment of the French revolution was a response to the adversities; when upper class threw lemons on the working class and denied them their due rights they made lemonade; they united themselves and revolutionized against them.
B. All marvelous achievements of man was the response to lemons of life
1. The idea of peace was emerged from the rubbles of bloody wars
2. The nations united for peace only after undergoing the horrors of the fragmentation.
3. The nationalism was the retort to the lemons of racial, political and religious oppression.


c. How individuals and society make the lemonade of lemons?
1. The discriminations and differences are responded with the solidarity of a victimized group.
2. Indifference of society often results in a passion to work for equality of rights and opportunities; movements of women empowerment.
3. The increased floods often result in more dams, thus providing more water in much needed time.
D. Making lemonade of lemons ensures the success after setbacks; it is turning even misfortunes to account. It is the spirit of the King Robert Bruce. It is optimism that the adversities make the actions more consolidated, the will more powerful and the courage indomitable.
E. The spirit of making lemonade of lemons distinguishes the winner from the vanquished.
F. World admires and remembers the champions of making lemonade of lemons

Introduction
Great are those who turn their misfortunes to account; history remembers them in golden words and people regards them their heroes. Making lemonade of lemons is a distinguishing feature of successful people of history and contemporary world. Reality testifies that every optimistic nation used the lemons of oppression and discrimination to make her more united, motivated and civilized. The Narration of the world’s success in different fields shows that lemonade was not made unless lemons were thrown upon; the concept of collective peace could not take roots if nations had not suffered the lemons of wars and disintegration. The individuals’ and collective success of humans in achieving democracy, human rights and respect for women all are the results of adversities of despotism, human suffering and inequality. The spirit of making lemonade unties the knot of success in difficulties; it motivates people and society to fight lemons and make their lemonade. This motivation makes the actions intensive and the spirit infallible.


The strength of a response is defined by the intensity of the action inciting response. The relentless efforts of success are motivated by the greater oppression of adversities. Had the treaty of Versailles not so coercing, the Hitler would not be successful in uniting Germans and developing them to a point where they became a threat to the others. Regardless of the Hitler’s desire for power, the industrial development plans pursued and jobs opportunities created by him were no doubt tremendous. He, while motivated with the spirit of responding to the lemons of allied powers, built his nation from the ashes of war and defeat.


The history has many heroes making lemonade of lemons; Nelson Mandela is one among them. The racial hatred and violence to which his nation was subjected were used by him to bring world the notion of respect for all humanity, irrespective of color and creed. Nelson Mandela worked in a way that not only black were recognized equal citizens of South Africa but he himself was respected as a national hero of black and whites alike. The great national success is always raised on the edifice of adversity.


The existence of lemons makes the nations and communities united and successful. When the upper class of France denied sharing the losses of war and the entire burden was placed on the working class, they made lemonade and retorted so vehemently that the hegemony of upper class ended forever. The French revolution would not have realized if the dominant class had not thrown lemons of oppression upon them. The lemons of adversity raised the emotions of the working class and banded them together on a single cause, the cause of alleviation of their problems. The union formed to check the lemons, resulted in the overthrow of a system of discrimination. The success of general masses was a firm response to the adversities.


No extraordinary responses can take place without extraordinary circumstances; the world peace was not a known idea before the bloodshed and material losses of the world war one and two. The notion of peace emerged from the rubbles of bloody wars. The disasters brought by the world wars confronted nations with the problem of survival. The peace, an extraordinary idea in an anarchic world, took roots when wars delivered ashes, deaths of millions and the billions dollar loss to infrastructure. The desire for the restoration of world peace and efforts for the establishment of a structure for maintaining peace could not have possible without the lemons of bloody wars.


Concerted efforts for peace were something new to the world. The divisions among nations could not have accepted this idea, but the lemons of wars, resulted from disintegration of nations, forced nations to think about unity. The nations, including the belligerent ones, joined hands to establish an organization. The birth of the United Nations was a response to the sufferings of fragmentation. The allied as well as the axis powers agreed to enter into an agreement of collective security. The ratification of the UN charter testifies the world that this unity could not have possible without the experience of losses from disintegration.


The lemons of sufferings most often result in wonderful response; the nations did not realize the concept of nationalism, the feeling of common sufferings and loss, unless they were exposed to extreme sufferings. The common sufferings suffered by the Germans made them united against all the opponents. It was not until the Muslims were denied their rights and their identity was crushed that they united as a nation. Two nations theory was a retort to the lemons of the discrimination, religious, social and political. The cumulative effect of these lemons resulted in the creation of Pakistan, which was the sweet lemonade of freedom.


When a group is not integrated with the national progress and denied its due rights, it unites. When the people of Sub Continent were not given jobs and were humiliated for their being uneducated, they responded with a movement of unity. Hindu and Muslim scholars, alike, emphasized the importance of social unity and education, the discrimination was responded with the establishment of Congress and Muslim League, the forums motivated for the welfare of their people. The victims of bias made the lemonade of lemons and started work for promoting education and awareness among the victimized that resulted in the end of foreign rule.

When the society becomes indifferent to the rights of a group within society, then the people of the group join hands to make lemonade of the lemons. The rule of self help and independent struggle for rights always takes place as a response to the indifference of society. The women movement, in the Pakistan and throughout the world, is a manifestation of this fact. The effort to get the right to vote, access to jobs and opportunities, access to public office and policy making apparatus , all the efforts were a response to the negation of these rights. If the lemons of indifference were not so harsh, women would not have come in field for empowerment. Today, the media, NGOs and even the UN struggle for women rights are attributed to the united effort of the women of the whole world. Women did not submit themselves to the lemons instead made their lemonade.

The idea of making lemonade is helpful in every field of life. Misfortune is often turned to account by people. The more rain results in more floods, which often leads to the construction of more dams in the catchment area. The lemons of floods are utilized to store water. The stored water is often used to make fertile even the desert areas. Pakistan, by using the water of floods, can make the desert areas of Baluchistan a fertile and growing area. Nation of USA is already making the lemonade of excessive water for cultivating its deserts and unproductive lands. Lemons of misfortunes always bring motivation for change and progress.


The motivation for change creates enthusiasm among people to fight the challenges. It is the spirit of making lemonade of lemons that ensures the success after setbacks. The king Robert Bruce manipulated his number of defeats to stir spirit of success in his defeated army. The optimistic spirit of Bruce got him again the power of Scotland. The optimism in face of setbacks made nations developed; the china had a large population and it was difficult for such a poor country to provide for such a large population. But they made lemonade of the lemons of large population and used the man power for working in factories and fields. The more the people were there, the more was their working output. This transformed the china from a poor nation to a world power. The people were not treated as the burden but were used for the development and the lemonade was sweet, the development and respect in the world.

The development of china shows that only the spirit of making lemonade of lemons distinguishes the winners from the losers. The misfortunes may create disappointment but it is the differentiated quality of winners that they stay in the field to manipulate the events for their success while others flee. The success of every individual and nation is an evidence to this fact; the courage and struggle of Quaid is a manifestation that how he made a lemonade of the British and Hindu controversies. Accomplished people always used the adversities of fate for making the things brighter and better. The success of the Den Xiaoping ‘s policies made it clear that he did not submit to the problems of large population instead used it for economic success.


Heroes of the history are those who fought the challenges and succeeded in overcoming them. World does not admire the people who were defeated by the circumstances but admire those who turned the lemons of misfortunes in establishment of peace and progress. The Martin Luther manipulated the lemons of discriminations and liberated the US nation from despotism and foreign rule. He made USA a power. The golden are regarded the names of those who make the lemonade of oppression and deliver from anarchy the nations united and developed. The names of Nelson Mandela, Quaid e Azam, Gandhi and Mao ze Dong would be remembered by the world for their peaceful struggles of making lemonade of lemons thrown upon their nations. Nothing makes a person more respectable than his courage of making lemonade of lemons.

Conclusion

ambivalent ! discuss the same ideas in your introduction as you are discussing in outline but avoid using the same sentences and words. your introduction should be a gist of your essay.and start your introduction by directly writing about the topic. in CSS, checker does not take the difficulty of going through the whole introduction and essay.

bonaparte! your introduction has good and related points but elaborate the Socrates' point or better to skip it,add it somewhere in the main body. you have a variety of ideas, but you wrote so many things together under one heading. it can be a good essay with a strong body, with a moderate body of essay it's not a good outline. please write some paragraphs of this outline and post. and the point,' Life is a challenge for sparrow to go out expose into adversity and to
get their food for survival.' it is not relevant, you may replace it with something else.


and for you Safeer, your outline is not clear .it is a part of outline, not a whole.so, a review is not possible.

[QUOTE=waqarabbasi;890452]bonaparte! your introduction has good and related points but elaborate the Socrates' point or better to skip it,add it somewhere in the main body. you have a variety of ideas, but you wrote so many things together under one heading. it can be a good essay with a strong body, with a moderate body of essay it's not a good outline. please write some paragraphs of this outline and post. and the point,' Life is a challenge for sparrow to go out expose into adversity and to
get their food for survival.' it is not relevant, you may replace it with something else.

Thank you very much for your valuable comment. I will definitely work out other parts as well which you have just mentioned. I am well aware that, my style of essay is very different and the reason is simply because I never joined any institution etc. My work is solely based on genuine writing skills and information which could possibly make it bit different from others. Nevertheless, Please view my introductory part as I tried my best to be relevant and maintain unique touch. Notwithstanding, you may point out any flaw with which you come across.


WHEN LIFE THROWS YOU LEMONS, MAKE LEMONADE

Introduction

Life is a name of constant struggle which is not merely confined to human beings, but also for animals. Life throws you challenges, hardships, torments and adversities; the one who shrewdly endures are the one who is fittest to survive. Life is a maze of uncertainty, which demands enlightenment, positive approach and dedication to stand up in-case of misfortune as well as disappointment to pave the way for ultimate triumph. As Greek Philosopher Socrates famously uttered “An unexamined life is not worth living” which clearly illustrates the significance of examined life with which one could not only make himself strong, but also transform others by spreading the experience of his venture. Life throws lemon in the form of financial crises, war and unemployment; however, the best is he who takes responsibility and embraces the change by turning those difficulties into useful actions. Hence, when life throws you lemon, process it and make sweet lemonade by distributing others to let them know the taste.

The technique I use to write an introduction is:

Firstly, I use 4,5 lines to elaborate k idea. In the 4th or 5th line, I reproduce the title of the essay in a natural logical way.

Secondly, in the next 4,5 lines I adopt one of the two strategies. If the topic is comparing two things, then I use some flowery words to take side. Otherwise, I drag wise men and great nations at this point.

Thirdly, I use a qoute at this stage which is the most relevant to the topic. It also consumes 4,5 lines because every quotation requires a brief plot to sound natural.

Fourthly, I write another 1,2 sentences in the praise of the topic.

Finally, I write the thesis statement which is mostly a mere rephrasal of the title.

I had to spend at least 2 months to devise this strategy.

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Give me the pleasure to suggest the next topic.

I wish that we write next on the topic:

Democracy without accountability is a lame.

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When life gives you lemons make lemonade





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Dear Members, this is my first attempt of writing introduction for essay. Please analyse it critically and point out mistakes, flaws and suggest improvements.

When life throws at us lemons, make lemonade

Life is a challenge as well as blessing. It throws at us lemons so we can taste the sweetness of lemonade. The key to conquer the life is to accept the challenges presented by it and only then it will turn into blessing. Daily thousands perish while those whose who have courage and determination to overcome life survive. The rule is simple: survival of the fittest: and fittest are those among us who knows how to make lemonade from the lemons that life throws at us.